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Seasons - my first sestina
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Seasons - my first sestina |
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Titia Geertman Member Ascendant
since 2001-05-07
Posts 5182Netherlands 
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July has already passed in time Days flow like a stormy wind The sky is showing a different light And the land is changing colors Very slow the brown shines through Autumn is awaiting it's turn The leaves, they fall, each in their turn They'll disappear in time Changed into skeletons one gazes through Swept in the air by a playful wind Yellow-brown pattern in colors Spreading in late sunset's light Then one morning on dawn's light the season again takes a turn The palett holds grey-brown-white colors You've guessed it right, it's Winter time Cold it is, with hail and storming wind And mists, that won't let you through Trees are bold, one can see through And days are short of light Cheeks color red by the icy wind Blowing in your face, when on corners you turn The white frozen branches will melt in time And only the sky is showing warm colors But slowly there will be again change of colors And you'll see green leaves come through It just is a matter of nature's time When she makes the days lengthen in light Then it will be Spring's turn To smoothen down the stormy wind It blows the land clean, this fickle wind And nature shows fresh new colors It lasts as long till Summer takes her turn With Winter cold we're through The sun shines warm in a bright light A year has passed in a four seasoned time Let that stormy wind pass through Enjoy the colors in that different light Each season will take it's turn, in time Like scattered leaves...my words will flow [This message has been edited by Titia Geertman (08-04-2002 04:55 PM).] |
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Sunshine
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Member Empyrean
since 1999-06-25
Posts 63354Listening to every heart |
Ok Titia, you've made me actually want to sit down and write one...this is beautiful, and it may be the next go around before I dig up the nerve to match you, and Bridget Shenachie...as she did a marvelous one, as well... perhaps the next time around... |
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Neeraja Senior Member
since 2002-06-22
Posts 812The Netherlands |
Titia... this is so so beautiful!!! What a poem!  Neeraja |
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ThisDiamond Member Rara Avis
since 2002-02-22
Posts 9353Michigan, USA |
Would never know this was a first. Particularly love the autumn...thank you for bringing it to me through the sizzle of August. ThisDiamond |
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Marge Tindal 
since 1999-11-06
Posts 42384Florida's Foreverly Shores |
Titia~ I actually 'believed' you when you wrote .. "I'm so terrrible busy with the sheep business." Now look what I find you doing !!  Girlfriend .... ALL these Seasons may pass before I ever attempt, much less complete, any Sestina ... ~ I so admire you~ Exquisite .... and I can't wait until September !  Love you gal~ ~*Marge*~ ~*The pen of the poet never runs out of ink, as long as we breathe.*~ |
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Titia Geertman Member Ascendant
since 2001-05-07
Posts 5182Netherlands |
Sunshine, sit down and write a sestina girl, it looks more difficult than it really is, believe me. Neeraja, come play on the playgrounds of class, it's a fun place to be. ThisDiamond, thank you and Autumn is my favorite too Marge dear, you caught me right there  Just realized that I had flunked July class and I wrote this sestina in about two hours this afternoon.I tried to do a paradelle, but that was too difficult at the moment. Sometimes, under pressure, my muse just dictates me  Love you all, Titia Like scattered leaves...my words will flow [This message has been edited by Titia Geertman (08-04-2002 06:42 PM).] |
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Marsha
since 2000-07-10
Posts 7423Maidstone Kent England |
Tita darling heart this is exquisite writing stunningly well written the way it flows from beginning to end in such lyrical beauty. That you write exceedingly well everyone acknowledges, when you write and you incorporate the such a light shimmer you positively shine with wonder. This is so very special it will be a whole decade of seasons before I would try to do this and if I did it still wouldn’t be as wonderful as this is I love it utterly utterly utterly. Never do you cease to amaze me with the wonderful skill in which you weave delight I can’t wait till September it is coming around so fast but not fast enough  Love and warm stuff As always Mushy  Breathe through the heat of our desire |
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Mistletoe Angel
since 2000-12-17
Posts 32816Portland, Oregon |
"Let that stormy wind pass through Enjoy the colors in that different light Each season will take it's turn, in time"  (smiles) Yay!!! Oh my gosh, I love this, sweet friend, this is sooooooo beautiful as you spread the whispers of all the seasons beautifully in this wonderful poem! (kiss on cheek) Two hours, wow, I would need much longer to write one of those difficult poems I bet, yay, I LOVE IT, we all love you so much! You have such a beautiful heart, sweet Titia, thank you for sharing!  May love and light always shine upon you! Love, Noah Eaton "Underneath your clothes there's an endless story..." |
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Balladeer
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Member Empyrean
since 1999-06-05
Posts 25505Ft. Lauderdale, Fl USA |
A wonderful job, Titia. Even to attempt one shows real determination....and you excelled in your effort  |
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Kit McCallum
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Member Laureate
since 2000-04-30
Posts 14774Ontario, Canada |
Bravo Titia! Well done, and with such brilliant imagery throughout ... very much enjoyed! Best wishes, /Kit |
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Titia Geertman Member Ascendant
since 2001-05-07
Posts 5182Netherlands |
Thanks Balladeer and Kit, I'm blushing  TitiaLike scattered leaves...my words will flow |
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Interloper
since 2000-11-06
Posts 8369Deep in the heart |
WOW! 1derful! Brava! Fool, said my Muse to me, look in thy heart and write. |
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