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Dazed in Gaze |
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Mark Bohannan Member Rara Avis
since 2000-06-21
Posts 7269In the winds of Cherokee song 
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Dazed in Gaze Mesmerized by chance of first glance turned gaze in solice of realization to moments written ... times not yet marked in the chronicles of breath ... times to where our footprints await the weight of our hearts. Locked in mysteries of explore ~ two become one to share one as two hidden in the blanket of midnight's kiss illuminated in the essence offered in silence of comprehend. Were we capable of turning sight to wind ... these pages would not hold our ink of tomorrow. As departure caresses the dawn of stretched release ... freedom is shared within wings of four rested in the souls of two becoming one to share one as two in open view upon the lash of heaven's smiling eye. One gaze ~ turned promise through one wink of mesmerized thought as two become one to share one as two in a single moment ... lost ... to our chronicles not yet written. Mark Christopher [This message has been edited by Mark Bohannan (08-03-2002 09:04 PM).] |
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Sunshine
Administrator
Member Empyrean
since 1999-06-25
Posts 63354Listening to every heart |
Ah Mark...we don't often see free verse from you, and Sir, on you, it looks good. Hope to see some more from you like this...again, soon! I've had a moment or two to ponder lately...nice to see you've been pondering too! |
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VAS Member Rara Avis
since 2000-11-16
Posts 7450Oregon |
you turn phrases so amazingly I come up a little confused at times, or is it dazed  yes, good to see some free verse, I've not read your poetry in quite awhile, shame on me! My loss, for sure! Whether on the shoal or on the shore, |
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Martie
Moderator
Member Empyrean
since 1999-09-21
Posts 28049California |
Mark Hi..so good to see you. You know, math was never my favorite subject..but I sure like yours. "Were we capable of turning sight to wind ... these pages would not hold our ink" but, would still see the link, I think.  |
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Gentle Spirit Member Patricius
since 2000-10-09
Posts 13989 |
Ah Mark it is good to see so many sharing their ponderings in words, and you doing free verse is such a treat for us. I'm just wondering if I ask really nice if there is any chance we might see more?? Please....  I really enjoyed this Mark, it gets tucked into my box of jewels. Thank you.Enjoy life, this is NOT a dress rehearsal. {on the wings of words are spirits fly...and our souls are free~me} [This message has been edited by Gentle Spirit (08-03-2002 09:04 PM).] |
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sigheyes Member
since 2001-04-25
Posts 323the winds of destiny |
I adore this wonderful free verse and enjoyed it very much. |
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catalinamoon
since 2000-06-03
Posts 9543The Shores of Alone |
Mark, this is very beautiful. It makes a case for love that is real, with even more room to grow. Wonderful thoughts. Sandra |
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ShadowRider Senior Member
since 2001-07-14
Posts 1038USA |
A great romance is perhaps like that, Mark. A Deer in the headlights, then wooing the automobile to stay the night. Love's conquest is more conquering self's apprehension than getting another to submit to us. Put together like a pro, Mark. Seemingly seamless Wonderfully without flaw. jeff [This message has been edited by ShadowRider (08-03-2002 10:30 PM).] |
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Seymour Tabin Member Empyrean
since 1999-07-07
Posts 31720Tamarac Fla |
Mark, You are a natural. Common symbols are hard to find and to use them in correct sequence is pure talent. One gaze ~ turned promise through one wink of mesmerized thought as two become one to share one as two in a single moment ... lost ... to our chronicles not yet written. |
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Enchantress Member Empyrean
since 2001-08-14
Posts 35113Canada eh. |
Mark~You have such incredible talent! Enjoyed thoroughly this evening. ~Smiles & Hugs~ ~Somewhere in my heart I'm always |
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rosepetals25
since 2000-05-31
Posts 3076PA |
Mark, First I have to say that I loveeeee your picture. Tigers are my favorite animals..and I have ALWAYS wanted to do exactly what you are doing there Second, wonderful write. You have such a way with words, its good to read you when I get the chance  Hugs, Tara |
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Honeybee Member Ascendant
since 1999-12-26
Posts 5372Ontario, CANADA |
Mark, it's a pleasure and a surprise to read 'free verse' by you...this is excellent writing, I agree with Sy, your talent is showing and you humble my pen. This is simply beautiful, graceful, magnetic and, I long for moments like these. It's a keeper! Take care, Melissa~ "Poetry is not an opinion expressed... |
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CSKpoet Senior Member
since 2002-07-12
Posts 845Island in Paradise |
Ahhhh your beautiful spirit is showing.... I agree with all that free verse is very wonderful from your magic pen...you certainly do stimulate emotions thru your well penned verses I loved: "to share one as two in open view upon the lash of heaven's smiling eye." the very most..wow. more please....ponder away muse. aloha and warm regards, Cher Poetry is: |
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Mistletoe Angel
