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Anvrill
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since 2002-06-21
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in the interzone now

0 posted 2002-07-27 10:15 AM


If you're wondering what th' hell that there in the subject means...   The very second the first line of this poem came into my head, I was thinking "that is so not something I would write; that's Mike's voice!" And the words kept coming... In the same voice.

So, somehow, Mikhail, you possessed me at work last night.   Maybe you dreamed a poem and it came in through my pen? I d'nah.  



A Smile in Moonlight

She is a quiet girl.

She smiles in accents
and coloured hues
of moonlight's rising.

Her fragile mouth
moves in words
that cannot find voice,
floating by
on an endless
diamond stream.

The words,
so empty, plead
"love me"
as the moon sets
and the light
fades from her smile.



written in blood before everything went black

JCV

[This message has been edited by Anvrill (07-27-2002 10:16 AM).]

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devina
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since 1999-10-28
Posts 3539
Cali
1 posted 2002-07-27 10:22 AM


Possessed or not Lori~ I think you've found your softer poetic voice!!!

You've put imagery in the moon..and? *that* is my favorite thing to see!!!

take care you!!

Open arms can be the most fragile in the world...



Janet Marie
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since 2000-01-22
Posts 18554

2 posted 2002-07-27 10:28 AM


Her fragile mouth
moves in words
that cannot find voice,
floating by
on an endless
diamond stream.
=======================


He influences your pen in very cool ways

this is delicate and lovely...
has a mystical, ethereal essence to it.
Way cool imagery.
Well done poetess Lori

How she loves me, I dont understand
If time wont change me, perhaps she can
And I feel her trying when were apart
God dont let me break her heart

Seymour Tabin
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since 1999-07-07
Posts 31720
Tamarac Fla
3 posted 2002-07-27 10:40 AM


Lori,
What JM said I can never top her.

brian sites
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since 2002-06-25
Posts 1475
usa
4 posted 2002-07-27 01:30 PM


this is different for you
going with devina on this
explore this beautiful softer side
for a while
BS.

I never aimed at reality; I aimed at truth. --Orson Welles

Goodknight
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since 2002-06-15
Posts 2386
Ohio, USA
5 posted 2002-07-27 01:39 PM


enjoyed your poem very much - thanks for the great read - Paul
bsquirrel
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Member Rara Avis
since 2000-01-03
Posts 7855

6 posted 2002-07-27 07:42 PM


I wish I could write like that, baby. God I love you. *long hug* Immer.

She said burn ... together.
-TON

Madame Chipmunk
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since 2001-12-05
Posts 8296
Michigan
7 posted 2002-07-28 09:06 PM


It does sound like a dream, Lori

She smiles in accents
and coloured hues
of moonlight's rising.

How very delicate.
~ chipmunk hugs

Lyra

copyright2002 Lyra Nesius

"poetry is life distilled"  Gwendolyn Brooks

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