Open Poetry #22 |
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Hapless Junior Member
since 2002-09-22
Posts 10NY, USA |
Hi, first post ![]() The sun pours down my face and all I can think of is you. Basking in your warmth like a late autumn day. Ever fleeting That feeling of being Being with you. I'm kind of a newbie to poetry and I want to share some in a bigger enviornment than my creative writing class, so please gimme some critiques ![]() |
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Larry C![]()
since 2001-09-10
Posts 10286United States |
Hapless, Well I'm no critic. But I had not the courage to start with a post! I'm impressed and welcome to Passions. Write on. Watch out for Sunshine... ![]() If tears could build a stairway and memories a lane, I'd walk right up to heaven and bring you home again. |
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VAS Member Rara Avis
since 2000-11-16
Posts 7450Oregon |
Enjoyed this one, short and vivid. The only thing I can critique is the word being is there twice and I'm thinking you didn't intend that. I think you've said a lot in a few words which is a popular method, now me, I say little in a lot of words. Welcome!! Whether on the shoal or on the shore, |
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Nan
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Member Seraphic
since 1999-05-20
Posts 21191Cape Cod Massachusetts USA |
Welcome to Passion in Poetry - This is a great place for beginners to professionals - We're a family of friends. Settle in, enjoy some good reading, and make some new friends... ...And check your email for a special greeting.. ![]() |
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Sunshine
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Member Empyrean
since 1999-06-25
Posts 63354Listening to every heart |
![]() Don't stop getting all you can from your writing class, and look around our place, because we have a Critical Analysis area where they can really help your poetry move along; we have prose, several other areas where the poetry doesn't move as fast but the friends you meet will last you a lifetime... and most of all, we're open 24/7...so enjoy! |
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Marge Tindal![]() ![]() ![]() ![]()
since 1999-11-06
Posts 42384Florida's Foreverly Shores |
Josh~ 'Basking in your warmth like a late autumn day' Wonderful imagery comes forth in this thought~ Welcome to Passions~ ![]() As you tour our many forums ... take time to drop in on the Poetry Workshop ... lots of sharing and learning of different poetic forms ... AND ... we have a merry-go-round on the playground ! ![]() That's usually where you can find me ... after I've turned in my homework~ ![]() Just a 'heads up' ... teacher lets Newbies clean the erasers~ *Hugs* ~*Marge*~ ~*The pen of the poet never runs out of ink, as long as we breathe.*~ |
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Moon Dust![]() ![]()
since 1999-06-11
Posts 2177Skelmersdale, UK |
Welcome to passions I enjoyed the images. I would also hope to see more of you. If your afraid of the dark, then why did you come? |
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Seymour Tabin Member Empyrean
since 1999-07-07
Posts 31720Tamarac Fla |
Hapless Welcome and enjoyed the write. |
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Hapless Junior Member
since 2002-09-22
Posts 10NY, USA |
Thanks for all the kind words ![]() |
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Nightshade![]() ![]() ![]() ![]()
since 2001-08-31
Posts 13962just out of reach |
Hapless - Welcome to Passions!! I enjoyed your first post. Have fun here. Chris ![]() Life is not measured by breaths you take, but by moments that take your breath away. |
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Mistletoe Angel![]() ![]() ![]()
since 2000-12-17
Posts 32816Portland, Oregon |
![]() ![]() ![]() Yay!!! Oh Josh, you have come to the right place, we love poetry of all kinds and just know you will make a wonderful part of this family! This is a lovely debut, sweet firend, I LOVE IT!!! Welcome to Passions, sweet Josh, may you be inspired by all of us here as we will all be inspired by your lovely words! I can't wait to read more of your lovely words, sweet friend, we all love you so much! You have such a beautiful heart, sweet Josh, thank you for sharing! ![]() ![]() May love and light always shine upon you! Love, Noah Eaton "Underneath your clothes there's an endless story..." |
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Enchantress Member Empyrean
since 2001-08-14
Posts 35113Canada eh. |
WELCOME TO PASSIONS!! Enjoyed your first post... I look forward to seeing more of your work. ~Hugs & Smiles, Nancy~ ~ Time has cast a spell on you |
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ThisDiamond Member Rara Avis
since 2002-02-22
Posts 9353Michigan, USA |
Welcome! Refreshing to see your clear and open style of write. Glad you joined us, and look forward to reading more of your work. ThisDiamond |
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