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Looking Back |
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Magnus
since 2001-10-10
Posts 14135South Carolina, USA 
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The walk of you toward me as my heart walked away in hide.. I wanted to, I really did, but I... My.... I couldn’t... When eyes can only say what my tongue tripped over...stumbling, falling... Failing to say one simple word... A word which bridges oceans, spans galaxies Understood well..... Yet, knowing all I know, I still could not utter the simple word as my eyes watched my feet and my heart hid among the cracks of the walk as we converged... You know the word.... As your eyes fleetingly met mine, before I again counted the cracks... Then I knew I had just made that one mistake again.... You said “hello” as I counted cracks and screamed in my mind.... saying goodbye once again.... Though we never met... I looked back, knowing you were gone... But you surprised me.... You looked back too.... Turning, a smile on my face....as my heart came out thumping wildly...... My eyes saying hello as your’s said... I understand.... |
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the_loner_23 Member Ascendant
since 2002-06-08
Posts 5479Jacksonville, Florida, USA |
This is good Cold hands means a warm heart |
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SmartChick Member Rara Avis
since 2001-09-23
Posts 7081On A Journey To The Unknown |
This is a beautiful poem, Magnus. Sounds a little sad. |
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Magnus
since 2001-10-10
Posts 14135South Carolina, USA |
Thanx Loner... Thanx Sue, mostly just the struggle of a shy man...trying to and almost failing to break the communication barrier....Funny, but I relate to that well from days of old... |
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Martie
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Member Empyrean
since 1999-09-21
Posts 28049California |
Barry I could feel the discomfort of trying to form just one little word...and from someone who knows about shyness...I understand too. |
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vandana
since 1999-10-22
Posts 10463USA |
nice  |
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ThisDiamond Member Rara Avis
since 2002-02-22
Posts 9353Michigan, USA |
Hmmm... The heart of a strong man is most tender...we fail to understand this so often. ThisDiamond |
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Nightshade
since 2001-08-31
Posts 13962just out of reach |
Awwwww.....dear Magnus, what a touching, honest poem. I wouldn't let you get away without at least a smile and maybe a wink. Enjoyed. Chris  Life is not measured by breaths you take, but by moments that take your breath away. |
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Sunshine
Administrator
Member Empyrean
since 1999-06-25
Posts 63354Listening to every heart |
So that's what is wrong with the teens of yesteryear...we weren't listening to the more sensitive parts of our hearts.... well done sir.... |
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NewEnglandlazurlu Member Rara Avis
since 2002-01-04
Posts 7470A Mountain Paradise |
Barry, as I sit here, I can see a young man, shuffling his feet and twirling his fingers with a look of desperation on his face, so desperately wanting to say words that won't come forth. And haven't we all at one time or another been in this situation. Very well done and I so appreciated it. Hugs, Marti Every now and then take a good look at something not made |
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ctowen Member Elite
since 2001-10-18
Posts 2286Green Mountains of VT |
Moments like these are truly golden .... next time, ask her if she has a sister!!! Amazing what the mind holds and the heart translates. Another excellent piece Barry! |
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Madame Chipmunk Member Rara Avis
since 2001-12-05
Posts 8296Michigan |
I have always loved men who were a bit on the shy side, Barry... I think lots of women do because it presents us with an air of mystery, which makes us want to know more. I loved the way you described it though... Having never been shy, myself... I would never have understood it, but you explained with such beauty that it makes me understand a lot better now. Thanks for sharing it with us.  ~ hugs for a sensitive shy manLyra |
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Auguste
since 2000-02-16
Posts 3953By the sea |
I believe I've counted those cracks a few times myself. Nicely penned! |
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ShadowRider Senior Member
since 2001-07-14
Posts 1038USA |
A heart so raw from fear it is the turning away from all we hold dear that keeps tomorrow from today. Splendidly written, Mag! again, in that stumbling numbness where we see a new face that once was one we new well jeff |
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Enchantress Member Empyrean
since 2001-08-14
Posts 35113Canada eh. |
Turning, a smile on my face....as my heart came out thumping wildly...... My eyes saying hello as your’s said... I understand.... --------------------------------------------- Barry, this is so incredibly beautiful! Amazing the range your writing talents have. ~Hugs~ ~ Time has cast a spell on you |
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CSKpoet Senior Member
since 2002-07-12
Posts 845Island in Paradise |
This "shy" poem is written so painfully well...I have never been shy (rather outgoing) but have always been attracted to the quieter, more shy man... I find the idea kinda intriguing and mysterious a bit. You write of it with well expressed words, dear poet and with Magnus charm. hugs, Cher Poetry is: |
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Earth Angel Member Empyrean
since 2002-08-27
Posts 40215Realms of Light |
..."I understand".... ~ smiles~ EA [This message has been edited by Earth Angel (09-20-2002 07:51 AM).] |
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