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Forgive Me These Words
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Forgive Me These Words |
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nakdthoughts Member Laureate
since 2000-10-29
Posts 19200Between the Lines 
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Forgive Me These Words I press my thoughts, between the lines, throat taut from those, desires rise. In swallowing, I think of then, my look of your look, eyes to eyes. Each day that passes, leaves me more, a creator's bed of rose, adorned. I reach to hold the velvet tint, the soft of once upon, now mourned. I miss you most, when two days by when words of none are silent read. I whisper self, to quote what was to understand, this mine of need. Backwards nonsense, words to flow from fingertips, from lips that kiss upon your reason, Wyntered I, in always loving, reminisce. You must forgive these words I write, a spirit in me can't resist. Always, never ending thoughts, rise from naked to exist. They clothe you with whatever lets, for you the buyer of my wares. Each yearning's taste, each breath I breathe, becomes the form of which we share. Why do I risk this part of me, why do I care, in trust of feel? What matters most is friendship's hand where shadows lie, tattooed in real. You must forgive these words I pen, the conquest of, belief in you. Where is the joy, in silent love when wrapped in eyes, the still of blue? The scent of August rushes by, the harsh of heat lays down its cloak. Unmoved am I, before your feet in mornings wake, each rhythm's stroke. Tomorrow I shall lace the day in treasured words, these eyes to view. You must forgive my mooning thoughts that lay in wait, the rise of you. ~Wynter Bliss~ "Love is not blind - It sees more and not less, but because it sees more, it is willing to see less." (Will Moss) [This message has been edited by nakdthoughts (08-10-2002 11:08 PM).] |
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ThisDiamond Member Rara Avis
since 2002-02-22
Posts 9353Michigan, USA |
Interesting format with a tempo so unique and honest. Very impressive write. The struggles are never easy to verbalize. Best Wishes, ThisDiamond |
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Marsha
since 2000-07-10
Posts 7423Maidstone Kent England |
Maureen darling heart this is utterly utterly splendid, sometimes your writing is simply so good it leaves me with nothing to say. I’m literally speechless, and this is one of those times. It is extraordinarily good, the rhyme utterly utterly perfect the flow and the internal construction without par. You know I love it, it is stunningly well written, beautiful work darling heart absolutely beautiful   Love and warm stuff As always Mushy  Breathe through the heat of our desire |
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Mistletoe Angel 
since 2000-12-17
Posts 32816Portland, Oregon |
  (smiles) Oh Maureen, this is powerful, sweet friend, I love it, I understand how difficult it must be to go through these trials but I know in the end you will seek all you really want! (sigh) This is outstanding, sweet friend, we all love you so much! You have such a beautiful heart, sweet Maureen, thank you for sharing!  May love and light always shine upon you! Love, Noah Eaton "Underneath your clothes there's an endless story..." |
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Madame Chipmunk Member Rara Avis
since 2001-12-05
Posts 8296Michigan |
Tomorrow I shall lace the day in treasured words, these eyes to view. You must forgive my mooning thoughts that lay in wait, the rise of you. Very unique and also very beautiful, Maureen. I love the way you used the words.  ~ loving chipmunk hugsLyra |
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Magnus
since 2001-10-10
Posts 14135South Carolina, USA |
M. you certainly were on a roll when you wrote this poem...great cadence and so well put together.... |
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Gentle Spirit Member Patricius
since 2000-10-09
Posts 13989 |
As always M, very well done from your heart pen. *s* somebody tell me, please help me.... |
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Sunshine
Administrator
Member Empyrean
since 1999-06-25
Posts 63354Listening to every heart |
Oh, Maureen....oh...oh....oh.... a  ..... |
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Seymour Tabin Member Empyrean
since 1999-07-07
Posts 31720Tamarac Fla |
Maureen, Always, never ending thoughts, rise from naked to exist. My favorate. |
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JamesMichael Member Empyrean
since 1999-11-16
Posts 33336Kapolei, Hawaii, USA |
All right I forgive you...James |
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catalinamoon
since 2000-06-03
Posts 9543The Shores of Alone |
Oh, you know how this affects me. I wish I could have written and sent it to "him" this line: "the soft of once upon, now mourned." Love it, along with all the rest. Sandra |
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Goodknight Member Elite
since 2002-06-15
Posts 2386Ohio, USA |
Maureen - you write this so well - it reads so well - I loved it - Paul |
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Interloper
since 2000-11-06
Posts 8369Deep in the heart |
I forgive you anything |
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nakdthoughts Member Laureate
since 2000-10-29
Posts 19200Between the Lines |
ThisDiamond ..thank you for your comments...I do need forgiving occasionally when I burst forth with a torrential downpour of words like these. I am glad you enjoyed it. M Marsha~ you could never be speechless..and we wouldn't want you to be. *s Hugsss M ...I am wondering if we will block each other out in September, I talk alot, too... ya know. *s Noah, thank you again for a lovely reply to my words. You are always quite welcome. hugss M Lyra, not so sure it's unique, they are just words waiting to be used *s Thank you...hope you are well. hugss M |
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nakdthoughts Member Laureate
since 2000-10-29
Posts 19200Between the Lines |
Barry, sometimes that rhythm comes out of nowhere.I have been told that if I used another name..certain others would still know it was me by the rhythm I use. *sI am glad yo enjoyed it, cadence and all. *s Thank you. Donna, always a pleasure to know you have stopped by..thank you hugss M Karilea..you liked?  too cute you are...thanks M Sy, I think that was one of my favorites too *s thank you for reading and replying. JamesM...well just for forgiving me I will give you {{HUGSS}} *s M Sandra, Thank you...you can send "him" any parts you want *s Paul, so happy to have your ead me *s thank you, M I I would like to have done whatever that forgiving was needed for...does that make any sense M |
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