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RSWells
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since 2001-06-17

Posts 2533

0 posted 2002-08-05 12:41 PM

The blues is a restriction
a lock that's lacking keys
it's your passageway's constriction
though surrounded by a breeze

The blues has jurisdiction
it's painful law decrees
that a lifelong crucifiction
will stay bogged in legalese

The blues is a conviction
before you enter pleas
it's a bigot's prediliction
and no hope it guarantees

The blues is an affliction
your heart put in a freeze
by a reader who reads fiction
though you plead her from your knees

The blues likes taking lumber
and making it debris
yes the blues is any number
not divisible by we

"Happy people have no history" - French Proverb

skyshine

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since 2002-02-07

Posts 3058
Beneath the northern stars

1 posted 2002-08-05 12:51 PM

Nicely done and nicely put. Your metaphors are very interesting...I liked this one.

~sky

You look inside my wild mind
never knowing what you'll find
still I want you all the time
yeah I do
'cause you get me
~Michelle Branch

1slick_lady
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since 2000-12-22

Posts 6088
standing on a shadow's lace

2 posted 2002-08-05 01:09 AM

time to put the jazz on

Samantha G Kennedy
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since 2002-07-27

Posts 131
Kent England

3 posted 2002-08-06 05:34 PM

i have so got to love this!!!

each stanza reads ~ da dum! your syllable count perfect, and this rolls and reads beautifully...

i loveeeee the blues

this is a wonderful write....great style and meter

it rocks

Sammie

^i^

Toerag
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since 1999-07-29

Posts 5622
Ala bam a

4 posted 2002-08-06 05:39 PM

there ain't no one
that's immune to the blues,
the more ya get
That's the more ya can lose.

nice write....also my music and life

catalinamoon

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since 2000-06-03

Posts 9543
The Shores of Alone

5 posted 2002-08-06 06:07 PM

You said it all.
Sandra

RSWells
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since 2001-06-17

Posts 2533

6 posted 2002-08-06 07:36 PM

Thanks, I needed that.

Enchantress
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since 2001-08-14

Posts 35113
Canada eh.

7 posted 2002-08-06 08:07 PM

...WOW!!...

Kit McCallum

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since 2000-04-30

Posts 14774
Ontario, Canada

8 posted 2002-08-06 08:20 PM

Such a wonderful flow and format Richard ... very nicely written. Much enjoyed!

Best wishes,
/Kit

Mistletoe Angel

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since 2000-12-17

Posts 32816
Portland, Oregon

9 posted 2002-08-06 08:54 PM

(smiles) Oh Richard, this is wonderful, sweet friend, I love it, you always have such interesting ways of looking at life in general, I love this, we all love you so much! You have such a beautiful heart, sweet Richard, thank you for sharing!

May love and light always shine upon you!

Love,
Noah Eaton

"Underneath your clothes there's an endless story..."

Shakira

rwood
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since 2000-02-29

Posts 3793
Tennessee

10 posted 2002-08-06 09:17 PM

I don't know..I suppose I kinda like my Etta and my Otis..they make me humble..Your verse is blues rhyme divine..you look good in blue. Blue is water words leaking out and smearing history..

Sincerely,
Reg

suthern

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since 1999-07-29

Posts 20723
Louisiana

11 posted 2002-08-08 10:36 AM

I like this very much... and the ending is outstanding! *S*

Nan

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since 1999-05-20

Posts 21191
Cape Cod Massachusetts USA

12 posted 2002-08-08 11:18 AM

Well done, oh blue one... especially the final stanza - Tres bon..

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