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A rainbird dies
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A rainbird dies |
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bsquirrel
since 2000-01-03
Posts 7855
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Its shape stretched and stuttered over the water. The shadow of bird, the shadows of rain spreading the sea were the same. A hand slapped the waves; white glove remained. |
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Cpat Hair
since 2001-06-05
Posts 11793 |
passing showers and their shadows.... nicely painted |
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bsquirrel
since 2000-01-03
Posts 7855 |
Thanks, Ron. This was inspired by something that almost happened near Gloucester, when a bird came very close to a powerline before gliding out over the ocean. What i like about the poem is the hand/glove. Mike |
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ctowen Member Elite
since 2001-10-18
Posts 2286Green Mountains of VT |
We had a squirrel take on a transformer here last week ... both the squirrel and transformer were lost. Power was out for only a few minutes but it was enough to interrupt the early morning routine of my hometown ... It looked nothing like the image you portrayed, yours had a lot more life to it!! Nice work. |
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Nightshade
since 2001-08-31
Posts 13962just out of reach |
I love the way you express yourself. I am always interested to see what you have written this time. Enjoyed. Chris Life is not measured by breaths you take, but by moments that take your breath away. |
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WhileIWasGone Member
since 2002-07-18
Posts 486 |
Very nice work M....enjoyed very much. H. |
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Earth Angel Member Empyrean
since 2002-08-27
Posts 40215Realms of Light |
"A hand slapped the waves; white glove remained." Sheer poetry! ~ smiles ~ |
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Kit McCallum
Administrator
Member Laureate
since 2000-04-30
Posts 14774Ontario, Canada |
Excellent imagery ... and captured in so few lines Mike. You made me ponder the visuals in this piece ... and I enjoy that. Well done.  Best wishes, /Kit |
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bsquirrel
since 2000-01-03
Posts 7855 |
Thank you everyone, for enjoying that humble little scene. Mike |
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Poet deVine
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Member Seraphic
since 1999-05-26
Posts 22612Hurricane Alley |
This is exactly why I enjoy reading poetry. Sometimes you find a gem lingering at the bottom of the page just waiting to be unearthed. I like this Mikey.  |
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Mistletoe Angel
since 2000-12-17
Posts 32816Portland, Oregon |
 (smiles) Oh Michael, I just love how you turn images into such sheer poetry, I love it, the feel and rhythm of this is extraordinary, we all love you so much! You have such a beautiful heart, sweet Michael, thank you for sharing!  May love and light always shine upon you! Love, Noah Eaton "Underneath your clothes there's an endless story..." |
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Madame Chipmunk Member Rara Avis
since 2001-12-05
Posts 8296Michigan |
You do this so very beautifully, Mr.Squirrel.... Vivid imagery with so few words...  ~ hugs and acornsLyra |
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bsquirrel
since 2000-01-03
Posts 7855 |
Thank you, guys and gals, for enjoying this poem. |
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dgvarner Member Elite
since 2000-05-13
Posts 3552High Springs, Florida |
very nice write... enjoyed the imagery..! hugs, g "dont cry because its over, smile because it happened...!" -unknown |
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VAS Member Rara Avis
since 2000-11-16
Posts 7450Oregon |
I like this a lot, it has a power about it, but I have to ashamedly admit, I don't get the hand slap...etc part. I don't get the metaphor of it. Whether on the shoal or on the shore, |
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bsquirrel
since 2000-01-03
Posts 7855 |
Thank you both. VAS, the bird slaps the waves, a body remains. (the hand is removed from the glove) |
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Sunshine
Administrator
Member Empyrean
since 1999-06-25
Posts 63354Listening to every heart |
I would tell you the images this brought... but they keep changing... |
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bsquirrel
since 2000-01-03
Posts 7855 |
Thank you, Sunshine. That's the best compliment a poet can receive... |
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