Open Poetry #22 |
. . . remembering . . . |
Interloper
since 2000-11-06
Posts 8369Deep in the heart |
I see you lying there your head in a puddle of curls the morning sun caressing your creamy thighs and the comforter pulled up to your chin giving unseen security a smile playing at your lips as though remembering … like I am now remembering Fool, said my Muse to me, look in thy heart and write. |
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Magician Member
since 2002-08-14
Posts 126 |
I know when I see Interloper, I know I'm in for a treat, and this one's no exception. Congrats. |
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the_loner_23 Member Ascendant
since 2002-06-08
Posts 5479Jacksonville, Florida, USA |
This is a very good write. Cold hands means a warm heart |
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Earth Angel Member Empyrean
since 2002-08-27
Posts 40215Realms of Light |
The last line was a twist of lemon---very effective!---but if this poem reflected your reality, I'm sorry. Hope you are now making more of these lovely memories! Linda |
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Enchantress Member Empyrean
since 2001-08-14
Posts 35113Canada eh. |
...Exquisitely beautiful... |
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Martie
Moderator
Member Empyrean
since 1999-09-21
Posts 28049California |
Interloper The tender after-time of love or in memory, is oftentimes the sweetest. Loved this! |
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Interloper
since 2000-11-06
Posts 8369Deep in the heart |
Magician ~ I think your first reply to my work. Thank you very much, indeed Loner ~ I think your first time to visit, too. I appreciate your time and reply Linda ~ I'm glad you enjoyed Nancy Lee ~ Like you, dear friend Martie ~ I am so pleased you enjoyed this piece. I had some good inspiration ... Fool, said my Muse to me, look in thy heart and write. [This message has been edited by Interloper (09-05-2002 03:38 PM).] |
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Marsha
since 2000-07-10
Posts 7423Maidstone Kent England |
Bob darling heart oh wonderful truly wonderful, NO ONE does it like you. Truly awesome writing darling heart I’m awe-struck at this piece of starlight’s caress. I really love it and this is a definite keeper, Can you feel me slipping into your mind then brushing against the touch of your soul as it walks in the place of knowledge? Such a pleasure it is to take a stroll in the garden of your mind and sipping from the well of wisdom, and I would do so until time stands still and the stars no longer shine. This really is an exquisite piece from you darling heart I love it utterly utterly, thank you for the drops of sweetness you sprinkle in my soul daily. This is so truly you wonderful I love it utterly utterly utterly love it. That last line like a note in a aria from Les Miserables, truly exquisite, as I said NO ONE does it like you Love and warm stuff As always Mushy Breathe through the heat of our desire |
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WhiteRose Member Elite
since 2002-07-23
Posts 3208somebody's dungeon |
mmmmmmmm...tis truly lovely. |
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Janet Marie Member Laureate
since 2000-01-22
Posts 18554 |
your head in a puddle of curls the morning sun caressing your creamy thighs ================================ Wonderful vivid & softly sensual imagery here poet sir. "puddle of curls" very cool image and analogy. good to see your name back among the blue. In the space between now and then |
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Mistletoe Angel
since 2000-12-17
Posts 32816Portland, Oregon |
(smiles) Awwwwwww, this is sooooooo beautiful, sweet friend, I love it, may true love always have you remembering the most beautiful things and make you sigh! (big hugggssssss) This is superb, sweet friend, we all love you so much! You have such a beautiful heart, sweet friend, thank you for sharing! May love and light always shine upon you! Love, Noah Eaton "Underneath your clothes there's an endless story..." |
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catalinamoon
since 2000-06-03
Posts 9543The Shores of Alone |
Memory is so real, you can almost touch it. Nice write, Doc Nurse Sandra |
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Sunshine
Administrator
Member Empyrean
since 1999-06-25
Posts 63354Listening to every heart |
I think the only thing you left out was the color of her hair... leaving it open for all to enjoy... clever poet! |
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Nightshade
since 2001-08-31
Posts 13962just out of reach |
Dear Poet, this is so soft and lovely. A pleasure to read. Chris Life is not measured by breaths you take, but by moments that take your breath away. |
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Interloper
since 2000-11-06
Posts 8369Deep in the heart |
Marsha ~ Our souls will forever be entwined WhiteRose ~ Thank you very much. Janet Marie ~ Thank you, sweet lady Noah ~ Thank you my good friend! Sandra ~ I'm powerful pleased you liked it, ma'am Sunshine ~ Me ... clever? Gee, I thought you knew me better than that Chris ~ I am so please you liked it Fool, said my Muse to me, look in thy heart and write. |
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Marsha
since 2000-07-10
Posts 7423Maidstone Kent England |
Bob darling man I love this so much I had to bring it back. So bumpity bump up you go. Wonderful writing darling man utterly utterly wonderful Slip softly to the depths of me Rouse my sense to possibility Whisper the words I love to hear Bathe my soul in beauty’s tears Stroke my mind with softened grace Stir within a memory’s trace Call forth the dream of a maybe Tempt me with a silent plea Gift me a dream of poet’s light To sprinkle yes through the night And I will spin a dream for you Flavoured with sighs rainbow hue Besides I had to sprinkle this with a whisper of me here didn't I? Love and warm stuff As always Mushy Breathe through the heat of our desire |
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Toerag Member Ascendant
since 1999-07-29
Posts 5622Ala bam a |
It must be nice to have a memory...I have to depend on those "Kodak" moments....good write....paints a great naughty picture |
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Marge Tindal
since 1999-11-06
Posts 42384Florida's Foreverly Shores |
InterLoper~ Such a lovely remember~ *Hugs* ~*Marge*~ ~*The pen of the poet never runs out of ink, as long as we breathe.*~ |
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nakdthoughts Member Laureate
since 2000-10-29
Posts 19200Between the Lines |
romance lives M |
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Interloper
since 2000-11-06
Posts 8369Deep in the heart |
Mushy ~ You can bump me any time Toe ~ What was that, eh? Marge ~ Hey, hey, hey. Marge replied and I am ecstatic ... What IS the best way to get rid of static? Maureen ~ As long as I live I can GUARANTEE it! Fool, said my Muse to me, look in thy heart and write. |
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suthern
since 1999-07-29
Posts 20723Louisiana |
I've been breathless from coughing the past couple of weeks... but this gives the kind of breathless that sustains this poetry-loving heart. *S* It's beautiful, Interloper! |
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BlueEyes Member
since 2002-08-30
Posts 152TX, USA |
Simply put.... beautiful BlueEyes |
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smitty-j Member
since 2002-09-13
Posts 72Florida, USA |
YOWZA!!....catch me, I feel faint...lovin it J |
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Interloper
since 2000-11-06
Posts 8369Deep in the heart |
suthern ~ So is your reply sweet lady Hope you recover from the "vapors." Blue Eyes ~ I think your first visit to my work welcome and thank you for the simply beautiful comment smitty-j ~ Whoa, gal. Gotta watch where you get a case of the vapors. Do you have a fainting couch handy? Thanks for the 1derful comment Fool, said my Muse to me, look in thy heart and write. |
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BrightStar Member
since 2001-04-08
Posts 219 |
I guess this is one of your very best Admiring you poets at Passions. |
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walker Member Elite
since 2001-02-11
Posts 2240Florida |
You know..., I LOVE THIS!!! |
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Bill Charles Member Patricius
since 2000-07-11
Posts 10619highways, & byways, for now |
Interloper - oh yes, remembering it well... BC |
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