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Finite by electric light
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Finite by electric light |
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Local Rebel Member Ascendant
since 1999-12-21
Posts 5767Southern Abstentia 
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In curling shadows it is there slicing blades of a silent fan cast long across the canopy the ceiling the boundary between unlimited and finite by electric light what holds us down to solid earth when stars go spinning across the evening It is the mental melancholy of what never was that whispers from the silhouette and gnaws the human soul yet washes away like vampires blood in morning light but in light of mourning It is black and white and shades the in-between each passing slice of sultry air's misty melodies Beethoven wafting through unrepentant regret like the flicker of film And in the silence of electric motors churning air drones drones until sunrise |
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WhiteRose Member Elite
since 2002-07-23
Posts 3208somebody's dungeon |
This is excellent. The imagery just abounds in this piece. Draws you right in and has you spinning along with the blades. Great write. In truth, what defines us is our poetry. |
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WhiteRose Member Elite
since 2002-07-23
Posts 3208somebody's dungeon |
I think this is a tremendous piece of writing so I've sent it through again for others to enjoy. In truth, what defines us is our poetry. |
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Sunshine
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Member Empyrean
since 1999-06-25
Posts 63354Listening to every heart |
Well Reb, now where have you been? Welcome home! Thanks to White Rose for bouncing this back up into the sunlight! |
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Toerag Member Ascendant
since 1999-07-29
Posts 5622Ala bam a |
ELO.....Roll over Beethoven!...So you are still nutz?....Hope tangs are goin' well ferya hawk |
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Local Rebel Member Ascendant
since 1999-12-21
Posts 5767Southern Abstentia |
Thanks for the Bump WhiteRose... don't think I've been bumped since the 70's???  Glad you like this dark little peice... it needs a little tweak here and there though mithinks... perhappas... Sunchine... always goood to drop by and see the folks... Buzz! Things Go -- and keep coming back for some reason... NutZ? Izzat a challenge???  |
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jellybeans Member Elite
since 2000-10-13
Posts 2298 |
*picks herself up and sits back in the chair* can't believe you are here...I thought you gave up writing poetry...lol...oh well...guess I was wrong *g* great piece...I wish the ceiling fans keeping me awake would invoke such eloquence...was gonna quote my favorite lines..but would have to quote the whole thing...nice write rebel |
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mestesa78 Junior Member
since 2002-08-12
Posts 24 |
very impressed. the imagination can run wild with this one... |
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suthern
since 1999-07-29
Posts 20723Louisiana |
I enjoyed this, feathered one... it's great to see you posting! *S* |
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GOlDsparklESS Member
since 2001-12-13
Posts 428central nj |
It is the mental melancholy of what never was that whispers from the silhouette and gnaws the human soul like that! |
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passing shadows Member Empyrean
since 1999-08-26
Posts 45577displaced |
ya know, I don't know what the heck to say...especially about not being bumped since the 70s part...*clearing throat*...love ya Rebel  |
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Toerag Member Ascendant
since 1999-07-29
Posts 5622Ala bam a |
"Izzata challenge?"...Two nutz challenging each other?....are you nutz?....Oh, yea, never mind....I think for a minute, then I pause, why here's a rebel, without a cause. Writes like a lady, motorbike talk, reminds me of, that rascal Nighthawk. (Ya gotta cigar for Monica?) [This message has been edited by Toerag (08-14-2002 07:55 AM).] |
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passing shadows Member Empyrean
since 1999-08-26
Posts 45577displaced |
gotta kick this one back in the groove |
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passing shadows Member Empyrean
since 1999-08-26
Posts 45577displaced |
God, where have you gone? |
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