Gone - pipTalk Forums

How to Join	Member's Area	Private Library	Search	Sanctuary		Login
Main Forums	Discussion	Tech Talk	Mature Content	Archives	A home without a wall, Our haven without ends, A circle we all call Our Family of Friends!

Daniel van Vliet
Member

since 2001-08-31

Posts 80

0 posted 2002-06-18 07:30 PM

Gone

I think its been almost week,
or maybe just one endless day.
Your voice seems to echo around
my empty head in a sheet of grey.
I have forgotten how to cry,
or maybe I haven't stopped the tears.
I dare not breathe the stale air,
or I'll never again feel you near.
My ability to cope,
is a strange lie that I tell everyone
A pascel abitility to be strong
because I can't face the fact.... your gone.

ethome
Member Patricius

since 2000-05-14

Posts 11858
New Brunswick Canada

1 posted 2002-06-18 07:34 PM

You've captured the emptiness of loneliness in this and have presented it very well.... I enjoyed it very much!
Welcome to Passions.
This is an excellent place to relax and get to know many other talented writers!
Have a nice day!

Suetang
Member Ascendant

since 2001-03-07

Posts 5187
Melbourne, Australia

2 posted 2002-06-18 07:35 PM

Hello Daniel

I could almost hear your heart breaking and see the pain in your eyes. A very well written piece with very real emotions.
I'll look forward to reading more of your work.

Take care.....Sue

Suetang

Titia Geertman
Member Ascendant

since 2001-05-07

Posts 5182
Netherlands

3 posted 2002-06-18 07:35 PM

Hey Daniel, you must be a Dutchie too, at least your name is LOL
Where have you been hiding all this time??

Love your poem, sad, but beautiful sad

Titia

A rose is a rose is a rose...I guess...
Check out my new website: lookheretitia.fcpages.com (I didn't 'link' this, so it won't take too much space).I

Enchantress
Member Empyrean

since 2001-08-14

Posts 35113
Canada eh.

4 posted 2002-06-18 07:37 PM

Hauntingly sad,....beautiful write.
Enjoyed so much!
~Hugs, Nancy~

~Somewhere in my heart I'm always
dancing with you in the summer rain~

Goodknight
Member Elite

since 2002-06-15

Posts 2386
Ohio, USA

5 posted 2002-06-18 07:48 PM

you have captured the essence of loneliness and it drips from my heart as I read your poem - thanks for the words...Paul

Marge Tindal

Member Empyrean

since 1999-11-06

Posts 42384
Florida's Foreverly Shores

6 posted 2002-06-18 10:31 PM

Daniel~

'I have forgotten how to cry,
or maybe I haven't stopped the tears.'

That just speaks volumes of sadness ....~
*Hugs*
~*Marge*~

~*The pen of the poet never runs out of ink, as long as we breathe.*~
noles1@totcon.com

Mistletoe Angel

Member Empyrean

since 2000-12-17

Posts 32816
Portland, Oregon

7 posted 2002-06-18 10:34 PM

(big hugggssssss) Oh Daniel, this is so very sad, sweet friend, my heart goes out to you and I wish for true joy to fill your heart and for love to erase the wounds and fill you with rapture! (sigh) My thoughts are with you, sweet friend, we all love you so much! You have such a beautiful heart, sweet Daniel, thank you for sharing!

May love and light always shine upon you!

Love,
Noah Eaton

"Underneath your clothes there's an endless story..."

Shakira

A Romantic Heart
Member Ascendant

since 1999-09-03

Posts 5496
Forever In Your Heart

8 posted 2002-06-19 12:27 PM

Loneliness is hard, it makes the heart thirst for affection, tenderness, a need to be loved

Tiersdin
Member Elite

since 2000-11-17

Posts 2364
east coast

9 posted 2002-06-19 04:29 PM

Well written...

enjoyed this...

~Tier

"I shall never bond again, as I have bonded with you..."

	⇧ top of page ⇧
All times are ET (US). All dates are in Year-Month-Day format.