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serenity blaze Member Empyrean
since 2000-02-02
Posts 27738
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a blanket from a dryer, warm draped in comfort shoulders bare a cloud across a red sun sky a breeze to fill my lungs with air a gentle palm upon my cheek... a kiss of wish that I dream sweet, water, clean and crisp on tongue easing parch of longing's drought. I feel old you make me young and ease the sweat of nightmare's doubt... you've become my only one I fight the urge to dance and shout. company, and promised care moistened nectar easing pout restoring faith from loveless fate-- I prance a peacock's boast of flout. You, have made me beautiful your company a key that fits the empty space within my chest transforming my remorselessness-- the core of me, an atom, split-- You are my priest. I have confessed. |
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Logan Senior Member
since 2001-05-28
Posts 1641Arkansas |
Ahh, Serenity, very gentle smile. And is the confession no more than all of us want? You make it sing with softness... |
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the_loner_23 Member Ascendant
since 2002-06-08
Posts 5479Jacksonville, Florida, USA |
 Cold hands means a warm heart |
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bsquirrel
since 2000-01-03
Posts 7855 |
Serenity, Of love and (lust) and completion among split atoms. Beautiful! Mikey |
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vandana
since 1999-10-22
Posts 10463USA |
enjoyed |
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Dark Angel Member Patricius
since 1999-08-04
Posts 10095 |
Wow! very powerful, luscious. Love it. Maree  |
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brian sites Senior Member
since 2002-06-25
Posts 1475usa |
the album -- velvet underground and nico track 9 can't say it any better b |
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bsquirrel
since 2000-01-03
Posts 7855 |
I prefer the Black Angel's Death Song, bri. Of course, now I'm going to look up track 9 and see it IS that -- or isn't.Mikey |
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Madame Chipmunk Member Rara Avis
since 2001-12-05
Posts 8296Michigan |
You, have made me beautiful your company a key that fits the empty space within my chest transforming my remorselessness-- the core of me, an atom, split-- You are my priest. I have confessed. This is so beautiful it should be illegal, Karen...  ~ hugs from my coreLyra |
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Martie
Moderator
Member Empyrean
since 1999-09-21
Posts 28049California |
serenity you touch with magic mix...earth and sky and love done best. This is beautiful! |
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WhiteRose Member Elite
since 2002-07-23
Posts 3208somebody's dungeon |
You are my priest. I have confessed This line a powerful ending. Gave me shivers and I'm not even sure why! A most intense write. |
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serenity blaze Member Empyrean
since 2000-02-02
Posts 27738 |
Sometimes I find I am never quite certain of my feelings until I actually "confess" them---grin--that's right, sometimes I even ignore MYSELF...chuckles, and thanks to all, but most of all to my inspiration. |
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Auguste
since 2000-02-16
Posts 3953By the sea |
I wish I could write like you. How do you do this? |
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Magnus
since 2001-10-10
Posts 14135South Carolina, USA |
You certainly have atoned yourself very well with this poem...very expertly done Karen...thanx.. Mag. |
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Earth Angel Member Empyrean
since 2002-08-27
Posts 40215Realms of Light |
Oh, my gawd---I love it! TRULY do! "a blanket from a dryer, warm draped in comfort shoulders bare" "a kiss of wish that I dream sweet" AWESOME! Earth Angel |
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serenity blaze Member Empyrean
since 2000-02-02
Posts 27738 |
Michael Auguste? Thank you, and you flatter me my friend. As I told Christopher once, I don't consider it art or anything--I just get in moods, get a bad buzz, write some bad poetry and the next day, I say, "What?" chuckle, but thank you... Magnus and Earth Angel...ooops...almost typed Earth Angle thank you much, and you just reminded me that I need to drop a reply to that gorgeous duet from the two of you...(sometimes I reads, sometimes I types, and sometimes I just forget...sigh, forgive me) Thanks all. |
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WhileIWasGone Member
since 2002-07-18
Posts 486 |
Very nice work Serenity...I enjoy your work so much. DeaDiAmore |
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Paul Wilson
since 2002-07-07
Posts 4711United States |
Karen...A really wonderful poem. I loved the following lines..Paul I feel old you make me young and ease the sweat of nightmare's doubt... you've become my only one I fight the urge to dance and shout. |
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Sunshine
Administrator
Member Empyrean
since 1999-06-25
Posts 63354Listening to every heart |
...a cloud across a red sun sky... I read this the other day...then I got interrupted. I was interrupted several more  times...and now I'm finally back to say ... thanks! |
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Seymour Tabin Member Empyrean
since 1999-07-07
Posts 31720Tamarac Fla |
Serenity, This is a first WOW for me. I do not know of others but you sure send me. |
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jwesley Member Rara Avis
since 2000-04-30
Posts 7563Spring, Texas |
Loved it all my friend; loved you in love, the glow emanating from your words, the fulfillment, the whole... your soul as it Should be. jwesley |
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Mistletoe Angel
since 2000-12-17
Posts 32816Portland, Oregon |
 (smiles) Awwwwwww, this is sooooooo beautiful, sweet friend, I love this, love is such a strong feeling and while we feel weak when we confess it is is a wonderful feeling being the priest of a heart so dear! (sigh) This is lovely, sweet friend, we all love you so much! You have such a beautiful heart, sweet Karen, thank you for sharing! May love and light always shine upon you! Love, Noah Eaton "Underneath your clothes there's an endless story..." |
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