To be seen by you(formerly unnamed)

How to Join	Member's Area	Private Library	Search	Sanctuary		Login
Main Forums	Discussion	Tech Talk	Mature Content	Archives	A home without a wall, Our haven without ends, A circle we all call Our Family of Friends!

Open Poetry #21

To be seen by you(formerly unnamed)

darkling
Member

since 2001-08-28

Posts 90
altered state of mind

0 posted 2002-06-26 12:06 PM

Why do I try so hard?
It's not as if you care.
You take no notice of me,
Your eyes pass right over,
And I'm left there,
feeling hollow.
empty.
I bare my shoulders,
I dye my hair.
I reveal more skin
than I'd ever imagined
I would.
I would do anything
to capture
your attention.
I would die to receive some sign,
any sign, that you knew i existed.
But nothing works.
It's the same, every time.
You look right through me,
and I'm left there,
feeling hollow.
empty.

[This message has been edited by darkling (06-26-2002 12:32 AM).]

darkling
Member

since 2001-08-28

Posts 90
altered state of mind

1 posted 2002-06-26 12:11 PM

ABSOLUTELY BRILLIANT! yes, yes I know. So you are the only one responding to your own poems. You deserve some credit! You're doing good. Half way to racking up a wopping 50 posts so you can upload your picture. Keep writing, and really, I do love you. Love, DARKLING(same as the one who wrote the poem) haha!

its amazing what one single word can do.

Bridget Shenachie
Senior Member

since 2002-01-23

Posts 1056
Kansas USA

2 posted 2002-06-26 12:29 PM

Hi Darkling!

Caught you talking to yourself. 'Course I do that so I think that it's absolutely normal.

This poem is good. Cries out for a name. Something like--Disease to Please or Inside Out or Dying for Attention.

Good writing!

Shenachie

Bridget Shenachie
Senior Member

since 2002-01-23

Posts 1056
Kansas USA

3 posted 2002-06-26 12:51 PM

I like the name. It's suggestive of a sweet yearning. Scratch and forgive my suggestions.

Shenachie

darkling
Member

since 2001-08-28

Posts 90
altered state of mind

4 posted 2002-06-26 12:55 PM

Bridget...your titles were wonderful suggestions. I just have a preference to name my own work, it makes it more personal. And thanks for reading!

its amazing what one single word can do.

	⇧ top of page ⇧
All times are ET (US). All dates are in Year-Month-Day format.