Open Poetry #21 |
Vision thing (Sven's Challenge) |
bsquirrel
since 2000-01-03
Posts 7855 |
Here's my version of Sven's challenge, using no E's. -Vision thing- "Look at this chart. What mark do you find?" "Nothing, doctor. It's all black and gray." "Um, try turning this way, now." "Sigh. It's obvious I can't thrill to color." "This isn't for color, just for your sight." "My my. I'm bad off, I think." "Do us a favor! Actually look!" "I am. What should I do now?" "No! You fool! Look straight this way!" "I'm turning that way. For what? I don't know." "That's it. It's obvious that you lack sight." "Only my mind, doctor. Only my mind." Said if I only could ... |
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Madame Chipmunk Member Rara Avis
since 2001-12-05
Posts 8296Michigan |
Thats brilliant, Mr.Squirrel.... No E's anywhere and yet you managed to make sense... ~ dizzy rodent hugs Lyra |
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wranx Member Elite
since 2002-06-07
Posts 3689Moved from a shack to a barn |
Nary an "E" to be seen. You made it look easy. ~wranx The shortest distance between two points... |
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bsquirrel
since 2000-01-03
Posts 7855 |
Glad you found this post to yr liking, Lyra. (wow, it's hard to maintain this no E thing) Anyway, when I saw the challenge, that big E, I immediately thought of vision tests. So it came out from that. Thanks for readin'. Said if I only could ... |
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bsquirrel
since 2000-01-03
Posts 7855 |
Thanks, wranx. You just snuck in. Said if I only could ... |
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Anvrill Senior Member
since 2002-06-21
Posts 710in the interzone now |
Yr American spelling-system let you cheat on this one. Gray is spelled with an E instead o' A by those crazy Brits and us crazy Canucks. For proof, just whip out yr copy of Cure's Faith and lookit the title of All Cats are Grey. So there. Oh, and the manic edge this verges on reminds me maybe a bit too much of that first story we wrote together. The loneliest words you'll ever know: |
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mycafe Senior Member
since 2002-05-23
Posts 584 |
Absolutely BRILLIANT !! I know it ain't easy at all! (shoods, just how many of that letter have I used in this short reply of mine??!!) mycafe Keep counting your blessings |
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Bridget Shenachie Senior Member
since 2002-01-23
Posts 1056Kansas USA |
Loved your response to Sven's Challenge. I can't write, talk or think clearly without my E's. Guess it interferes with my vision, too. Shenachie [This message has been edited by Bridget Shenachie (08-01-2002 07:45 AM).] |
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bsquirrel
since 2000-01-03
Posts 7855 |
Thanks, all! And Lori, I could've said "Black and pink," but that wouldn't have made much sense. Mikey Said if I only could ... |
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Jason Member
since 2002-07-31
Posts 72Macon, GA |
The Challenge met with no apparent "E's" you did it well, in fact, with ease, or so it seems, to me Keep up the good work, this was fun to read Jason Practiced in the Art of Perception |
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bsquirrel
since 2000-01-03
Posts 7855 |
Thanks for yr kind words, Jason. Said if I only could ... |
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Sven
since 1999-11-23
Posts 14937East Lansing, MI USA |
cool job on this. . . it's hard to think without using that thing isn't it?? do this. . . think without using it for about an hour. . . I think that you'll find it's not so hard to do by doing this . . . ------------------------------------------------------- To the world, you may only be one person. But to one person, you may be the world. |
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WhiteRose Member Elite
since 2002-07-23
Posts 3208somebody's dungeon |
this was indeed fun to read. |
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bsquirrel
since 2000-01-03
Posts 7855 |
I'll try! And thanks, WR. Said if I only could ... |
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Gentle Spirit Member Patricius
since 2000-10-09
Posts 13989 |
you did this so brilliantly and it was fun, a writing of worth! darn....this is contagious.... Enjoy life, this is NOT a dress rehearsal. {on the wings of words are spirits fly...and our souls are free~me} [This message has been edited by Gentle Spirit (08-02-2002 01:14 PM).] |
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bsquirrel
since 2000-01-03
Posts 7855 |
Thanks, Gentle Spirit! Said if I only could ... |
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Mistletoe Angel
since 2000-12-17
Posts 32816Portland, Oregon |
WOW!!! Oh my gosh, I love the two-sided conversation of this, sweet friend, you always have a way with making fun with every challenge, sweet friend, this is remarkable and entertaining, we all love you so much! You have such a beautiful heart, sweet Michael, thank you for sharing! May love and light always shine upon you! Love, Noah Eaton "Underneath your clothes there's an endless story..." |
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CSKpoet Senior Member
since 2002-07-12
Posts 845Island in Paradise |
well ya did it! and with humor,as well! ..giggles..loved it..you are so creative in your thoughts...write on! Poetry is: |
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bsquirrel
since 2000-01-03
Posts 7855 |
Thanks, all. Said if I only could ... |
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