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mycafe
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0 posted 2002-09-12 06:30 AM


Which Is You?

Sitting right in front of me
is a face I once knew and loved
It's you...

I see the memories
as I see you now

Which is real?
You, the one whose eyes
I can't make out their expression,
Or me in living illusion?

You are near,
yet far...
Am I reaching out my hand
To touch you in flesh
Or the soul-in-memory?

Which, you tell me
that you wish me to hold...

You're broken into two pieces
I wish I knew where I stand
as you look at me now
I'll choose the piece that's meant for me

Is it that you've forgotten me
Or that you've stopped remembering
Whichever...
I just want to feel real

I don't know about you
But in case you're wondering
It's still me


[This message has been edited by mycafe (09-12-2002 10:56 AM).]

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anya
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since 2002-07-27
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London, UK
1 posted 2002-09-12 08:11 AM


enjoyed this very much, there were some really good lines, 'Is it thatyou've forgotten me or that you've just stopped remembering', I think that was a very clever way to put it, anyway thanks for the read,
anya

[This message has been edited by anya (09-12-2002 08:13 AM).]

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2 posted 2002-09-12 08:15 AM




(big hugggsssssss) Oh Marie, I understand this feeling so very much, though it still hurts stopped being remembered, it hurts even more to me being forgotten and there I wish for your smile in your heart to always shine with love! (sigh) This is powerful, sweet friend, we all love you so much! You have such a beautiful heart, sweet Marie, thank you for sharing!



May love and light always shine upon you!

Love,
Noah Eaton

"Underneath your clothes there's an endless story..."

Shakira

BluesSerenade
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3 posted 2002-09-13 12:21 PM


I'll choose the piece that's meant for me

I really enjoyed  this, and that line most of all.  
It's hard to fit the pieces together, save the one for you/him/her/she/he/us.

Lovely writing mycafe~~~

chitsank
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since 2002-08-13
Posts 88

4 posted 2002-09-13 12:26 PM


a lovely write. thanx for sharing.
Suetang
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since 2001-03-07
Posts 5187
Melbourne, Australia
5 posted 2002-09-13 06:46 PM


Hello Marie

I felt the pain and longing in this and I only hope it wasn't written from personal experience.  I wish you well and hope things are fine.

Take care......Sue

I am in motion
I am blue
Love is an ocean
I'm anchored in you
- Shawn Mullins

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