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Rex Allen McCoy Member Elite
since 2000-01-30
Posts 2863Sippin a Timmy's in London 
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Remember When? ~~~ Hiking through a woodland glen as mellow shards of sunset bend to capture bright in waters clear reflections caught from mountains shear The silhouette sings twilight's best enchanting beauty north by west 'Twas then my heart forgot to beat while visions to my gaze complete A gentle sigh resets its rhythm I step towards this face from heaven ~ In twilight's eerie haze you stood amongst the tranquil shades of wood where timeless paths bestow the land you beckon with extended hand Surroundings waver hardly seen I spring a trap laid there between then falling deep to darkest dread above ... the trap once more is spread ~ I Tumble blind through timeless mist as things unseen tear cloths to bits Attesting shrieks bare blackest dreams when fingers grab they choke the screams I'm lifted tossed to brink of ledge I scramble safe aback from edge As breath wheezed ... lungs filled sanguine air soon shadows dance to flame's despair ~ Perusing cavern round about entwined with scents of mash and stout the shadows fade as faces bare their eyes unblinking strangely stare Just who they be I have no clue in cloaks of rag bereft of shoe A boiling pot spilled overflowed aroma waft so pulled my nose ~ As grumbles struck beneath my chest a bowl they passed I said my blest The taste was odd but strangely good then laughs coalesce beneath their hood It strikes me now this tale I'm told now echoed back from memories cold Beware the pit from beauty set where mortal foot trods with regret ~ I sense the danger lurking near too late I'm thrust through worlds of cheer around about with no control immersed in love then stripped of soul Tears of pleasure tears of pain around about and back again Conscience whirling twisting vain Blackness ... lifting ... drenched with rain ~ Hiking through a woodland glen as mellow shards of sunset bend to capture bright in waters clear reflections caught from mountains shear The silhouette sings twilight's best enchanting beauty north by west 'Twas then my heart forgot to beat as visions to my haze complete A pondered thought sends senses reeling it's de ja vu ... I've got this feeling ~~~ |
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Sunshine
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Member Empyrean
since 1999-06-25
Posts 63354Listening to every heart |
You're HOME! And I'll be back tonight when I can take this all in, in its entirety! |
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catalinamoon
since 2000-06-03
Posts 9543The Shores of Alone |
Hi Rex, good to see you. This poem, wow, it took me across several miles of thoughts. Changed moods a few times. Excellent write. Sandra |
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Mistletoe Angel 
since 2000-12-17
Posts 32816Portland, Oregon |
"'Twas then my heart forgot to beat as visions to my haze complete A pondered thought sends senses reeling it's de ja vu ... I've got this feeling ~~~"   (big huggssssss) Oh Rex, this is wonderful, sweet friend, I love it, you have been missed so so much, your gorgeous words always make me smile! (sigh) You are an inspiration to us all, sweet friend, dream on with a smile, we all love you so much! You have such a beautiful heart, sweet Rex, thank you for sharing!  May love and light always shine upon you! Love, Noah Eaton "Underneath your clothes there's an endless story..." Shakira [This message has been edited by Mistletoe Angel (08-06-2002 03:18 PM).] |
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WhiteRose Member Elite
since 2002-07-23
Posts 3208somebody's dungeon |
Incredible! I'm speechless. Love Seduces Joy From The Heart |
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Kit McCallum
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Member Laureate
since 2000-04-30
Posts 14774Ontario, Canada |
You weave such a wonderful story Rex ... this is splendid! So good to read this lovely cadence-filled tale from you this afternoon. An excellent piece ... with a mystical mood, loved it my friend! Best wishes, /Kit |
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Sven
since 1999-11-23
Posts 14937East Lansing, MI USA |
I liked the way that you broke up the lines here Rex. . . the breaks followed the flow of the poem much better than if you had just done it in normal four lines stanzas. . . great work my friend. . . good to see you back as well. . . ----------------------------------------------------------- To the world, you may only be one person. But to one person, you may be the world. |
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Enchantress Member Empyrean
since 2001-08-14
Posts 35113Canada eh. |
Hey Rex!!! Excellent write my friend. How are things down your end of the 401? Good to see you posting again! ~hugs~ ~Somewhere in my heart I'm always |
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Marsha
since 2000-07-10
Posts 7423Maidstone Kent England |
Rex darling heart oh welcome back indeed you have no idea HOW much I miss your exquisite writing. This is stunningly well written the way it flows from beginning to end in such lyrical beauty. That you write exceedingly well everyone acknowledges, when you write and you incorporate the starlight’s shimmer you positively shine with wonder. This is so very special the light that flows with the liquidity of crystal streams of water, words that caress the soul with beauty, and phrasing and meter that puts masters of the art to shame, this is stunning and I love it utterly utterly utterly. Never do you cease to amaze me with the wonderful skill in which you weave delight   Love and warm stuff As always Mushy  Breathe through the heat of our desire |
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Marge Tindal
since 1999-11-06
Posts 42384Florida's Foreverly Shores |
Rex~ Very good to see you~ This is a wonderful read~ *Hugs* ~*Marge*~ ~*The pen of the poet never runs out of ink, as long as we breathe.*~ |
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Sunshine
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since 1999-06-25
Posts 63354Listening to every heart |
Rex..I promised to come back and I am glad I did... heaven knows, I made the trip three times... you are pronounced a  ! |
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Seymour Tabin Member Empyrean
since 1999-07-07
Posts 31720Tamarac Fla |
Rex I'm impressed. |
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Rex Allen McCoy Member Elite
since 2000-01-30
Posts 2863Sippin a Timmy's in London |
Thanks everyone ... you're all such kind and treasured friends ... I write so little anymore that I do try to add a little something special to the things I do write. And Passions is where I post them first There is no place finer and no friends better ... to be sure |
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Sunshine
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Member Empyrean
since 1999-06-25
Posts 63354Listening to every heart |
There's another place to post?  Really?  Not.  |
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passing shadows Member Empyrean
since 1999-08-26
Posts 45577displaced |
whew, nice long read...got through it though. well worth it |
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WhtDove Member Rara Avis
since 1999-07-22
Posts 9245Illinois |
I'm sorry I missed this one. You never cease to amaze me at how well you can put words together. This was a most excellent piece of work Rex. I loved it! It's enchanting, heck, it holds just about every emotion! Miss ya! <*\\\>< |
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