since 2000-12-17
Posts 32816Portland, Oregon |
"One gaze ~ turned promise through one wink of mesmerized thought as two become one to share one as two in a single moment ... lost ... to our chronicles not yet written." (smiles) Oh Mark, this is wonderful, sweet friend, I love it, you always have such a spiritual and romantic beauty in your words, sweet friend, I am blessed to be a true friend and fan of your work, this is gorgeous, we all love you so much! You have such a beautiful heart, sweet Mark, thank you for sharing! May love and light always shine upon you! Love, Noah Eaton "Underneath your clothes there's an endless story..." |
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Madame Chipmunk Member Rara Avis
since 2001-12-05
Posts 8296Michigan |
One gaze ~ turned promise through one wink of mesmerized thought as two become one to share one as two in a single moment ... lost ... to our chronicles not yet written. Absolutely beautiful writing, Mark...  ~ chipmunk hugsLyra |
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snowpants Member Elite
since 2000-09-16
Posts 2061KS |
Through the blustery wind, I walk with your cadence. In the center of the disorder, The rhyming peace fills me. Beyond the intimidating crash of the sea, You acknowledge me with absolute certainty. My all has relied on that first glance; The chance to see through native eyes, getting the view by closing my eyes, illuminates the clouded mountaintops and brings soul to the overcast sky. Today’s exploration will take us Where the night caresses the day into silence. Tomorrow’s traces will keep track of What we see atop the morning mist. (ya had to go and make me think, didn't ya?) k    I want to wake up to the sound of waves |
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Moon Dust
since 1999-06-11
Posts 2177Skelmersdale, UK |
Mark not seen you for a good while, but I still enjoy your words If your afraid of the dark, then why did you come? |
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Mark Bohannan Member Rara Avis
since 2000-06-21
Posts 7269In the winds of Cherokee song |
Sunshine- Don't know if it was pondering or just a sneeze that hit paper. Thank you much and I am glad you like the free verse. VAS-Sometimes I feel as if I am always in a daze. Thank you much. I am glad you stopped by. Martie-Ohhhhh most definitely so. Thank you sweet one. Your math works for me too.  Gentle Spirit-Wow...in your box of jewels? Thank you much and you will see more free verse. Just don't know when. sigheyes-I am glad you enjoyed it. Thank you. catalinamoon-There is always room for the real thing to grow. I am glad you found the thoughts wonderful. Thank you dearly. ShadowRider-Your analogy is pretty much the way I see it too. Thank you for those wonderful comments. It is much appreciated. Sy-You are much too kind sir and I tip my hat in thanks to you for being so. Enchantress-If I added a moment of enjoyment to your evening then I am happy. Thank you much. rosepetals25-Just as it is always good to see you. Thank you for those wonderful words and as for the tiger.......drive to Charlotte and ask. Couldn't hurt. Honeybee-I think we all long for moments like these at times. Thank you for your kind response...don't know that my work has been labled magnetic before but I'll like the thought. CSKpoet-Dang.....there's that "E" word again. LOL If I can stimulate anything pleasurable in my works then I am one happy poet. Thank you dearly wonderful comments. Mistletoe Angel-I think it is us that is blessed to have you around. You light up the forums with your presence and I thank you much for your overwhelming reponses. Madame Chipmunk-I am glad you found it beautiful and I thank you sincerely. Kris- I just love it when you leave your footprints all over the place. Can ya do it with eyes AND ears shut? Thanks sweetie..........(MLTYWALTT)Moondust-Yeah......I been gone for a bit and only recently slowed down enough to come home. Thank you much for stopping by and I am glad you enjoyed. |
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Magnus
since 2001-10-10
Posts 14135South Carolina, USA |
You have put together a masterpiece of a poem....I particularly am fond of the two becoming one and vice versa....such a symbol of unity..... |
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Sunshine
Administrator
Member Empyrean
since 1999-06-25
Posts 63354Listening to every heart |
Oh Mark...laughing here...if this was a Sneeze, then I double-dare you to do it again... |
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Janet Marie Member Laureate
since 2000-01-22
Posts 18554 |
in solice of realization to moments written ... times not yet marked in the chronicles of breath ... times to where our footprints await the weight of our hearts. ============================== hidden in the blanket of midnight's kiss illuminated in the essence offered in silence of comprehend. Were we capable of turning sight to wind ... these pages would not hold our ink of tomorrow. As departure caresses the dawn of stretched release ... freedom is shared within wings of four rested in the souls of two becoming one to share one as two in open view .......