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I Estrogen
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I Estrogen |
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Martie
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since 1999-09-21
Posts 28049California 
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I Estrogen I remember when I first saw you curving around like your mother with vermilion, then writing on small pieces of paper with pencil. I took your hand and traced a thought that you hid in the dry shingles outside our bedroom window. You were my history and my beginning and I was a road you would take, hot, under the trees to seek shade from my hold, and even there I made your fantasy with lipstick and tweezers and the sweet smell of dirt. Naked you were a circle within a circle, because I was your instrument of energy and life playing something about beloved and I taught you the words although you couldn’t say them outloud. Ask me how I know so much, I said into your dream where you road horses and wept for loss of blood. I am your woman…I whispered back, knowing the untruth but saying it anyway. When you moaned I mentioned I’d only be with you for a while and made a path within your heart that said hurry, hurry, for the time you know…it ticks. You hurried for me like a perfect host and pre-teened into a blossom of beguile. I know I didn’t tell you or help you along with this, for you see I enjoy the effect I have on play. I bore your children with you, felt the milk drop, listened endlessly for a change in voice…the nuance that tells what’s under the thought of the men you loved. I was your eyes that saw all directions of your children. And now you curse me with your moody down. Be thankful I was there, as I am for you, the teacher of this small place where I gathered.. I miss holding the sweet tenacity that let me see your soul, and how you loved within your heart…not your heat, and now when I see you dancing with bare feet, I wonder if you ever needed me at all. [This message has been edited by Martie (08-08-2002 08:59 PM).] |
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serenity blaze Member Empyrean
since 2000-02-02
Posts 27738 |
omigod/dess? smile. Oh yes. OH YES. (yes, people, that's sorta how I sound...) But Martie? Don't you just LOVE being a woman? It's true, we are in sync with the moon and the tides, and something for more pulsates so hard within us, it resonates... This is sooooooooo... beautiful. (chuckling, you almost made me appreciate my period...) and hey? THAT MAKES YOU AN ARTIST.  hugs you, and of course you produce works of art--YOU ARE ART. *damnilovethispoem* |
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Mistletoe Angel 
since 2000-12-17
Posts 32816Portland, Oregon |
"I miss holding the sweet tenacity that let me see your soul, and how you loved within your heart…not your heat, and now when I see you dancing with bare feet, I wonder if you ever needed me at all."  (sigh) Awwwwww, I hope this is just a fictional feeling to your own heart, sweet friend, this is sadly beautiful and I wish for your love to always be there to dance with you in destinys same rhythm! (kiss on cheek) This is absolutely spellbinding, sweet friend, we all love you so much! You have such a beautiful heart, sweet Martie, thank you for sharing!  May love and light always shine upon you! Love, Noah Eaton "Underneath your clothes there's an endless story..." |
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rwood Member Elite
since 2000-02-29
Posts 3793Tennessee |
Way too many things that hit from so many angles of womanhood..sisterhood..motherhood..goodness lady you are awesome in all.. Poetic prescription of feminine transition and truth.. Wow.. Sincerely, Reg |
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Sunshine
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Member Empyrean
since 1999-06-25
Posts 63354Listening to every heart |
How cool is this? Not cool enough for the hot that it is...so dang good, girl, that not only is it a  but it's something that should be handed out in all the schools when they teach all the stuff that moms don't take time to teach...one of your best, ever! |
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Marge Tindal
since 1999-11-06
Posts 42384Florida's Foreverly Shores |
DearestSister~ You know that I know the inner beauty of this one~ You are WOMAN - WIFE - MOTHER - POETESS ... and one of the most complete women I'll ever have the pleasure of calling sister~ I love you~ *Hugs* ~*Marge*~ ~*The pen of the poet never runs out of ink, as long as we breathe.*~ |
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Enchantress Member Empyrean
since 2001-08-14
Posts 35113Canada eh. |
Oh Martie! This made me feel so good to be a woman... I can't even put into words what I am feeling at this moment. Just so many emotions. THIS has got to be your best write yet. And it truly is a keeper... ~Estrogen Hugs to You Sweet Poetess~ |
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Kit McCallum
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Member Laureate
since 2000-04-30
Posts 14774Ontario, Canada |
I was truly moved by this piece Martie, in more ways than I can express, so I will just say ... thank you, for the depth of thoughts you have captured here.  Best wishes and hugs, /Kit |
