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Open Poetry #22

Through the Mirror

Masked Intruder

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since 1999-05-23

Posts 1231
Near golden sunsets

0 posted 2002-09-08 05:46 AM

I found him buried in blue
Blisslessly buoyant in a cup half gone
His eyes were lost in unseen clouds
Lines tracing pain across his face

The cup swirled once and twice
in speculative motion, frothing and sinking,
the memory sipped away in timely disgrace.

I turned away as he lowered his head
with tear-shook irresolution
And I waited for the grief to seep
into the musty, bar-darkened air.

At last, he raised his head to look
into my own tear-glazed eyes.
With a single understanding nod
We both reluctanly rose and crawled home.

VAS
Member Rara Avis

since 2000-11-16

Posts 7450
Oregon

1 posted 2002-09-08 10:19 AM

artfully woven save for the 'tear-shook' seems that it should be 'tear-shaken'

It is an extremely clear view of an ill-fated attempt to dull the pain.

Good job.

Whether on the shoal or on the shore,
I'll seek the lighthouse evermore.

ecrivan
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since 2001-12-10

Posts 3923
my own state

2 posted 2002-09-08 10:24 AM

many would just as well drown their sorrows
rather than face more blatant truths...that comes through here very well

the_loner_23
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since 2002-06-08

Posts 5479
Jacksonville, Florida, USA

3 posted 2002-09-08 09:22 PM

Well expressed expressions

Cold hands means a warm heart

Temptress

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Member Rara Avis

since 1999-06-15

Posts 7136
Mobile, AL

4 posted 2002-09-28 12:10 PM

I saved this in my favorites apparently because you are an awesome poet! Loving this again, M'Dear Masked one. Love ya..misting ya.

*Jenn*

"two hearts will build the foundation for one point of light
a duet done with passion"

excerpt from "I Love You"

Midnitesun

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since 2001-05-18

Posts 28647
Gaia

5 posted 2002-09-28 12:22 PM

An interesting sketch. Drowning sorrow with suds, a very common sight, unfortuantley.
Well done, masked man.

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