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0 posted 2002-07-24 04:01 PM


Rolling on the laughing floor
speak in tongues as ceiling roars

Electric fingers from copperhead wrists
butterbisquit crown on tufts of bliss

Midair motes in a rodeo dance
the frying pan waltz, ceiling fan prance

Key to the seaweed, distillness of green
angels bury faces in foamy serene

Suet cruets pumping the fast and cruel
voiding all portals, the gasping gruel

Atmosphere of frog, purple tower rumbling
the smiles for the grape, the miles for tumbling

Ivory ladies with ivy lathes
inscrutable cliffs, forested gaze

Ancient catclawed pharoah furniture
gold gleaming sweat of simian overture

Carnival glass goldfish see music swim
walls of water hold the sandbags in

Clover torques the lusty summer
mowerblade bees count the numbers

Broken spokes in dharma wheels
Dali jigs and Orson reels

Sir Eel writhes with Fibonacci
golden mean, hot and crunchy

Parceled age rose many times
to check upon the newborn signs

The chamber's planes aren't laughing anymore
I leave my room, and lock the door

don't know if this is what you were looking for
but it's what came out

I never aimed at reality; I aimed at truth. --Orson Welles

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Sunshine
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1 posted 2002-07-24 04:11 PM



I'm not sure what BSQ was looking for,
but I'm glad this tumbled clean...

Wow...

wranx
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2 posted 2002-07-24 09:40 PM


Good Lord, Man!
This should have a warning for "acid" casualties,
The images kept floodin' the brain pan, almost couldn't keep up!

Ahhh.

~wranx

The shortest distance between two points...
is sometimes, intolerable.      

Bukowski

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3 posted 2002-07-24 10:52 PM


This is exactly the sort of strangeness I was looking for.

My own mind is fermenting a poem to th' challenge -- it begins "Rolling on the laughing floor/Pressing face to crying glass/She burns like a flower within my chest" Or something like that...

I'll work on it!

She said burn ... together.
-TON

the_loner_23
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4 posted 2002-07-24 10:53 PM


LOL Cool

Cold hands means a warm heart

brian sites
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5 posted 2002-07-25 12:20 PM


thank you for the kind read Sunshine
wranx-- huh! ironic that that's where I was coming from   thanks, dude
EGtF-- good, thank you. cuz I weren't sure
       and you know I can't wait to read your take
loner23-- glad you laughed it

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