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Ceinwyn
Member Elite

since 2000-07-09

Posts 2175
VA

0 posted 2002-07-24 10:50 PM

21...
Lost in direction
Suffering from fatal misscommunication
Fantasy and reality
Clashing before my very eyes
Dillusionment taking me for a roller-coaster ride
Naive..
Cynical..
Everything in between
I'm just (edit)
Ready to leave
The drama
And the one way streets
Time to fold
Up the innocence lost
Within celestial sheets
Turn down
The corners of
My tattered heart
Stuff old feelings
In an old shoe box
Tuck away my insecurities
Within the pockets of
A pair of faded blue jeans...

[This message has been edited by Ceinwyn (07-24-2002 10:55 PM).]

the_loner_23
Member Ascendant

since 2002-06-08

Posts 5479
Jacksonville, Florida, USA

1 posted 2002-07-24 10:51 PM

Very cool

Cold hands means a warm heart

PoetryIsLife

Senior Member

since 2001-10-27

Posts 1763
...in my boxers...

2 posted 2002-07-24 11:00 PM

I like the final version, Kristen. Nicely done; an enjoyable final product.

I noticed one thing:

"Stuff old feelings
In an old shoe box"

Perhaps find a way to not have 'old' in two lines that are so close together? Just a thought.

Sincerely,
Titus

As I'm out there, walking, searching, for myself, for you.... won't you join me? Let's walk this journey together.

Mistletoe Angel

Member Empyrean

since 2000-12-17

Posts 32816
Portland, Oregon

3 posted 2002-07-25 01:22 AM

(big hugggsssssss) Oh Kristen, I know how you feel here and my heart goes out to you but I know just ahead of you many promises and joys are in store! (kiss on cheek) Know that this all will pass, sweet friend, we all love you so much! You have such a beautiful heart, sweet Kristen, thank you for sharing!

May love and light always shine upon you!

Love,
Noah Eaton

P.S: I got your e-mail from before and I would always be happy to chat with you on IM; I added you to my Buddy List, YAY!!!

"Underneath your clothes there's an endless story..."

Shakira

Maverick Wolf
Member

since 1999-11-13

Posts 94
Scandia, MN

4 posted 2002-07-25 01:47 AM

Great write. I know they aren't prolific words, but they convey my thoughts well enough.

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