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Midnight Quest
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Midnight Quest |
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Saunni Senior Member
since 2000-07-11
Posts 1777West Virginia 
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Midnight Quest Nature called to me from my hearts perception of it So, I went on a mission to find both you and I I curtsied the evening for all I found When my midnight quest found me on a late night drive... Windows rolled down to absorb the wind loud in my ears And, with a little summer blowing through my hair I valued the sky as it seemed to get closer And, around me laid serene everywhere... I needed to disappear in all this before me As the owls were in jubilee to sundown And, on my journey I found you in this display And, you rode shot gun through this small town... Evergreens surrounded the road to no where I was going The seasons breeze just noisily blowing And, with the clouds in the shape of lightening from the hills to sky I just relished in the presence of you on this ride... I played not a sound to take in natures song And, just to the evenings tune I sang along And, just when I had to brake for lost dreams It was then I could hear August scream... For, the silence in the halt to make my way home Made this heart feel every bit for once at home My midnight quest to finding us both Left a sense of awe as I rode... I embraced the moment for soon would be gone And, August would lead way to Septembers song I can find you where peace roams these hills Never doubt that I have, I can, and I will... Sauni:)The Only Time I See The Sun Is When I'm Within That Vanilla Breeze.The Only Time I'm One With The Sun Is When He Shelters Me From The Rain. L.S |
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shadowchild458 Member
since 2002-07-10
Posts 117MN,USA |
hey that was good, it reminded me of "Devine secrets of the ya ya sisterhood" that's movie/book if ya didn't know. it's not all in the same structure though which in some ways i like but in some ways just anoys me but like i said it's not the question of 'does the world like saunni's poetry?' it's more 'does saunni like saunni's poetry?' and if that's the case go with it and write more!  life may just take a while but i guess heaven's worth the wait |
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Mistletoe Angel 
since 2000-12-17
Posts 32816Portland, Oregon |
 (smiles) This is a wonderfully upbeat poem, sweet friend, yes, always keep that determination and happiness is bound to be yours forever and you will find all your heart desires! (kiss on cheek) This is excellent, sweet friend, we all love you so much! You have such a beautiful heart, sweet Saunni, thank you for sharing!  May love and light always shine upon you! Love, Noah Eaton "Underneath your clothes there's an endless story..." |
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Bridget Shenachie Senior Member
since 2002-01-23
Posts 1056Kansas USA |
The last line was my favorite-- "Never doubt that I have, I can, and I will..." This speaks volumes and could lead to a million new poems... Keep writing! Shenachie |
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Saunni Senior Member
since 2000-07-11
Posts 1777West Virginia |
shadowchild, no I have never seen such a movie, I watch very few movies at that. Yes, you are right, it's not about if the world likes my poetry, it's a matter of if I do. That's why in my constructive critiques box I suggested I didn't want it and that I enjoy my own work and if somebody gets something from it, that's great, too. Word for word. Sauni:)The Only Time I See The Sun Is When I'm Within That Vanilla Breeze.The Only Time I'm One With The Sun Is When He Shelters Me From The Rain. L.S |
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