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Samantha G Kennedy
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0 posted 2002-08-03 02:11 AM



Have you ever glimpsed the moon reclining on its back?
I watch this striking performance;.
When she- pregnant –
With aspiration.
Sits unaccompanied and in a puddle of expression.
I wonder if she could rest,
in those reflections
Eternally.

Ageing Moon
Swollen with isolation
The night- is over.

[This message has been edited by Samantha G Kennedy (08-03-2002 02:12 AM).]

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1 posted 2002-08-03 03:05 AM




(sigh) Oh sweet sister, I just love this, your gorgeous words always make me smile, this is no exception, I LOVE IT!!! (kiss on cheek) I love your new piture too, sweet friend, YAY, we all love you so much! You have such a beautiful heart, sweet Sam, thank you for sharing!



May love and light always shine upon you!

Love,
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2 posted 2002-08-03 03:11 AM


The birth of a lonely sigh.....Oh my.
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3 posted 2002-08-03 08:19 AM


Samantha  
It's all in the perspective. Enjoyed

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4 posted 2002-08-03 09:01 AM



Sammie...it seems the dreamer in you
is a natural born writer...
enjoyed this!

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5 posted 2002-08-03 09:08 AM


Love the feelings this emotes.
Well done Sammie!
~Hugs~

Great pic of you as well.

~Somewhere in my heart I'm always
dancing with you in the summer rain~

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6 posted 2002-08-03 10:51 AM


Samantha~
This is truly lovely~
Such graceful poetic brush strokes~
*Hugs*
~*Marge*~

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7 posted 2002-08-03 11:03 AM


Sammie - love this immensly. I can't say enough about this write...

BC

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8 posted 2002-08-03 12:26 PM


Samantha

Lovely...very much enjoyed!

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9 posted 2002-08-05 01:55 PM


Very nicely woven ... and the haiku seems to blend in quite nicely too ... we don't see this form very often
~
you do it well

Rex

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10 posted 2002-08-05 02:08 PM



Samantha, once more I applaud your writing talent.  You have some cool lines in this, it's beautiful in it's celebration of it's bounty and in the exploration of the other side of the coin - it's loneliness.  I'm keeping this one

Take care,
Melissa~

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it is a song that rises from a bleeding
wound...or a smiling mouth"

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11 posted 2002-08-05 02:14 PM


Simply exquisite! I loved this artful work..hoping to see more ..
aloha, Cher

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Passion, imagination and intellect running together.

Aloha with warmest regards, Cheryl Stewart Koomoa

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12 posted 2002-08-05 03:59 PM


Like this loads.

This line grabs and holds on:

Sits unaccompanied and in a puddle of expression.

Whether on the shoal or on the shore,
I'll seek the lighthouse evermore.

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13 posted 2002-08-05 04:05 PM


one of my favorite subjects. . . the moon. . . very well written. . .

one question. . . what's a "haibun"?



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Samantha G Kennedy
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14 posted 2002-08-05 07:23 PM


to all who took the time to read and reply, thank you sincerely, it means so much


and to sven

The form of Japanese poetry known as haibun first developed from a Japanese writer taking a journey and composing a diary of his travels in a mix of brief prose, haiku and sketches. Matsuo Basho (1644-1694) is perhaps the master of haibun. During the last years of his life, he traveled by foot throughout Japan, writing of his five journeys in terse combinations of prose and haiku. Basho’s The Narrow Road to the Deep North relates his five-month journey of 1,500 miles north of Edo in1689 where he wrote of the wilds.


WHAT IS HAIBUN?
Haibun is a combination of prose strong in imagery and at least one haiku. The prose in a haibun is trimmed to its essence just as a haiku is composed of few words chosen for their particular meaning. A haibun relates a journey, whether the travels are a physical exploration of the world or an internal journey of discovery. Often haibun contain a revelation or epiphany obtained through experience. The prose can reflect fragmented thoughts or complete sentences, but the sentences are tight with all the words serving a purpose. It is important to note that a haibun is not a short story.

HOW MANY HAIKU?
Some traditionalists believe that haibun should be written with the prose portion first, ending with only one haiku. As more writers discover this form, the boundaries of style and format have grown to include more than one haiku interwoven with prose. The writer can arrange and intersperse the prose and haiku in whatever format suits the piece; however, the haiku is separated from the prose and written in haiku format. There is no set length to a haibun.

The haiku in a haibun does not have to relate directly to the subject matter. It is the reader who must decipher the link between the prose and the haiku — no explanation is necessary. The haiku connected to a haibun might be considered a microburst of detail.

HAIBUN ESSENTIALS

Haibun relates a journey
Is a combination of prose and haiku
The writing is sparse, tight
With strong imagery
It imparts a revelation

I hope this helps

regards

Sammie

^i^

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15 posted 2005-09-28 06:30 PM


Absolutely breathtaking!
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