Held In Convictions of Love

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Open Poetry #22

Held In Convictions of Love

WhileIWasGone
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since 2002-07-18

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0 posted 2002-09-16 10:53 PM

Held In Convictions of Love

Held in convictions of love,
Lighting your candles in the wind
With the whimpering soft caress
Of each soulful heartfelt word
That shall lead to yet another cliché,
You attempt to convince me
That the world is picturesque
And your heart is made of glass.

There’s something else to write,
Had you courage to confess:
Each Hallmark line, well-written rhyme,
Also comes with scars and shards.
Love, alas, is dark as well as light,
Piercing with precise importunity;
Without the mettle of this avowal,
One cannot write love with any class.

the_loner_23
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since 2002-06-08

Posts 5479
Jacksonville, Florida, USA

1 posted 2002-09-16 11:16 PM

I love it

Cold hands means a warm heart

Miah
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since 2002-08-26

Posts 1062
Pennsylvania

2 posted 2002-09-17 01:02 AM

Great poem, I especially like the line

"Each Hallmark line, well-written rhyme, "

Opeth
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since 2001-12-13

Posts 1543
The Ravines

3 posted 2002-09-17 08:53 AM

I have two points to make about this well written poem.

"You attempt to convince me
That the world is picturesque
And your heart is made of glass."

~ Now some readers could criticize the "...heart is made of glass." line as a cliche, however the writer here takes a cliche and gives it an entirely different meaning based on the previous two lines. Excellent twist to the ol' heart made of glass, indeed.

"There’s something else to write,
Had you courage to confess:"

~ Very good setup for the rest of this stanza. How many times do we ignore or pretend the bad side of a relationship doesn't exist and sugarcoat the rest?

"Each Hallmark line, well-written rhyme,
Also comes with scars and shards.
Love, alas, is dark as well as light,
Piercing with precise importunity;
Without the mettle of this avowal,
One cannot write love with any class."

~ And is described quite elogantly with a great reference/analogy to good ol' Hallmark card.

I enjoyed this very much.

WhileIWasGone
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since 2002-07-18

Posts 486

4 posted 2002-09-17 01:29 PM

Thank you all for reading and the great replies....

DeaDiAmore

bsquirrel

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since 2000-01-03

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5 posted 2002-09-25 06:25 PM

Exactly, H.!

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