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Rendezvous |
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ethome Member Patricius
since 2000-05-14
Posts 11858New Brunswick Canada 
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Rendezvous Your smile, strawberry in the drunken light of the night. We touch with our eyes, soft sounds of rhythm play along to the waltz in our heart. A ghost from the past drifts in sounding echoes, the thoughts and prayers of buried dreams, dreams never captured by their vows. Retrospect the soul's thief, a late cracksman to rob the peace, the final calm with lost faith on a shelf of promise left in haste. Yet, your succulent sweet breasts heave on a wave flowing into the revolution of darkness we share. Sub rosa, we lie peaceful easy where, replete with love, we're drowsy, servants of our hearts as we ride on dreams made from wishes slowly fading into a recurring strange night...................... The role of poetry is to utter the un-utterable; to open up |
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serenity blaze Member Empyrean
since 2000-02-02
Posts 27738 |
Sub Rosa? if I wanted an epitaph...would be MINE...grin egads but yer all so beautiful...  It was delicious even before that, but the "sub rosa?" ---did me in... Look up... don't tell.. beware of falling petals! love ya e! |
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ethome Member Patricius
since 2000-05-14
Posts 11858New Brunswick Canada |
Thanks southern belle you're such a great encouragement! I will never view you as sub rosa. You'll always be large as life....You know, the "good life" Thanks and I love ya right back! |
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JamesMichael Member Empyrean
since 1999-11-16
Posts 33336Kapolei, Hawaii, USA |
Some very nice lines contained within...James |
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Dark Angel Member Patricius
since 1999-08-04
Posts 10095 |
Wonderful imagery  |
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serenity blaze Member Empyrean
since 2000-02-02
Posts 27738 |
Retrospect the soul's thief, a late cracksman-- BULL'S EYE!!! (sorry, I do tend to READ..and read and read...) |
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ethome Member Patricius
since 2000-05-14
Posts 11858New Brunswick Canada |
Thanks James...so good to hear from you! Dark Angel....Thanks for dropping in to read this! Celeste...A bullseye to you for always hitting the thoughts right on! Thanks for the second read......LOoOve to ya! The role of poetry is to utter the un-utterable; to open up |
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Suetang Member Ascendant
since 2001-03-07
Posts 5187Melbourne, Australia |
Hello Eric I really enjoyed your words and I detected you may be a bit of a romantic?? Take care....Sue Suetang |
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Greeneyes  
since 2000-09-09
Posts 9903In Your Poetic Mind |
Wow poet sir, this is very striking.....very beautiful.... Lauren~ Its been a long road |
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ethome Member Patricius
since 2000-05-14
Posts 11858New Brunswick Canada |
Hi Sue! Yeah hopelessly, thanks for reading!! Lauren Glad you could drop in and have a read I appreciate your thoughts!! |
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Marsha
since 2000-07-10
Posts 7423Maidstone Kent England |
PT darling heart I’m breathless with wonder this is simply gorgeous. YOU do KNOW I simply LOVE your writing don’t you? Such a rendering of your hearts song in this delight darling heart it is exquisite. You shine with wonder and light in this jewel. I don’t know how to express myself you simply excel darling boy, always you write beautiful flowing lines, and always they descend over my soul like a veil of wonder. I love this utterly utterly, You really are superb Sub rosa beneath the rose I love it utterly you are simply an awesome writer darling heart. Wonderful wonderful wonderful   Love and warm stuff As always Mushy   Breathe through the heat of our desire |
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Startime Member Ascendant
since 2000-10-03
Posts 5918Canada |
A night filled with softness that sings gentle music from the dreams two now weave *sigh* beautiful...I love its soft music... Love I leave with you whether it is in your life now or yet the essense of your dreams. |
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Martie
Moderator
Member Empyrean
since 1999-09-21
Posts 28049California |
Eric Deep words here, passionate and sad..drenched with sweetness and bittered a bit with recall..yet filled with peace also. Lovely to read! |
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Interloper
since 2000-11-06
Posts 8369Deep in the heart |
Eric, I wish I had written most of that The images you evoke are priceless! I think I will steal some of this ... beware Fool, said my Muse to me, look in thy heart and write. |
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ethome Member Patricius
since 2000-05-14
Posts 11858New Brunswick Canada |
Marsha....Thank you so much love. I appreciate the upbuilding comments so much! Karen I haven't heard from you for such a long time. It's a delight....thanks for the kind thoughts! Martie you're a doll! I always appreciate your wonderful comments! You got the whole thing figured out too! Interloper....Those are kind words from you and I appreciate them more than you know! |
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catalinamoon
since 2000-06-03
Posts 9543The Shores of Alone |
Subtly sexy and beautiful. Wonderful word play. Sandra |
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Sven
since 1999-11-23