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Corinne Member Ascendant
since 1999-10-28
Posts 5167state of confusion |
Martie, what a wonderfully original poem and so lovingly told - I'm sure that I will miss mine too, but I won't miss this damned PMS! This poem made me smile. Cor |
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ThisDiamond Member Rara Avis
since 2002-02-22
Posts 9353Michigan, USA |
Standing ovation! (or ovulation) What a wonderful mind in such a beautiful form. Absolutely amazing write. ThisDiamond |
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Dark Stranger Member Patricius
since 2001-03-19
Posts 13631West Coast |
estrogen..that is the stuff they put in the gas in california right...ok, now I get it...(babe, you are something else...amazing for sure, enjoyed this much) |
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Goodknight Member Elite
since 2002-06-15
Posts 2386Ohio, USA |
Martie - how wonderfully you write! this is so good and gives such insights - WOW what a powerful statement of feminity! Loved it - Paul |
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Magnus
since 2001-10-10
Posts 14135South Carolina, USA |
Wow....needless to say, this is a girl's thing here....something us guys are not really too hep on...but....I caught on, took me a little while...and you know what.. I do believe that somewhere inside that complete woman is a little girl that is having a ball.... |
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Madame Chipmunk Member Rara Avis
since 2001-12-05
Posts 8296Michigan |
Oh yes, Martie....or shall I call you Madame Ovary... This was a wonderful write... and I do miss my period, believe it or not... It just used to keep reminding me that I was a woman, but I have now come to terms with the missing because I still have the memories and some of them are a bit less than pleaseant.....and PMS!!!!!! Whats that? I never had any of that stuff! LOL *wink* all in all...this is a totally beautiful and highly metaphoric piece...and I can still tell that you love being a woman...as do I.  ~ hugs from a female chipmunkLyra |
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VAS Member Rara Avis
since 2000-11-16
Posts 7450Oregon |
Can't say anything that's not been said, I'll just sit here gaping with my eyes popped out of my head.  Whether on the shoal or on the shore, I'll seek the lighthouse evermore. [This message has been edited by VAS (08-09-2002 03:35 PM).] |
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Janet Marie Member Laureate
since 2000-01-22
Posts 18554 |
You were my history and my beginning and I was a road you would take, ================================= Naked you were a circle within a circle, because I was your instrument of energy and life playing something about beloved and I taught you the words although you couldn't say them outloud. Ask me how I know so much, I said into your dream where you road horses and wept for loss of blood. I am your woman I whispered back, knowing the untruth but saying it anyway. =========================== I miss holding the sweet tenacity that let me see your soul, and how you loved within your heart not your heat, and now when I see you dancing with bare feet, I wonder if you ever needed me at all. ========================================= YES she is a GODDESS... a Poetry Goddess ... This is one of the coolest and most original poems a woman could ever read...What a gift this moment of inspire was...how rare is this kind of poetic union with muse and poet. Did ya get the tingles when you were writing this...did ya know when ya finished it that it was one of those poetic justice moments? Yeah...I bet ya felt the tingles..gawwwd I love the tingles This needs to be sent to Woman's magazines..it needs to hang in GY-OB offices...it needs to be shared with girlfriends...Im sending it to several now. Kiss your "moody" muse for this one...its very special. If all the tear drops went to heaven |
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Mark Bohannan Member Rara Avis
since 2000-06-21
Posts 7269In the winds of Cherokee song |
Careful...Your ponytails are showing and they look mighty cute on ya. Okay, I know that I said it was a timing thing for this one then I read another one and then said.......hey she already knew so then I thought~"self, does she need a playground built or no" The answer of course is no as the world is your playground and the gate to it lies in your "beware eyes". Loved the inside look from the outside but I am thinkin' that I am glad to be a man right about now. |
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serenity blaze Member Empyrean
since 2000-02-02
Posts 27738 |
"one of those poetic justice moments" yeah. grin. |
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catalinamoon
since 2000-06-03
Posts 9543The Shores of Alone |
Awesome Martie. Beautifully descriptive. Sandra |
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Dark Angel Member Patricius
since 1999-08-04
Posts 10095 |
WOW Martie....this is brilliant. I can't believe I missed this... I just can't. going into my library it is. M  Beauty of the world which is soon to perish has two edges, one of laughter and one of anguish, cutting the heart asunder. |
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