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Sven
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0 posted 2002-08-06 04:30 PM


curious,
       that this should wind up
            in this spot
now,
       right as harmony
            and anti-harmony
    found an hour to clash
a sky of Light
       had clouds crossing it
            just as goslings do
               all in a row
bit by bit
       prints in this ground around us
            waiting for a sign
a sign that would cry out
       cry out to mountain and plain
            to high and low
     to all who would know
              and to all who do not
so that this call would find hands
            and touch souls

joining all in a chain of round
       circling our world in dancing
                                and light
holding hands
       and walking this path
making our ways
                  known to all

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To the world, you may only be one person. But to one person, you may be the world.

[This message has been edited by Sven (08-06-2002 04:47 PM).]

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skyshine
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1 posted 2002-08-06 04:38 PM


Good work Sven! The only thing I'd change is the line "walking the path"--the has an E in it, maybe it could be changed to a path? Anyway nice work. I enjoyed this.

~Beth


You look inside my wild mind
never knowing what you'll find
still I want you all the time
yeah I do
'cause you get me
~Michelle Branch

[This message has been edited by skyshine (08-06-2002 04:39 PM).]

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2 posted 2002-08-06 04:45 PM


OOOOPSS,,,,seems the master of the challenge
missed an e......tsk tsk tsk.....

But it is a beautiful poem....e or not....

Sven
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3 posted 2002-08-06 04:48 PM


just goes to show you how the mind works. . . in my original, it's "this path". . .but, I posted "the path". . .

thanks for the eyes. . .

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4 posted 2002-08-06 04:49 PM




Ooohhhhhh...now you've done it! LOL! J/k! Other than that one E you are home free for a wonderful challenge well done, sweet friend, this is wonderful, we all love you so much, I LOVE IT!!! You have such a beautiful heart, sweet Sven, thank you for sharing!



May love and light always shine upon you!

Love,
Noah Eaton

"Underneath your clothes there's an endless story..."

Shakira

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5 posted 2002-08-06 04:59 PM


I don't care..I love it anyway you write it Sven!!
~Hugs poet sir!~

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dancing with you in the summer rain~

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6 posted 2002-08-06 05:15 PM



You did IT...finally!

Seymour Tabin
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7 posted 2002-08-06 05:22 PM


Sven,
Nice write, enjoyed.

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8 posted 2002-08-06 05:23 PM


Glad to see the challenger has met the challenge well.  Hey Sven, don't feel bad I did the same thing, but caught it and changed it b'fore anyone had a chance to tell me!!  Well done!

Enjoy life, this is NOT a dress rehearsal.

{on the wings of words are spirits fly...and our souls are free~me}


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9 posted 2002-08-06 11:17 PM


Well...by golly...there isn't an e to be had here for sure! And a superb write too! *S*
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10 posted 2002-08-07 01:46 AM


Hi Sven!

Enjoyed your poem and admire you for walking your talk.  This was a fun challenge and I'll be looking for more...

Shenachie

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11 posted 2002-08-07 02:29 AM


Indeed, the best work of no "e" poetry comes from the originator of the challenge himself!  Great write, Sven!!

mycafe

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Sven
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12 posted 2002-08-07 04:36 PM


thanks everyone. . . this was easier than I thought it would be. . . perhaps there really isn't that much to writing without "e"??

hmmmmmmmm. . . think that you could write a poem with no "i"??  

that one might be a little bit tougher. . .

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13 posted 2002-08-08 10:58 AM


Not only did you answer the challenge, you wrote a superb poem. *S*
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14 posted 2002-08-08 11:09 AM


Well done, Sven. And, a wonderful poem at that.
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15 posted 2002-08-08 11:15 AM


My hat's off to you, Sir Sven...

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16 posted 2002-08-08 11:16 AM


enjoyed
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17 posted 2002-08-08 12:17 PM


A different feel from the GR8 Voice of the Northlands ... and I kinda like it

Jason
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18 posted 2002-08-08 01:24 PM


Sven,

I've enjoyed reading your works and the challenges for what they inspired from the others here and I look forward to more of the same.
Though, from what I have seen of the "no E's" poems and the "all E's" poems, it may be a tough act to follow.
However, since everyone here seems to enjoy a good challenge, it should be interesting at the very least.
Thanks Sven,
and those of you who so deftly answered his challenges, thus far.
I have thoroughly enjoyed this.

Jason Daniels

Practiced in the Art of Perception

Sven
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19 posted 2002-08-08 03:39 PM


thanks again everyone. . . glad that you've enjoyed this one. . . and that you've also enjoyed the poems of others who've taken part. . .



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20 posted 2002-08-08 10:13 PM


Very clever, Sven! I don't think I could do no e!

Cor

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21 posted 2002-08-14 12:54 PM


Damn it..Can you please just mail me your poetry when I don't have computer access, Sweet Man?

This is totally you, Sven Pen. I missed your work.

I will not bend to the cowardice of a silent judgement.

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