(sneaking in rhyme) upon the lash of heaven's smiling eye. ============================= Is this when I can *sigh* and not be called a biased moth? So many poetically lovely phrases in this Mark...such ethereal, soft spoken imagery and emotions. You wrote it in such a way that the reader feels the quiet realizations found in the unspoken moments and the connection felt in the eye contact. What I found most appealing about this one was it subtleties ... in its express of emotion, its images, personifications and verbiage...also the analogy that the emotions cant be contained or put into words...the theme of poetry being incorporated added to its appeal. But the real jewels of this verse is its phrasing... in the chronicles of breath times to where our footprints await the weight of our hearts. of midnight's kiss illuminated in the essence offered in silence Were we capable of turning sight to wind these pages would not hold our ink of tomorrow. As departure caresses the dawn upon the lash of heaven's smiling eye Pure poetry in motion my Romantic EMOTIONAL poet cowboypal ... ya cant deny it..your poetry proves it. DEAL WITH IT  times to where our footprints await the weight of our hearts. Were we capable of turning sight to wind OH YEAH... BIG OLE FRIGGEN MOTH SIGHS FOR THOSE LINES. *S* Trust me these pages WILL hold what ever you write...be it rhyme free verse, or prose (HINT HINT) Beautiful "ramble" MC..you should do it more often, it seems to inspire frosty britches to rhyme [This message has been edited by Janet Marie (08-04-2002 01:49 PM).] |
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Marge Tindal
since 1999-11-06
Posts 42384Florida's Foreverly Shores |
MarkB~ A lovely verse of free ... falling from your pen. Also noticed the linking of some internal rhyme ... divine~ And YOU want classes ???????? Duh ! Got a 'meadow-walk moment' for you ... Now ... take that walk .... but this time take a kite .... let it out slowly ... and watch it dance in the breeze ... that's how I think of free-verse .... dipping, diving ... floating ... taking you anywhere it wants to take you~ Gv ge yuhi~ *Hugs* ~*Marge*~ ~*The pen of the poet never runs out of ink, as long as we breathe.*~ |
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OLIAS Senior Member
since 2000-06-20
Posts 1090Pearl city Iowa |
Stylish write sir, as always I am in awe. Thanks for sharing your words, much enjoyed. Regards, Olias. |
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Duncan Member Ascendant
since 2001-08-07
Posts 5455 |
Every single word...appreciated. I |
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vandana
since 1999-10-22
Posts 10463USA |
enjoy |
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Greeneyes
since 2000-09-09
Posts 9903In Your Poetic Mind |
Were we capable of turning sight to wind ... these pages would not hold our ink of tomorrow.'' Mark~ yes but they do, and how lucky we are to be able to read such tender writes from you... much enjoyed...Lauren~ The ocean looks like a thousand diamonds strewn across a blue blanket |
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Dark Stranger Member Patricius
since 2001-03-19
Posts 13631West Coast |
that dazing amaze...when we are spun into thread that is cellophane iron in grip of soul sides primo work mark |
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rwood Member Elite
since 2000-02-29
Posts 3793Tennessee |
I'm late...but hopefully your pen doesn't forget the free verse style as it is just as poetic as your rhyme. Were we capable of turning sight to wind ... these pages would not hold our ink of tomorrow. THAT was a common thought this evening and well before I read you..so that verse hits hard.. One gaze ~ turned promise through one wink of mesmerized thought as two become one to share one as two in a single moment ... lost ... to our chronicles not yet written. Okay...I favor this verse because it represents hope to me..not eternity..just hope..that's all a person can ask for. Good to see you write such a piece. Sincerely, Reg |
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Mark Bohannan Member Rara Avis
since 2000-06-21
Posts 7269In the winds of Cherokee song |
Magnus-Yes, a symbol of unity without stealing the individuality of each other. Thank you for your kind words sir. Sunshine-I don't usually take a dare but I always sneeze three times. Thanks for the second visit. JM-If you don't lose that "E" word then I am going to have to cut your nectar treats in half. Thanks sweetness for all you are to me and for always giving your heart in soul in your replies as well as in all you do. Marge-Will the beach count as a meadow if I plant the pallete of color in my mind while I string the sky in triangled hope? Thanks for you! Ge gv yuhi nasgi-nasquo OLIAS-Thank you for always being one to praise so sincerely. Duncan-Even the ones read when you hold it up to the mirror? Thank you clock tower man.......it is nice to be appreciated. vandana-I am so glad you enjoyed. Thank you kind one. Greeneyes-Yes they do and they hold so many treasures of yours as well. Thank you for both. Dark Stranger-It is hard to ignore and even harder to free ones self from.(providing...a person would want to). Thank you sir. Much appreciated. regina- Not late. Hope is it exactly as our eternity should never be placed in earth realms. Thank you much and sharing common thoughts ain't all together a bad thing when you consider the logged entries into the journals of approach. Very much appreciate your words and thoughts. |
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Kit McCallum
Administrator
Member Laureate
since 2000-04-30
Posts 14774Ontario, Canada |
Oh boy ... you sure do know how to make a gal sigh, Mark ...  Exquisite phrasing throughout this entire piece, my friend ... truly an exceptional write. I realized by the end I was smiling at just the sheer beauty of the sentiments and flow. Loved this. Best wishes and hugs, /Kit |
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Mark Bohannan Member Rara Avis
since 2000-06-21
Posts 7269In the winds of Cherokee song |
Kit- If you left smiling then I am elated to no end. Thank you dearly for your wonderful words. You are much appreciated. |
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