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Cpat Hair

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since 2001-06-05

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0 posted 2002-09-12 06:39 PM

This time of year
Evening climbs the sky
In softer tones.
Half octaves of color
To in timeless step
Lull the eyes with
Melodies whispered
From someplace
Longed for.

Portending the changes
Sundogs brace Sol
As sentinels guard
All royalty when
Passing through
Environs known to be
Less friendly
Than home

I watch shortened days end
Thinking of how welcome
At times the cooler breeze was
And with gentle touch
Of memory think of you
Wrapped in passions throes
Crying out my name

Once upon a Fall

Marge Tindal

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since 1999-11-06

Posts 42384
Florida's Foreverly Shores

1 posted 2002-09-12 06:44 PM

CPatHair~
You have some exquisite imagery-laced thoughts here~
*sighs* from Florida~
*Hugs*
~*Marge*~

~*The pen of the poet never runs out of ink, as long as we breathe.*~
noles1@totcon.com

Sunshine

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Listening to every heart

2 posted 2002-09-12 06:47 PM

And don't I love my sundogs...
just as I appreciate your poetry...

thanks for coming by, Cap'n...

Aimster
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since 2000-02-19

Posts 4297
Charlotte, NC

3 posted 2002-09-12 06:54 PM

this is a beautiful piece of poetry
sweet friend...lovely images you create
with your pen. take care

amy

"if irish eyes are smiling...they are probably up to something" :)

Earth Angel
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since 2002-08-27

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Realms of Light

4 posted 2002-09-12 07:12 PM

"Once upon a fall"---I love the title---it is so apt for this lovely story you have written. And might I add, that it was very effective adding it at the end of the poem as well.

This was a very pleasant read for me.

Earth Angel

Nightshade

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since 2001-08-31

Posts 13962
just out of reach

5 posted 2002-09-12 07:40 PM

Very nice piece of work. Enjoyed. Chris

Life is not measured by breaths you take, but by moments that take your breath away.

Tiersdin
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since 2000-11-17

Posts 2364
east coast

6 posted 2002-09-12 07:47 PM

lovely words, Ron...

*smiles*
~tier

"I shall never bond again, as I have bonded with you..."

Martie

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7 posted 2002-09-12 08:02 PM

Ron

Fall, a time of changing..and of such beauty..you capture it well, along with the memory touch of human that you always bring to your poetry. Beautiful!

Magnus

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since 2001-10-10

Posts 14135
South Carolina, USA

8 posted 2002-09-12 08:06 PM

Thanx Cpat...yes the days are starting to
slowly change and head toward a time of
year that can be most awesomely beautiful..

Enchantress
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since 2001-08-14

Posts 35113
Canada eh.

9 posted 2002-09-12 08:08 PM

"And with gentle touch
Of memory think of you
Wrapped in passions throes
Crying out my name

Once upon a Fall"
-------------------------------------------
You poet sir astound me with the feelings
within your written words.
Fall is one of my favourite times of year..
But the aching in this ending...touched me deep inside.
Thank you for this one~
~Hugs, Nancy~

Alwye

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In the space between moments

10 posted 2002-09-12 09:55 PM

Absolutely gorgeous imagery here. I love great imagery and you've definitely done the job.

*Krista Knutson*

"The truth is in the voice and also in life's small things." -Maya Angelou

WhiteRose
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since 2002-07-23

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somebody's dungeon

11 posted 2002-09-12 09:57 PM

This time of year
Evening climbs the sky
In softer tones.
Half octaves of color
To in timeless step
Lull the eyes with
Melodies whispered
From someplace
Longed for.

Once upon a lovely poem, I read, and enjoyed the whispered read of this.

Speak to me in whispers,
I'll listen with my heart.

BluesSerenade
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since 2001-10-23

Posts 10549
By the Seaside

12 posted 2002-09-13 12:12 PM

Your words read so good
and hurt so bad.

This was a graceful fall~
it's the way you say it,
that makes the reader feel...
and that's a good thing!!

Midnitesun

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Gaia

13 posted 2002-09-13 12:49 PM

I love those soft, half octaves of color.

Janet Marie
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since 2000-01-22

Posts 18554

14 posted 2002-09-13 10:14 AM

This time of year
Evening climbs the sky
In softer tones.
Half octaves of color
To in timeless step
Lull the eyes with
Melodies whispered
From someplace
Longed for.
========================
I watch shortened days end
Thinking of how welcome
At times the cooler breeze was
And with gentle touch
Of memory think of you
Wrapped in passions throes
Crying out my name

Once upon a Fall
=============================

Im always looking for a soft place to fall...
poetry like this works well

A tender blend of color and emote Capt.
as always....well done poet sir.
jm
ps....Is the cherished Iambe muse feeling inspired of late?

In the space between now and then
I lost the fire, lost a friend
and Ill never be the same again
Still, I believe in the innocence
we gave away.

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