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Open Poetry #21

the feeding

Jason
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since 2002-07-31

Posts 72
Macon, GA

0 posted 2002-08-01 03:36 PM

in the shadows of your mind
in the darkness found therein
lurks a creature of the night
where it feeds upon your sins

your doubts are it's favourite drink
and upon your fear it sups
the banquet's fare which gives it strength
is a feast upon the corrupt

whether kept meek or be made hale
upon you this will all depend
as it waits for the day you fail
it feeds upon your sins

there's more than just your life at stake
through all of life's many tests
so take care with decisions you make
to find your soul's eternal rest

for in the shadows of your mind
in the darkness found therein
lurks the creature of the night
feeding upon your sins.

Jason Daniels
(this is a re-write of a previous poem I wrote.)
(I wasn't happy with it the way it was, I like this better, hope you all do too.)

Practiced in the Art of Perception

Sunshine

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since 1999-06-25

Posts 63354
Listening to every heart

1 posted 2002-08-01 03:39 PM

An eternal lesson...
one that should be taught
and re-taught...

WhiteRose
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since 2002-07-23

Posts 3208
somebody's dungeon

2 posted 2002-08-01 03:52 PM

Very nice writing Jason.

Nan

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Member Seraphic

since 1999-05-20

Posts 21191
Cape Cod Massachusetts USA

3 posted 2002-08-01 04:05 PM

Oh yeah... Ya know - I still have this one in a wav file, I do believe - It's great to see your wonderful work here, m'friend..

Enchantress
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since 2001-08-14

Posts 35113
Canada eh.

4 posted 2002-08-01 04:10 PM

Excellent writing here!
Thoroughly enjoyed this piece.
~Hugs~

~Somewhere in my heart I'm always
dancing with you in the summer rain~

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