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serenity blaze
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0 posted 2002-08-06 01:58 AM


hush---be still
and listen to the silence
screaming
as my words
fail
impotent
my life in plea
for touch
of knowing--
meet me in my eyes
realize
it's me--
this deformity
hiding
within gray veils
praying to be seen
in the joy
of recognition
of what used to be--
contained
within the seed
of tears
for what can never be...
futility.

(You loved me once.)
oh didn't you?
"Lie to me,"
if you must.
Tell me that you think of me?
Be merciful
and grant me alms--
no, not gold, to weigh me down
but?
Touch the leper on the cheek
just wipe away one single tear?
before you walk away.

Be sure, my love, to wash your hands...


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Duncan
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1 posted 2002-08-06 02:55 AM


(You loved me once.)
oh didn't you?
"Lie to me,"
if you must.
Tell me that you think of me?
Be merciful
and grant me alms--
no, not gold, to weigh me down
but?
Touch the leper on the cheek
just wipe away one single tear?
before you walk away

Just tonight, I had to deal with something a bit like this.  I remembered the song that said, 'it's cruel to be kind'.  Sometimes, it's kinder to just walk away...no questions remaining.
As always, ya made me think.  Stop doing that...I really need to get some sleep!!!


I
I was standing
You were there
Two worlds collided...

INXS

Kit McCallum
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2 posted 2002-08-06 06:50 AM


A very powerful and visual piece Serenity ... excellent!

Best wishes,
/Kit

Sudhir Iyer
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since 2000-04-26
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3 posted 2002-08-06 07:26 AM


Be merciful
and grant me alms--
no, not gold, to weigh me down
but?
Touch the leper on the cheek
just wipe away one single tear?
before you walk away.

Be sure, my love, to wash your hands...
........

I really like this...

very powerful and expressive...

regards,
sudhir

Seymour Tabin
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4 posted 2002-08-06 07:59 AM


Serenity,
How clever you are.
"Be sure, my love, to wash your hands..."

Janet Marie
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5 posted 2002-08-06 08:38 AM


hush---be still
and listen to the silence
screaming
as my words
fail
impotent
my life in plea
for touch
of knowing--
meet me in my eyes
realize
it's me--
this deformity
hiding
within gray veils
praying to be seen
in the joy
of recognition
of what used to be--
contained
within the seed
of tears
for what can never be...
futility.
========================================


No..touch the mirror ... hug the poet.
this one aches from places deep baby.
heart-hugs me twin

Tell me we belong together
Dress it up with the trappings of love
Ill be captivated, Ill hang from your lips
Instead of the heartache from above

Kethry
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since 2000-07-29
Posts 9082
Victoria Australia
6 posted 2002-08-06 09:14 AM


deep, deep heartache here, I would kiss the poet if I thought it would help.
Hugs
Keth

Here in the midst of my lonely abyss, a single joy I find...your presence in my mind.  Unknown



Madame Chipmunk
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7 posted 2002-08-06 12:34 PM


hiding
within gray veils
praying to be seen
in the joy
of recognition
of what used to be--

Oh so very beautifully penned, Karen...
~ warm hugs to a wonderful poetess

Lyra

copyright2002 Lyra Nesius

"poetry is life distilled"  Gwendolyn Brooks

Dulcinea
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IN
8 posted 2002-08-06 01:38 PM


No one wants to touch a leper do they? Know that feeling well...well done!
bsquirrel
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9 posted 2002-08-06 01:44 PM


What this poem is about is said very clearly in "gray veils." Sorry it had to be that way, Sen. :sad: But yr words still rock the Casbah.

Said if I only could ...
-KB

Sven
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10 posted 2002-08-06 04:49 PM


ah yes. . . but, love doesn't see the skin. . . love sees the heart. . .

this is why I love your work so much. . .

-----------------------------------------------------------

To the world, you may only be one person. But to one person, you may be the world.

Gentle Spirit
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11 posted 2002-08-06 05:31 PM


I think Sven said it much better than I ever could Karen.  Deeply touching.

Enjoy life, this is NOT a dress rehearsal.

{on the wings of words are spirits fly...and our souls are free~me}


Magnus
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12 posted 2002-08-06 06:22 PM


Deep, touching and so very you.....

Very well done Karen....

serenity blaze
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13 posted 2002-08-06 08:03 PM


popping in for a quick thank you! (before I pop "out" again...sigh) I will be back later for to show some proper gratitude. sigh...Love to all!
Mark Bohannan
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In the winds of Cherokee song
14 posted 2002-08-06 09:59 PM


"tag" your it.   

I will be back but couldn't resist this

RSWells
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15 posted 2002-08-06 10:31 PM


Yes. Look back and see the pain behind the veil, you will not turn to salt by reviewing Love's betrayal.
Paul Wilson
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16 posted 2002-08-06 10:50 PM


Serenity... Its not the body we reside in
It's the single tear wiped by a true friend
Very Touching... Paul

Honeybee
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Posts 5372
Ontario, CANADA
17 posted 2002-08-07 12:13 PM



An aching, vivid, powerhouse of a write, sometimes you blow me away so much so that I wonder why I even bother to write, you humble my pen, I'm almost ashamed that I call myself creative, but, that's a very good thing, you ARE a poet, you provide the shock value, the anguish and the lessons with charisma, and a uniqueness unmatched by many.

I'm keeping this~

Take care,
Melissa~


"Poetry is not an opinion expressed...
it is a song that rises from a bleeding
wound...or a smiling mouth"

~Kahlil Gibran~

[This message has been edited by Honeybee (08-07-2002 12:16 AM).]

Bridget Shenachie
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Kansas USA
18 posted 2002-08-07 12:35 PM


Hi Karen!

This is such a jolting subject--that someone who was once loved is now treated as a pariah.  Very well-written!

Shenachie

serenity blaze
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19 posted 2002-08-07 12:09 PM


sometimes I write something, and I'm just happy to feel understood. This was one of dem times. I hug you all to my leperous heart! THANK YOU.
Mark Bohannan
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In the winds of Cherokee song
20 posted 2002-08-07 06:27 PM


Did ya think I forgot I said I was coming back?  Harsh pains rolling in this one.  
These lines hit the hardest for me....

Be merciful
and grant me alms--
no, not gold, to weigh me down
but?
Touch the leper on the cheek
just wipe away one single tear?
before you walk away.

Be sure, my love, to wash your hands...


You were heard in this one sweet poetess and understood I am sure by all who read.

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