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bsquirrel

Member Rara Avis

since 2000-01-03

Posts 7855

0 posted 2002-06-20 01:45 AM

There's something spiritual about snowy trees and ocean foam.
Something sad about the path that leads to road.
Something bright within the sun that shines on moon.
Something strong that twists the sea into black bows.
Something soft that eases into pillow sleep.
Something hard that keeps me up, awoken sun.
Something right that pastes these words into their place.
Something clearly wrong in a room of only one.

**

Now go visit Dark 3!!! (that's not part of the poem, don't worry -- but visit, or you shall feel my wrathy angstiness!)

Mikeyme

She said burn ... together.
-TON

ethome
Member Patricius

since 2000-05-14

Posts 11858
New Brunswick Canada

1 posted 2002-06-20 02:02 AM

"There's something spiritual about snowy trees and ocean foam.

Something sad about the path that leads to road.

Something strong that twists the sea into black bows.

Something soft that eases into pillow sleep."

These are great lines, all of them containing a poem within, just waiting for a poet to write a perspective from the world of poetic language..........Eric

The role of poetry is to utter the un-utterable; to open up
spaces of consciousness and resistance; to language oppressions; to
re-language historie

Madame Chipmunk
Member Rara Avis

since 2001-12-05

Posts 8296
Michigan

2 posted 2002-06-20 02:12 AM

I just returned from Dark 3, Mr.Squirrel...
I was terrified of your wrathy angstiness (I see you are another one who makes up his own words....my husband told me, the other day that it must be a chipmunk thing...now I can tell him its a rodent thing)

Gee...now I forgot what I was going to say bout this poem...and I have to go back and read it again...its 2 A.M here....I'm tired...after that I will sleep well...
be back in a minute

Lyra

copyright2002 Lyra Nesius

"poetry is life distilled" Gwendolyn Brooks

Tiersdin
Member Elite

since 2000-11-17

Posts 2364
east coast

3 posted 2002-06-20 02:14 AM

Well, you know that I like this!

*wink*
~Tier

"I shall never bond again, as I have bonded with you..."

Madame Chipmunk
Member Rara Avis

since 2001-12-05

Posts 8296
Michigan

4 posted 2002-06-20 02:15 AM

This really is excellent, Mr.Squirrel...
It was worth going back to read again...
I especially loved these lines

Something right that pastes these words into their place.
Something clearly wrong in a room of only one.

lots of meaning here!

~ nighty night hugs my rodent friend

Lyra

copyright2002 Lyra Nesius

"poetry is life distilled" Gwendolyn Brooks

tracie66
Member Elite

since 2000-01-18

Posts 4713
Australia

5 posted 2002-06-20 07:04 AM

Excellent write, loved it
~h~
Tracie

Love is the life of the soul...
It is the harmony of the universe

Sven

Member Laureate

since 1999-11-23

Posts 14937
East Lansing, MI USA

6 posted 2002-06-20 04:36 PM

there is something. . . what is it??

well done. . .

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To the world, you may only be one person. But to one person, you may be the world.

bsquirrel

Member Rara Avis

since 2000-01-03

Posts 7855

7 posted 2002-06-20 09:33 PM

Lyra, you're self-sacrifice is astounding to me. When sleep or reading my poems is an option, do what I do -- sleep! lol. Thanks all, for the great responses.

She said burn ... together.
-TON

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