Open Poetry #21 |
Roundness or Flatness |
ecrivan Member Elite
since 2001-12-10
Posts 3923my own state |
The roundness of our ways opposes squareness of thoughts exposes the flatness of terrain greets skids pulled up by corded sheaths Fruit rinds peel in helical circles rounded carapaces delineates turtles planets work their way in cycles first mono, bi then tri-cycles whereupon misfortunate deeds rotate return to us unbidden...dictate the changed shift of wheeled gears circuitous events of mastered fears or spin our paltry likenesses around world spin silently feet still lie flat on grounds. [This message has been edited by ecrivan (06-18-2002 10:31 PM).] |
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the_loner_23 Member Ascendant
since 2002-06-08
Posts 5479Jacksonville, Florida, USA |
2 thumbs up. I like this poem a lot. Cold hands means a warm heart |
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ThisDiamond Member Rara Avis
since 2002-02-22
Posts 9353Michigan, USA |
I especially like the gravity of this one... As always an exceptional perspective. ThisDiamond |
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ecrivan Member Elite
since 2001-12-10
Posts 3923my own state |
Diamond I think it's well 'rounded' at the end, don't you?..thanks for sharing |
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Mistletoe Angel
since 2000-12-17
Posts 32816Portland, Oregon |
BRAVO!!! Yes, I agree, it is very well-rounded at the end especially, I feel that really the key in winning respect of others is not to let our thoughts go rounded but to "break the cycle" so to speak, for even though sometimes we may be disagreed with, it is more likely you'll be understood rather than create confusion and become someone else you're not rounding off your opinions and viewpoints! (sigh) This is excellent, sweet friend, we all love you so much! You have such a beautiful heart, sweet Martin, thank you for sharing! May love and light always shine upon you! Love, Noah Eaton "Underneath your clothes there's an endless story..." |
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Madame Chipmunk Member Rara Avis
since 2001-12-05
Posts 8296Michigan |
Martin, I read your other poem about the roundness and the squareness and now this one about the roundness and flatness.... You must be in a geometrical mood tonight... both are excellent.... ~ well rounded hugs Lyra |
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ecrivan Member Elite
since 2001-12-10
Posts 3923my own state |
Lyra, must be due to all the geometry I swallowed when I was younger hehe |
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