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Sudhir Iyer Member Ascendant
since 2000-04-26
Posts 6943Mumbai, India : now in Belgium 
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I used to write songs of nature coated with thoughts of bright future I used to write these poems that everybody loved they had butterflies, waterfalls, and tall green grass with lots of sunshine and even when there was rain, there was always the rainbow and the light pouring through it all seemed so sweet so good, so nice, the world was so beautiful as beautiful as you and each walk of life seemed so pretty, hand-in-hand, foot by foot, in synchronised steps with my jeans gripping yours close and tight it was all so colourful like million shades of crimson in ever promising sunsets and it was all so soothing, like breeze on seashores salted to the right taste everything seemed perfect then in the beautiful past and when I saw you yesterday, all I could think was you are so beautiful to me the same as always only the world has evolved at a different pace leaving me behind, wearing faded jeans [This message has been edited by Sudhir Iyer (08-12-2002 05:52 AM).] |
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serenity blaze Member Empyrean
since 2000-02-02
Posts 27738 |
wow... I had a visual of splashing color, with a man in shades of blue/gray... I liked the slow description of loss of innocence/realization/crimson jade. *hearthugs in understanding* well done, m'friend.  |
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Kit McCallum
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Member Laureate
since 2000-04-30
Posts 14774Ontario, Canada |
A wonderful twist of thought, and a powerful visual image to draw this to the conclusion Sudhir ... very much enjoyed! Best wishes, /Kit |
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WhiteRose Member Elite
since 2002-07-23
Posts 3208somebody's dungeon |
I enjoyed this read. It went from the deep of color to a simple thought. And it made the transition so gently. Lovely! |
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Sudhir Iyer Member Ascendant
since 2000-04-26
Posts 6943Mumbai, India : now in Belgium |
Thank you all very much, my dear friends... Regards, sudhir |
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