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Deja Vu
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Deja Vu |
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R. Dean Junior Member
since 2002-07-26
Posts 37Illinois--USA |
Like errant children words will scurry from a dream. You want to chase them back and take control before the night may blow its parting kiss, and disappear. So full of mirth, they cross the misty cliffs into the sun, so reticent to turn and take your hand. No matter; they are gone. And so you sweep away the dust and rub your eyes, remembering this cumbersome embodied world your midnight chariot deceived. Remembering so faintly now the galaxies you passed, a distant life that for a single hour you could touch once more, and not the least of all your own sweet laughing Juliette who once again lies still and cold upon her slab of stone |
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Seymour Tabin Member Empyrean
since 1999-07-07
Posts 31720Tamarac Fla |
R. Dean Subject has nothing to do with write, well done. |
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R. Dean Junior Member
since 2002-07-26
Posts 37Illinois--USA |
Thanks....I think the title is relevant if one's perception of deja vu includes a look at past lives, which is this poem's intention...through the aid of dreams. Yours in peace, |
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Enchantress Member Empyrean
since 2001-08-14
Posts 35113Canada eh. |
Absolutely stunning... You just know I love this piece! ~Morning hugs~ |
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Janet Marie Member Laureate
since 2000-01-22
Posts 18554 |
before the night may blow its parting kiss, and disappear. So full of mirth, they cross the misty cliffs into the sun, so reticent to turn and take your hand. No matter; they are gone. ======================== This is impressive writing, superb employ of imagery and vocabulary, as well as poetic phrasing and personification. Welcome to Poetry Land R Dean..so nice to have you here with us..I look forward to reading more of your polished, well written work. |
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sodpossom Senior Member
since 2001-06-15
Posts 723N.C |
Well done.Interesting read. |
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Samantha G Kennedy Member
since 2002-07-27
Posts 131Kent England |
This practically sang with description! I always read poetry aloud, and here I found a great flow to your piece- the middle stanza slowed the read down for me, it fitted perfectly, truly enjoyed "So full of mirth, they cross the misty cliffs into the sun, so reticent to turn and take your hand. No matter; they are gone" Sammie ^i^ |
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Goodknight Member Elite
since 2002-06-15
Posts 2386Ohio, USA |
very good poetry - I loved this read - thanks Paul |
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Rex Allen McCoy Member Elite
since 2000-01-30
Posts 2863Sippin a Timmy's in London |
Interesting concept and well written too I agree ... I treat deja vu moments as experiences from past lives and I'm never wrong  I once wrote a poem called deja vu ... it's always interesting to read what others think on this matter ~ Rex |
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Mistletoe Angel 
since 2000-12-17
Posts 32816Portland, Oregon |
 BRAVO!!! Oh R. Dean, this is wonderful, sweet friend, I love it, it is amazing how we can all have deja vu on one thing or another, this is powerfully said, I love it, we all love you so much! You have such a beautiful heart, sweet friend, thank you for sharing!  May love and light always shine upon you! Love, Noah Eaton "Underneath your clothes there's an endless story..." |
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Martie
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Member Empyrean
since 1999-09-21
Posts 28049California |
Dean You got me thinking about dreams with this one, and their relationship to past lives. Very interesting and well done poem! |
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Ceinwyn Member Elite
since 2000-07-09
Posts 2175VA |
Your words gave me goose pimples!! Vivid images playing within the movie theatre of my mind...I look forward to more *gets out the junior mints*Kristen |
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Moon Dust
since 1999-06-11
Posts 2177Skelmersdale, UK |
its very creative and very cool i like it If your afraid of the dark, then why did you come? |
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Sunshine
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Member Empyrean
since 1999-06-25
Posts 63354Listening to every heart |
I, too, have deja viewed... just wanting to let you know, I'm going to like reading your works... |
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nakdthoughts Member Laureate
since 2000-10-29
Posts 19200Between the Lines |
very beautifully written...some days I feel like a Juliette |
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Zinsser Senior Member
since 2001-02-27
Posts 1641Calif. |
beautiful work.... look forward to more.... ~~ Connie ~~ |
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Larry C
since 2001-09-10
Posts 10286United States |
R. Dean, Delightful read. If tears could build a stairway and memories a lane, I'd walk right up to heaven and bring you home again. |
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R. Dean Junior Member
since 2002-07-26
Posts 37Illinois--USA |
Thanks to all of you for your reactions to this piece. Yours in peace, |
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