my dissertation ( on religious applications )

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Jason
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since 2002-07-31

Posts 72
Macon, GA

0 posted 2002-07-31 04:35 PM

I'll try this explanation
as my own interpretation
of gathered observation
on mankind's infatuation
with God and with creation
I'll use for illustration
a modern adaptation
of ancient publications
from Earth's many nations
through years of alterations
in each variation
there is but one summation
that we all seek elevation
and our own soul's salvation.

(a re-written version of an earlier poem I wrote)
Jason Daniels

WhiteRose
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since 2002-07-23

Posts 3208
somebody's dungeon

1 posted 2002-07-31 04:39 PM

I never read the original, but the re-write is superb.

Sunnyone
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since 2000-07-06

Posts 5334
Staffordshire, England

2 posted 2002-07-31 04:42 PM

I, also, was not privileged to read the first time around, but am very glad to have found this one!!! Great writing, my friend

Open the door and let your adventure begin!!!

paladin

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since 2001-08-05

Posts 930
Pensacola,Fl.

3 posted 2002-07-31 05:07 PM

Wecome to passions.A chaplain in Viet Nam told me you either believe in it or you don't.There it is.

paladin

the_loner_23
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since 2002-06-08

Posts 5479
Jacksonville, Florida, USA

4 posted 2002-07-31 05:15 PM

Enjoyed!!!

Cold hands means a warm heart

GOlDsparklESS
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since 2001-12-13

Posts 428
central nj

5 posted 2002-07-31 05:40 PM

this is a summation of the historical implications of religions' annotations!

Nan

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Member Seraphic

since 1999-05-20

Posts 21191
Cape Cod Massachusetts USA

6 posted 2002-08-01 12:20 PM

In a state of pure elation
As I read your dissertation
In your wordly grand depiction
Of of our worldly situation

...Way kewl...

RSWells
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since 2001-06-17

Posts 2533

7 posted 2002-08-01 02:37 PM

Religious diversification's
insistent differentation
seems to lack toleration
often greed's it's motivation
is in fact peace's usurpation
in it's name's been mutilations
there's been far more lamentation,
warlike altercations
and human relocation
culture devastation
it's twins discrimination
and segregation,
forced assimilations,
denunciations
alientation,
than has been celebration
so I risk my own damnation
and seek excommunication
for my insubordination

Sunshine

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Member Empyrean

since 1999-06-25

Posts 63354
Listening to every heart

8 posted 2002-08-01 02:40 PM

Dang but I love to see
inspire
trickle
down...

excellent, Jason...
and to those who answered in verse?
Kudos to you, too!

Irie
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since 1999-12-01

Posts 1493
Washington State

9 posted 2002-08-01 03:10 PM

Wow, welcome to Passions Jason,
and I really enjoyed reading this piece ...
Excellent!

~Sheri

"The things that come to those that wait may be the things
left by those who got there first"

Gentle Spirit
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since 2000-10-09

Posts 13989

10 posted 2002-08-01 03:49 PM

*applauds*
Well done, keeper for the library.

Sure am glad you found your way here!

Enjoy life, this is NOT a dress rehearsal.

{on the wings of words are spirits fly...and our souls are free~me}

Temptress

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Member Rara Avis

since 1999-06-15

Posts 7136
Mobile, AL

11 posted 2002-08-14 01:27 AM

ACCK!!

You're gonna make me choose between the original and this one? Hmm..I'm off to find the original because I can't seem to spot the differences. Either way, I love them. Glad others finally get to read from your archives.

I will not bend to the cowardice of a silent judgement.

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