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Magnus

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since 2001-10-10

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South Carolina, USA

0 posted 2002-09-16 06:37 PM

If one does have the grace to bare the soul
to let the cloth on skin then fall to floor
as did of two the taste in garden toll
the bell of sin upon the eyes explore.

The scale of skin deceives the minds anew
as fruits so fresh did touch the lips in haste.
Slithering then away as serpents do
before the words were heard in hurried chaste.

But when the touch of vine did bring to dwell
the lust of man for she who gave the fruit.
Then came the start of thoughts then born of hell
as two did stand and stare the birthday suit.

Before the snake does whisper in one’s ear
give thought to that which one did surely hear.

the_loner_23
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since 2002-06-08

Posts 5479
Jacksonville, Florida, USA

1 posted 2002-09-16 06:41 PM

This is a cool poem

Cold hands means a warm heart

CSKpoet
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since 2002-07-12

Posts 845
Island in Paradise

2 posted 2002-09-16 07:45 PM

very cool and well done< Barry..yep it tis the very thing that does get us in all sorts of trouble...this was a very interesting point of view and excellent as is your usual.
take care, Cher

Poetry is:
Passion, imagination and intellect running together.

Aloha with warmest regards, Cheryl Stewart Koomoa

Magnus

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since 2001-10-10

Posts 14135
South Carolina, USA

3 posted 2002-09-16 07:50 PM

Thanx Julie, glad you got a grin from this
one...

Cher, don't ask me why I did it this way,
I am clueless about that....pleased you
enjoyed it...take care...

WhileIWasGone
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since 2002-07-18

Posts 486

4 posted 2002-09-16 07:56 PM

Very nice work Magnus....enjoyed much!

DeaDiAmore

Mistletoe Angel

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since 2000-12-17

Posts 32816
Portland, Oregon

5 posted 2002-09-16 07:59 PM

Wow, I don't think Cheryl could have summarized this any better, this is excellent, we must always respect and tame the serpent as we taste that very apple with delicacy, this is well-said, we all love you so much! You have such a beautiful heart, sweet Barry, thank you for sharing!

May love and light always shine upon you!

Love,
Noah Eaton

"Underneath your clothes there's an endless story..."

Shakira

Nightshade

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since 2001-08-31

Posts 13962
just out of reach

6 posted 2002-09-16 08:03 PM

Good message here Magnus - well done. Chris

Life is not measured by breaths you take, but by moments that take your breath away.

Earth Angel
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since 2002-08-27

Posts 40215
Realms of Light

7 posted 2002-09-17 10:58 AM

Dear Adam, it wasn't all my fault!

Eve

Dear Barry---this was brilliant!

Linda

Seymour Tabin
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since 1999-07-07

Posts 31720
Tamarac Fla

8 posted 2002-09-17 11:44 AM

Magnus
Good one Barry, enjoyed the read.

vandana

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since 1999-10-22

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USA

9 posted 2002-09-17 07:33 PM

cool poem,yes indeed!!!!!!

Madame Chipmunk
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since 2001-12-05

Posts 8296
Michigan

10 posted 2002-09-17 07:35 PM

Oh yes, Barry...
Maybe apples should be made illegal

A beautiful poem

Lyra

copyright2002 Lyra Nesius

"poetry is life distilled" Gwendolyn Brooks

Sunshine

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since 1999-06-25

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Listening to every heart

11 posted 2002-09-17 07:46 PM

Baring the soul is hard enough...
there are so many veils...

Well done, sir...

jwesley
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since 2000-04-30

Posts 7563
Spring, Texas

12 posted 2002-09-17 09:37 PM

well... me for one, never had a problem staring at the birthday suite - though I have to admit, like Adam, sometimes, I too, got in trouble for doing so...hee, hee...

Loved it Barry...

jwesley

VAS
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since 2000-11-16

Posts 7450
Oregon

13 posted 2002-09-18 09:25 AM

The form and feel of this put me in mind of the old masters, though I've only read a few.

A second read was in order and even more enjoyable than the first...when I had the full gist of what this was 'really' about and could read it all the way with an informed eye/mind.

Superbly done, finely captured historic event and lesson.

Your summation/caveat at the end is excellent!

Whether on the shoal or on the shore,
I'll seek the lighthouse evermore.

Martie

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California

14 posted 2002-09-18 11:53 AM

Barry

A thougtful, and well done poem.

catalinamoon

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since 2000-06-03

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The Shores of Alone

15 posted 2002-09-18 03:20 PM

Best telling of that story I have ever heard.
Hugs
Sandra

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