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Mistletoe Angel

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since 2000-12-17

Posts 32816
Portland, Oregon

0 posted 2002-09-21 02:38 PM

That Which Remains
By: Noah Eaton
9/21/02

Silently standing in the ruins like the Parthenon
Eroded away like a lost Mayan empire
Standing like Octavian without five fingers grasping the scepter
Five kings instincts buried deep in their pockets retired

Crouching like a beggar in a Roman palace
Even Dionysus seems more sober than me
Feel like Charlemagne without a son Pepin to run my garrisons
Not able to hear my own Song of Roland through the streets

Confidentally I thought all our revels now have ended
But I can't get to sleep with this pageant still going on
Feel like a distant half-brother of Timothy Winters
But when I shout "Amen!" there's no throng

And all that which remains
Are epitaphs engraved on the smoke
There's no explanation to how time elapses
But I feel untouched by this gray hoax

Without any heart or remaining breath
I seem to find the reasons come out in a chiffonier
And the moment I hold onto it
Is that same moment I watch it disappear

And I go on, wanting to make good judgment obsolete
Peeling to the truth like the meat of a coconut
And everyone feels so strange around me
They all seem jurisprudent and I feel misinterpreted

And all that which remains
Are the broken bows of principles I sufficed
And the fact that I feel empty
Without your harvest moon ironing these tears I cry...
That always seem to return...
Can you spare some salt?

"Underneath your clothes there's an endless story..."

Shakira

[This message has been edited by Mistletoe Angel (09-21-2002 02:43 PM).]

the_loner_23
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since 2002-06-08

Posts 5479
Jacksonville, Florida, USA

1 posted 2002-09-21 02:44 PM

Powerful words and very sad. Awesome write Noah.

Cold hands means a warm heart

Kit McCallum

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since 2000-04-30

Posts 14774
Ontario, Canada

2 posted 2002-09-21 02:55 PM

"And I go on, wanting to make good judgment obsolete
Peeling to the truth like the meat of a coconut
And everyone feels so strange around me
They all seem jurisprudent and I feel misinterpreted"

Incredible imagery laid out throughout this entire piece Noah. Truly an excellent write. You've capture your feelings here in so many ways ... I've got pictures dancing all through my mind. Very well done (and I loved that coconut line above ... )

Best wishes,
/Kit

VAS
Member Rara Avis

since 2000-11-16

Posts 7450
Oregon

3 posted 2002-09-21 03:30 PM

well, I'm having trouble interpreting, because I forgot to bring my brain with me...I can't keep from heading to the rest of the house in my thoughts as I'm having dinner guests and I must remove the sty from the living room, kitchen and dinging area.

I'll try to come back when I have one...a brain, that is.

Whether on the shoal or on the shore,
I'll seek the lighthouse evermore.

Enchantress
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since 2001-08-14

Posts 35113
Canada eh.

4 posted 2002-09-21 04:51 PM

Noah...my dear sidekick!!
You have outdone yourself with this write!
Your imagery and vocabulary are amazing!
You are oh so wise beyond your years!
~Hugs sweetie~

~ Time has cast a spell on you
So you won't ever forget me ~

ThunderMage
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since 2002-06-20

Posts 812
Canada

5 posted 2002-09-21 07:12 PM

That was great.

What is life without poetry and adventure?
"Little sister" is just another way of saying "Guardian Angel"!

Gentle Spirit
Member Patricius

since 2000-10-09

Posts 13989

6 posted 2002-09-21 07:16 PM

Noah I love seeing your words grow and take on such beauty. Well done dear friend.

If I have touched one heart through my words, then I have acheived my dream...

Nightshade

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since 2001-08-31

Posts 13962
just out of reach

7 posted 2002-09-21 07:45 PM

Noah, such a sad but wonderful write dear one. hugs, Chris

Life is not measured by breaths you take, but by moments that take your breath away.

vandana

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since 1999-10-22

Posts 10463
USA

8 posted 2002-09-21 09:45 PM

nice write

Madame Chipmunk
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since 2001-12-05

Posts 8296
Michigan

9 posted 2002-09-22 01:01 AM

I love your vivid imagery, Noah...
Another lovely piece...
Thanks for sharing your lovely word-pictures with us.

~ late night chipmunk hugs

Lyra

copyright2002 Lyra Nesius

"poetry is life distilled" Gwendolyn Brooks

Singing Sparrow
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since 2002-05-12

Posts 94

10 posted 2002-09-22 04:07 PM

wow, powerfully haunting, you are very wise beyond your years

SS

ThisDiamond
Member Rara Avis

since 2002-02-22

Posts 9353
Michigan, USA

11 posted 2002-09-22 04:16 PM

My friend Noah,
This piece speaks to me, not of fantasy, but of the depths of pain...
As love can lift us high beyond all imagination...so can it crash into a hard reality. Take heart dear friend, we cannot lose what we did not find. ThisDiamond

BSC

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since 2000-02-04

Posts 2919
New York, USA

12 posted 2002-09-22 04:47 PM

Simply incredible Noah ~ an outstanding write full of such imagery, I too have pictures dancing through my head...just wonderful. Bonnie

Bill Charles
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since 2000-07-11

Posts 10619
highways, & byways, for now

13 posted 2002-09-22 09:36 PM

Noah - all I can say is wow, and whoa... I feel a book coming perhaps, yes?

BC

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