Posts 14937East Lansing, MI USA |
wow. . . now, I like this one Eric. . . it does indeed bring on a *sigh*. . . great poem . . . ------------------------------------------------- To the world, you may only be one person. But to one person, you may be the world. |
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ethome Member Patricius
since 2000-05-14
Posts 11858New Brunswick Canada |
Thank you Sandra.....Nice to hear from you. Sven...Always good to hear from you! Glad you liked this! |
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Janet Marie Member Laureate
since 2000-01-22
Posts 18554 |
Your smile, strawberry in the drunken light of the night. We touch with our eyes, soft sounds of rhythm play along to the waltz in our heart. A ghost from the past drifts in sounding echoes, the thoughts and prayers of buried dreams, dreams never captured by their vows. =========================== this is a little different style for you...love seeing poets try new things... I love the haunted, mystic feel to this... it has a angsty edge to it that drew the reader in as well as the imagery. Love that first line. waay cool E-babes mothyme You ... |
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Magnus
since 2001-10-10
Posts 14135South Carolina, USA |
Eric, I do believe this is one of your best... Love the wordsmithing and imagery of this poem...very sensual, tender and sad as well... |
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ethome Member Patricius
since 2000-05-14
Posts 11858New Brunswick Canada |
Janet my dear poet pet it's a pleasure to read your comments always. I have to try something new every once in a while.....Thanks so much for the thoughts. Magnus my friend...Thanks for the comments glad you could drop in and take a look! |
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Madame Chipmunk Member Rara Avis
since 2001-12-05
Posts 8296Michigan |
Absolutely...a delicious poem, if I ever tasted one, Eric... I especially loved that last verse... WOW!!!!  ~ sub rosa hugsLyra |
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ethome Member Patricius
since 2000-05-14
Posts 11858New Brunswick Canada |
Thanks Lyra I appreciate those kind words of encouragement! |
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Kethry Member Rara Avis
since 2000-07-29
Posts 9082Victoria Australia |
Eric, well I've been given the heave ho, been asked to heave to but I've never had breasts to heave on unless you mean breats close to heaven. I enjoyed your write even if it's not about me. Unless it is about me and you mean deep, deep, bottom of the world south. Kethry Here in the midst of my lonely abyss, a single joy I find...your presence in my mind. Unknown |
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ethome Member Patricius
since 2000-05-14
Posts 11858New Brunswick Canada |
He he I had to smile at you reply Keth! No no no breasts that heave upward with passion and sensuality! Thanks to ya way down under my picnic girl! |
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Ivy Rose Senior Member
since 2001-12-29
Posts 1300MA, USA |
WOW!!! GORGEOUS POEM, ethome. So beautiful in its language of love and the wonder of a sultry interlude of love. ***Ivy Rose |
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Enchantress Member Empyrean
since 2001-08-14
Posts 35113Canada eh. |
DANG!! You know...no one can beat a Canadian when it comes to writing sensually romantic! I found myself holding my breath as I read this. Wonderful piece of work here Eric! May we see more.....please? *exhaling now* ~Canadian Hugs~ ~Somewhere in my heart I'm always |
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Mistletoe Angel
since 2000-12-17
Posts 32816Portland, Oregon |
(smiles) Awwwwwwww, you are a true romantic, sweet friend, she is a very lucky woman and I know she will always be touched by the strawberry afterglow of true love! (big hugggsssssss) This is sooooo lovely, sweet friend, we all love you so much! You have such a beautiful heart,l sweet Eric, thank you for sharing!  May love and light always shine upon you! Love, Noah Eaton "Underneath your clothes there's an endless story..." |
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Sunshine
Administrator
Member Empyrean
since 1999-06-25
Posts 63354Listening to every heart |
I almost expected to see the Serene one's name here a third time...just to prove she really, really likes this... like I do... |
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ethome Member Patricius
since 2000-05-14
Posts 11858New Brunswick Canada |
Thank you I Rose I really appreciate your comments. Sultry interlude indeed, smile! Enchantress.....Yeah us Canucks are old softies when it comes to romantic inclines....Can't help ourselves! Thanks so much! Noah I really appreciate your upbeat comments....Thanks so much! |
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ethome Member Patricius
since 2000-05-14
Posts 11858New Brunswick Canada |
Sorry Sunshine.....Missed you in the last reply....The Serene one indeed....I'ts a wonder....she is a colorful character to say the least.....he he.....wish I could go to her wedding I think it would be great! Thanks for the read and the comments! |
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suthern
since 1999-07-29
Posts 20723Louisiana |
Retrospect the soul's thief, a late cracksman to rob the peace, Wowsers! *S* The entire poem is excellent, ethome... but these lines pack the powerful punch of truth. *S* Well done! |
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ethome Member Patricius
since 2000-05-14
Posts 11858New Brunswick Canada |
Thank you Suthern glad you could drop in and scrutinize the cracksman! |
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