Open Poetry #22 |
Black of wing, Raven Sings (Duet with Noah) |
Magnus
since 2001-10-10
Posts 14135South Carolina, USA |
Through the darkness you eavesdrop: Pervading this purple heart rendered in the cold. Calling from the chamber door of my asylum: "Nevermore!" your ruffled voice quoth. You brought me to the dark of night on blackened wings of Raven's soar. To sit before the candle's light in search of this and Nevermore. Whilst I sit here, alone, paying a ransom To you, underneath a masque of red Death. The ebony clock strikes twelve, eerie yet handsome, I stupor, you reply through these frigid depths: I am your raven, of darkened sheen. I sit so quietly upon this fence. I wait and watch, I tuck and preen till morn is come, I know not whence. So don't speak, don't breathe, just listen To I, the messanger of the night. Lend not half a mind to fear but half a mind to reason I beseech you, kind sir, within the walls of your plight Your words of drear and nightmare tale that grasp one's soul in gloom of night. In wait of my sharp tap to foretell I have come to seek in raven's flight. So now knowing I have not the soul to kill this raven, I pause with your worship. As the hearth slowly dies out in this winter cold in delirium, incarceration, I know not, sitting here motionless. Silent I sit in nightmare dark in wait to tap and rap the door. I call to you in silent hark if but to say till Nevermore. |
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Miah Senior Member
since 2002-08-26
Posts 1062Pennsylvania |
This is so good, I enjoyed reading this. I hope to one day be able to write this well. |
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SmartChick Member Rara Avis
since 2001-09-23
Posts 7081On A Journey To The Unknown |
This is a wonderful duet. You two are great. |
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Magnus
since 2001-10-10
Posts 14135South Carolina, USA |
Miah, I once said the same thing...with patience, practice and digging into a few books.....you can get where you want to be as a poet... above all, stay here at PiP and you will absorb much that you want to learn... Sue, thank you dear friend....Noah does very very well in the word department... For his age, he has the vocab. of a Rhoades Scholar.... Impressive... |
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Mistletoe Angel
since 2000-12-17
Posts 32816Portland, Oregon |
(big hugggssssss) Thank you both so much for your lovely comments, we had fun writing this as we both share a love of Edgar Allen Poe's work and many other poets in particular! God Bless You Both! Barry, it is a pleasure to work with you again, I still remember our first duet too and I am blessed to have you as a friend and inspiration who speaks on so many levels of human emotions! You are a very talented part of this poetic family and like a second brother to us all! God Bless You and again, thank you! Love, Noah Eaton "Underneath your clothes there's an endless story..." Shakira [This message has been edited by Mistletoe Angel (09-14-2002 10:17 PM).] |
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WhileIWasGone Member
since 2002-07-18
Posts 486 |
Very Nice work Magnus and Noah...enjoyed much! DeaDiAmore |
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Bill Charles Member Patricius
since 2000-07-11
Posts 10619highways, & byways, for now |
Barry - great duet with Noah. You are great together... BC |
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catalinamoon
since 2000-06-03
Posts 9543The Shores of Alone |
Oh this is wonderful, raven wing cheers to you both. Sandra |
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Seymour Tabin Member Empyrean
since 1999-07-07
Posts 31720Tamarac Fla |
Barry and Noah, You do very well together. This is great. |
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the_loner_23 Member Ascendant
since 2002-06-08
Posts 5479Jacksonville, Florida, USA |
This was an awesome duet. Cold hands means a warm heart |
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Mistletoe Angel
since 2000-12-17
Posts 32816Portland, Oregon |
DeaDiAmore: Thank you so much for your wonderful compliments. Barry is a terrific talented poet and I enjoy working with hi so much as I know so many others that write with him have! Bill Charles: Awwwwww, thanks. I too think we work great together as we share a love of the classics and poetry in general. You are a wonderful friend! Sandra: Oh no, not the raven wings! LOL! I guess for now those will have to work! Thank you so much for your kindness, you are a wonderful delight to us all! Seymour: Thank you so so much, Barry thought of this wonderful idea and I am blessed to be a part of this ravens flight! Hugs to you! : Awwwwwww, thanks, perhaps soon we can write a duet together too! Thank you all so so much! Love, Noah Eaton "Underneath your clothes there's an endless story..." Shakira [This message has been edited by Mistletoe Angel (09-14-2002 10:25 PM).] |
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Enchantress Member Empyrean
since 2001-08-14
Posts 35113Canada eh. |
Excellent duet here fellas! Enjoyed the read so much! ~Hugs to you both~ ~ Time has cast a spell on you |
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Martie
Moderator
Member Empyrean
since 1999-09-21
Posts 28049California |
Barry and Noah Bravo! Excellent and much enjoyed! |
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ThisDiamond Member Rara Avis
since 2002-02-22
Posts 9353Michigan, USA |
Now, that is what I call a "Keeper"! Great work you guys! ThisDiamond |
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Suetang Member Ascendant
since 2001-03-07
Posts 5187Melbourne, Australia |
Barry & Noah Yet another fine collaboration between two of the kindest souls. I really enjoyed this one. Take care......Sue I am in motion |
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Nightshade
since 2001-08-31
Posts 13962just out of reach |
Very well done gentlemen!! Chris Life is not measured by breaths you take, but by moments that take your breath away. |
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ShadowRider Senior Member
since 2001-07-14
Posts 1038USA |
The pairing of you two on a page can only mean the creation of Magnificant proportions Noah-way it could be anything less than that. *smiling* Nicely done by two expert composers! jeff [This message has been edited by ShadowRider (09-16-2002 01:17 AM).] |
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Earth Angel Member Empyrean
since 2002-08-27
Posts 40215Realms of Light |
Barry & Noah--- This collaboration is nothing short of AWESOME!!! This is the stuff of which classic poetry is made---and it was even more special for me because it was written by two of my favorite people and poets at PIP! Congratulations! I love it---TRULY!!!! ~ hugs and smiles across the miles to you both~ Linda |
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Singing Sparrow Member
since 2002-05-12
Posts 94 |
Barry nice, you two make such a great team, I Noah it! SS |
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vandana
since 1999-10-22
Posts 10463USA |
enjoyed |
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