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bsquirrel

Member Rara Avis

since 2000-01-03

Posts 7855

0 posted 2002-06-17 09:49 PM

here's an old poem of mine that Lori-Anne (my grrl) rescued from the garbage heap.

she was right.

Lore
She knows precisely, exactly how to read pain --
its many textures, not so smooth as you think.
The worst kind being that which doesn't bite;
but that which caresses you falsely
into following down.

Her words light up the world via pressure points
and honest love. From her mind, to her fingers,
words shape and flower, some wilt --
all are planted right where they need to be,
whether to grow among a cemetery
or schoolyard.

Sometimes, I wonder why I do this --
why we do this thing called writing.
Sometimes, I wonder why we hurt yet still laugh;
how we can paint with dust and insert teeth
into gums, connect eyes to brains,
make whole humans somehow more complete
than life's own sweating work.

I will admit my failure at belief, occasionally,
in the world being fit for art.
I continue to chew up my own work
like razorsharp eraser nubs,
unhappy yet unafraid to change tints (and lives)
again and again.

Then I read her;
I am glad to write some more.

She said burn ... together.
-TON

Enchantress
Member Empyrean

since 2001-08-14

Posts 35113
Canada eh.

1 posted 2002-06-17 09:58 PM

Hi Mike,
Well, I'm sure glad she rescued this one.
Enjoyed so very much!
~Hugs YOU!~

~Somewhere in my heart I'm always
dancing with you in the summer rain~

Krissy
Senior Member

since 2002-02-22

Posts 556
kent England

2 posted 2002-06-17 10:18 PM

Mike hi there Your writing is incredible carrying within it a quality that speaks to the soul. YOU are incredibly talented. Your writing is incredibly descriptive and well presented and when you write with your heart you surely shine.

This is superb writing, and it will stay with me for I’m keeping this special treasure piece of yours.

Love and warm stuff
As always
Krissy

And while thy willing soul transpiers
at every pore with instant fires
Andrew Marvell 1621-1678

ThisDiamond
Member Rara Avis

since 2002-02-22

Posts 9353
Michigan, USA

3 posted 2002-06-17 10:53 PM

As always, I am tugged into the concepts of your works. So well described and bubbling in the boil of promise made. ThisDiamond

Goodknight
Member Elite

since 2002-06-15

Posts 2386
Ohio, USA

4 posted 2002-06-17 11:06 PM

absolutely woth being rescued and that is an understatement - thanks Paul

Madame Chipmunk
Member Rara Avis

since 2001-12-05

Posts 8296
Michigan

5 posted 2002-06-18 12:11 PM

Oh and she was absolutely right to rescue this one, Mr.Squirrel....
Don't ever throw any of your poetry away, because even though it might look bad to you at a particular moment...
you may go back and read it again, weeks...maybe even months later, and it will look so much better...
this has been my experience, which probably explains why I have so many notebooks full of writing lying around...

~ hugs to a fellow rodent

Lyra

copyright2002 Lyra Nesius

"poetry is life distilled" Gwendolyn Brooks

BluesSerenade
Member Patricius

since 2001-10-23

Posts 10549
By the Seaside

6 posted 2002-06-18 03:26 AM

Yes, she was right, and I'm so glad she dug it out.....
Loved the way you placed the flowers and the
brilliancy your words gathered up.

Very good~ very~

elfin_tigress
Member

since 2002-05-15

Posts 101
Someplace

7 posted 2002-06-18 09:51 AM

Every writer needs a friend like that, who can write beside you and inspire you. I've found that it usually goes both ways.
A very beautiful poem.

vandana

Member Patricius

since 1999-10-22

Posts 10463
USA

8 posted 2002-06-18 10:05 AM

enjoy your read

Janet Marie
Member Laureate

since 2000-01-22

Posts 18554

9 posted 2002-06-18 10:14 AM

She knows precisely, exactly how to read pain --
its many textures, not so smooth as you think.
The worst kind being that which doesn't bite;
but that which caresses you falsely
into following down.
=========================================

HOW could you throw that verse away?!!??!!
What have I told you and Sen about trashing and burning your poetry!!!

Tell LA I said she has as impeccible taste in poetry ... as she does men

and STOP throwing away poetry..or I'll have to throw me butterfly slippers at ya.

later-gator
mothyme

You ...
You are still a whisper on my lips ...
A feeling at my fingertips.

DV

Dulcinea
Senior Member

since 2001-07-22

Posts 774
IN

10 posted 2002-06-18 10:34 AM

Wise woman that girl of yours...this is a very well written piece! Bravo Lori-Anne!

Pilgrimage
Member Elite

since 2001-12-04

Posts 3945
Texas, USA

11 posted 2002-06-18 12:56 PM

This is so good. So many images, so well-written.

Nan

Decaflame
Senior Member

since 2001-05-11

Posts 1635

12 posted 2002-06-18 12:57 PM

Don't ever throw anything away again,
y'hear?
Good.

Dark Stranger
Member Patricius

since 2001-03-19

Posts 13631
West Coast

13 posted 2002-06-18 01:34 PM

keeper stuff BSQ,
keep the lady too
enjoyed the art sir

bsquirrel

Member Rara Avis

since 2000-01-03

Posts 7855

14 posted 2002-06-19 05:25 PM

Thanks!

She said burn ... together.
-TON

[This message has been edited by bsquirrel (06-19-2002 05:26 PM).]

ethome
Member Patricius

since 2000-05-14

Posts 11858
New Brunswick Canada

15 posted 2002-06-20 08:40 PM

Mike
She was absolutely right!
This is exceptional!

                "Sometimes, I wonder why I do this --
                 why we do this thing called writing.
                 Sometimes, I wonder why we hurt yet still laugh;
                 how we can paint with dust and insert teeth
                 into gums, connect eyes to brains,
                 make whole humans somehow more complete
                 than life's own sweating work."

Me too!

bsquirrel

Member Rara Avis

since 2000-01-03

Posts 7855

16 posted 2002-06-20 09:29 PM

Thanks, ethome. Let it be said that Lori will always know more than me.

She said burn ... together.
-TON

Martie

Moderator

Member Empyrean

since 1999-09-21

Posts 28049
California

17 posted 2002-06-20 11:05 PM

Mike

You wrote it...and she recognized something you did not. That's what friends are for.

bsquirrel

Member Rara Avis

since 2000-01-03

Posts 7855

18 posted 2002-06-21 02:01 PM

Wow, this poem's got legs! Thanks, Martie. (this proves I should never trust my own judgment when it comes to personal work)

She said burn ... together.
-TON

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