Open Poetry #21 |
Dirty fire |
bsquirrel
since 2000-01-03
Posts 7855 |
I have a headache the size of fist. Squeezing cortex out of context. Massaging colors that don't exist. Dirty fire throws my eyes. I have a headache the size of nail. It punctures oblongata through. All loss of reflex, just pushing on waiting for the end of song. I have a headache the size of her heart. The threat of more pain seems to adorn us. Reaching out to phantom trickles. I detect her in the pulsing corners. She said burn ... together. |
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devina Member Elite
since 1999-10-28
Posts 3539Cali |
Now THIS is some strong stuff Mike... G's...do I need to prescribe you somethin for the pain my dear??? *just let dr. D know... Open arms can be the most fragile in the world... |
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Seymour Tabin Member Empyrean
since 1999-07-07
Posts 31720Tamarac Fla |
bsquirrel Nothing for that sort of pain, good write, enjoyed. |
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Martie
Moderator
Member Empyrean
since 1999-09-21
Posts 28049California |
Ouch! |
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ThisDiamond Member Rara Avis
since 2002-02-22
Posts 9353Michigan, USA |
The last verse...brilliant. Exceptional as always. ThisDiamond |
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the_loner_23 Member Ascendant
since 2002-06-08
Posts 5479Jacksonville, Florida, USA |
I feel your pain. Very awesome write. Cold hands means a warm heart |
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Enchantress Member Empyrean
since 2001-08-14
Posts 35113Canada eh. |
Oh WoW...nothing short of fantastic! Extremely well done. ~Hugs~ ~Somewhere in my heart I'm always |
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rwood Member Elite
since 2000-02-29
Posts 3793Tennessee |
Tense and striking..feels slightly gothic..but still too warm..too ready for tlc.~wink* Enjoyed this. Sincerely, Reg |
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Dark Stranger Member Patricius
since 2001-03-19
Posts 13631West Coast |
bsq, well done guy, verve stuff in canvas enjoyed it |
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Greeneyes
since 2000-09-09
Posts 9903In Your Poetic Mind |
BSQ~ I too have had these.....great write, good to see you back! Lauren~ Its been a long road |
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hoot_owl_rn Member Patricius
since 1999-07-05
Posts 10750Glen Hope, PA USA |
there's almost as much said between the lines of this one as is written in the poem itself. Great finale!!! |
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Madame Chipmunk Member Rara Avis
since 2001-12-05
Posts 8296Michigan |
Ouch!!!!! some painful anatomy and physiology lessons here, Mr.Squirrel. I didn't know that squirrels got headaches! ~ furry rodent hugs Lyra |
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bsquirrel
since 2000-01-03
Posts 7855 |
Glad you all enjoyed my migraine. She said burn ... together. -TON [This message has been edited by bsquirrel (06-12-2002 12:11 AM).] |
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