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Greeneyes  
since 2000-09-09
Posts 9903In Your Poetic Mind 
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{Excerpts from the notebook, a journal I have been working on for twelve years since your passing} I should not have to remind you time is little given The bending of wild flowers can not be stopped Of all our years together the wind endless -- dragon flies drifting past, the earths seasons cold, pale gold, crumbled dirt thirsty alive I know so little -- You, whom I have watched breathe at nights through water of sleep in a blue city where shadows fall into history Slipping in silence Candles at both ends; when set side by side from fading oceans of yesterdays rain -- Rose petals, sorbet colors untouched -- the softest of soft showering the mountain, -- I remember saying that aloud in a dream A coat of many colors, I was reminded of wearing when the story began : but I found dust beneath my feet broken lines scattered tilting-- in all directions -- I remember reading that in a dream, from a book with your scripture one you sent many years before: darkness set in -- You spoke of beauty -- journeys of rain, storms & light pure in their falling among my strength of all roots never going any where This winter will find me watching from fields of forgotten daffodils -- memories I surrender too, horizons with no end, time between river and sea meeting the bend of color I know so little The ocean looks like a thousand diamonds strewn across a blue blanket I lean against the wind pretend I am weightless and in this moment I am happy [This message has been edited by Greeneyes (07-31-2002 12:07 AM).] |
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the_loner_23 Member Ascendant
since 2002-06-08
Posts 5479Jacksonville, Florida, USA |
 Cold hands means a warm heart |
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Mistletoe Angel
since 2000-12-17
Posts 32816Portland, Oregon |
 (big hugggssssss) Oh Lauren, this is sooooo beautifully touching, sweet friend, my heart goes out to your loss of before but I know deep down this special person you are speaking of thinks of you everyday and is why the seasons whisper and the rosepetals have those colors and the sun shines with loving grace to you! (kiss on cheek) God Bless You, sweet friend, we all love you so much! You have such a beautiful heart, sweet Lauren, thank you for sharing!  May love and light always shine upon you! Love, Noah Eaton "Underneath your clothes there's an endless story..." |
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Janet Marie Member Laureate
since 2000-01-22
Posts 18554 |
You, whom I have watched breathe at nights through water of sleep in a blue city where shadows fall into history Slipping in silence Candles at both ends; when set side by side from fading oceans of yesterdays rain -- Rose petals, sorbet colors untouched -- the softest of soft showering the mountain, -- I remember saying that aloud in a dream A coat of many colors, I was reminded of wearing when the story began : but I found dust beneath my feet broken lines scattered tilting-- in all directions -- I remember reading that in a dream, from a book with your scripture one you sent many years before: darkness set in ============================ You know far more than you realize... your depth of vision in this striking piece serves proof. The imagery in this is as impressive as the expression.  |
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mycafe Senior Member
since 2002-05-23
Posts 584 |
Lauren, as always, you write amazingly... Loved these lines: "A coat of many colors, I was reminded of wearing when the story began : but I found dust beneath my feet broken lines scattered tilting-- in all directions" very beautiful... mycafe Keep counting your blessings |
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Enchantress Member Empyrean
since 2001-08-14
Posts 35113Canada eh. |
Lauren~Your writing has taken on such flavor and depth of late. Absolutely beautiful! Enjoyed this piece so much! ~Hugs~ |
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Seymour Tabin Member Empyrean
since 1999-07-07
Posts 31720Tamarac Fla |
Greeneyes You can't beat JM, lovely poem, enjoyed. |
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Bill Charles Member Patricius
since 2000-07-11
Posts 10619highways, & byways, for now |
Greeneyes - as always... BC |
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Opeth Senior Member
since 2001-12-13
Posts 1543The Ravines |
descriptive, imagery, weather, season, passing of time, solace, wonder,... these are some of the words that came to my mind while reading your work of which I thoroughly enjoyed. |
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Kethry Member Rara Avis
since 2000-07-29
Posts 9082Victoria Australia |
and yet you show so much. *HuGS* Kethry Here in the midst of my lonely abyss, a single joy I find...your presence in my mind. Unknown |
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WhiteRose Member Elite
since 2002-07-23
Posts 3208somebody's dungeon |
Beautiful. I enjoyed the read very much. |
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Sunshine
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Member Empyrean
since 1999-06-25
Posts 63354Listening to every heart |
I seem to be finding the poignant poems today... thank you Lauren, for knowing enough to share.... |
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Madame Chipmunk Member Rara Avis
since 2001-12-05
Posts 8296Michigan |
This winter will find me watching from fields of forgotten daffodils -- memories I surrender too, horizons with no end, time between river and sea meeting the bend of color I know so little and yet, you know so much and you say it so beautifully, Lauren. This poem had a sadness that reached deep inside of me, and I cannot seem to find the exact place where it touched me because it has spread all over me like a feeling of warmth. ~ poetic hugsLyra |
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Sven
since 1999-11-23
Posts 14937East Lansing, MI USA |
I know so little. . . and yet, you know. . . there are words. . . but, I'm thinking that I really don't need to tell you what they are. . . -------------------------------------------------------- To the world, you may only be one person. But to one person, you may be the world. |
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Magnus
since 2001-10-10
Posts 14135South Carolina, USA |
Lauren, you always write such beautiful poetry. And this is no exception! |
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Greeneyes
since 2000-09-09
Posts 9903In Your Poetic Mind |
I thank you all for taking time to read....hugsss all around, with much love.... thank you too for understanding.....I do appreciate much...  Lauren~ The ocean looks like a thousand diamonds strewn across a blue blanket |
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JAR Junior Member
since 2001-11-06
Posts 34 |
LittleL' you know how to touch hearts in many ways J' |
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Samantha G Kennedy Member
since 2002-07-27
Posts 131Kent England |
Rose petals, sorbet colors untouched -- the softest of soft showering the mountain, -- I remember saying that aloud in a dream ahhhhhhh, tis a beautiful write you leave here! loved this Sammie ^i^ |
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nakdthoughts Member Laureate
since 2000-10-29
Posts 19200Between the Lines |
meeting the bend of color love your words M |
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