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Greeneyes  
since 2000-09-09
Posts 9903In Your Poetic Mind 
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Every day a new beginning every night a chance to dance In flowers we welcome green fields in gentle glides until day merges with midnight its the synergy of fragments spreading petals in all softness How many Octobers had left him? meeting his shadow My muse reminded me of the fragrance in the bottle lavender floating like feathers from the sky {I studied once, the instructions, they seem distant now from all I remember -- to far from here} Is it, with in us for the Sea to try out sentences lapping endlessly-- that all this blue goes with out pain We stand alone on the dance floor he is betting flowers will fall fragile and darker piers will jut into darker waters funny how that feels to say aloud-- The rain is battering the grounds I am not sure I really care about that-- its almost a peace 'Peace' funny how that sounds to say aloud The cutting edge -- I woke at six am -- I am not a morning person You say "I understand" Really, you do not The ocean looks like a thousand diamonds strewn across a blue blanket I lean against the wind pretend I am weightless and in this moment I am happy [This message has been edited by Greeneyes (07-22-2002 08:35 AM).] |
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the_loner_23 Member Ascendant
since 2002-06-08
Posts 5479Jacksonville, Florida, USA |
 Cold hands means a warm heart |
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Mistletoe Angel
since 2000-12-17
Posts 32816Portland, Oregon |
"In flowers we welcome green fields in gentle glides until day merges with midnight its the synergy of fragments spreading petals in all softness"   (smiles) Awwwwwwww, this is sooooooo beautiful, sweet friend, I especially loved the beginning as it brought the muse dancing whimsically in those October breezes only to find the morning light come and distract you! (kiss on cheek) This is lovely, sweet friend, I love it, ooohhhhhhh...I'm so happy you're back and well again, God Bless You, we all love you so much! You have such a beautiful heart, sweet Lauren, thank you for sharing!  May love and light always shine upon you! Love, Noah Eaton "Underneath your clothes there's an endless story..." |
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Enchantress Member Empyrean
since 2001-08-14
Posts 35113Canada eh. |
Lauren, your writing has taken on a quality so indescribably profound.. I cannot find the words my friend to tell you how I feel.. after reading something you have written... no...not after reading... after experiencing for that is what it is like. ...an exquisite experience. So beautiful, so precise, and true. Okay...I'm starting to gush..I'll go now... Thank you for this Lauren... and I am SO glad you're home! ~Hugs~ |
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JAR Junior Member
since 2001-11-06
Posts 34 |
Little L' sometimes I do, sometime I don't I am not sure how you do this but I DO love it. JAR |
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Janet Marie Member Laureate
since 2000-01-22
Posts 18554 |
How many Octobers had left him? meeting his shadow My muse reminded me of the fragrance in the bottle lavender floating like feathers from the sky {I studied once, the instructions, they seem distance now from all I remember -- to far from here} Is it, with in us for the Sea to try out sentences lapping endlessly-- that all this blue goes with out pain ====================================== have I mentioned that I love your muse?  you will already know the reasons this one spoke to me... "that all this blue goes with out pain I refuse to believe any other way. *smile* beautiful poetic whispers L-girlie  How she loves me, I dont understand |
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Dark Stranger Member Patricius
since 2001-03-19
Posts 13631West Coast |
ms lauren you do velvet and soft skin under lovely work ms |
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Gentle Spirit Member Patricius
since 2000-10-09
Posts 13989 |
Lauren, your heart speaks such truths, so softly. It is so good to have your precious words again, and you dear friend, back at these blue pages. Hugs. Enjoy life, this is NOT a dress rehearsal. |
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Sunshine
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Member Empyrean
since 1999-06-25
Posts 63354Listening to every heart |
Lauren...how gently this reads, I felt I needed to tiptoe in just to leave a note of thanks, for all you write... |
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Martie
Moderator
Member Empyrean
since 1999-09-21
Posts 28049California |
Lauren Fraile hand that lingers so in words, like the touch of the softest glove...beautiful! |
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Neeraja Senior Member
since 2002-06-22
Posts 812The Netherlands |
A beautiful poem!!! With impressive lines... Neeraja |
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Interloper
since 2000-11-06
Posts 8369Deep in the heart |
If you get any better we're gonna have to pay you to read your work Fool, said my Muse to me, look in thy heart and write. |
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Larry C
since 2001-09-10
Posts 10286United States |
Lauren, I liked so much about this poem. ============== The rain is battering the grounds I am not sure I really care about that-- its almost a peace ============== But I sure can relate to this verse. Another fabulous write. Bless you. If tears could build a stairway and memories a lane, I'd walk right up to heaven and bring you home again. |
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Sven
since 1999-11-23
Posts 14937East Lansing, MI USA |
quote: depends on what else you're hearing at the time. . . I see that you heard while you were away. . . good. . . --------------------------------------------------------- To the world, you may only be one person. But to one person, you may be the world. |
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Auguste
since 2000-02-16
Posts 3953By the sea |
I'm not a morning person either. Loved it, Lauren! Hope you're feeling better. *hugs* |
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Irie Senior Member
since 1999-12-01
Posts 1493Washington State |
I cannot find suitable words to respond to this piece, yet, I couldn't just let it go with out at least trying to saying something! And I still don't know what to say..... Excellent Lauren! ~Sheri |
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Mark Bohannan Member Rara Avis
since 2000-06-21
Posts 7269In the winds of Cherokee song |
Your works always take us to new boundaries of reading as you express yourself so that we can almost place ourselves there in thought......you complete before transitioning into another without too much delay....and you line breaks and pauses add that certain appeal to your reads that force the reader to take those extra few seconds to let it soak in. Superb penning as always and you know I adore reading your works. |
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Goodknight Member Elite
since 2002-06-15
Posts 2386Ohio, USA |
truly a poem to experience not just read - this is do well done - thanks for a great read/experience - Paul |
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passing shadows Member Empyrean
since 1999-08-26
Posts 45577displaced |
funny how one's outlook changes...each day, each week, each year...very upbeat! I like this one. |
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Muys Member
since 2002-04-06
Posts 389The Netherlands |
Dear Greeneyes what a nice poem, i am so glad it go better with you and Love Muys.  |
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NewEnglandlazurlu Member Rara Avis
since 2002-01-04
Posts 7470A Mountain Paradise |
Dear Lauren: I am happy to see you and glad you know you are writing again after your accident. God bless you. This was just so beautiful. Hugs, Marti "Even if life is full of thorns, I still embrace it for I know that in between those thorns, there is a rose worth all the pain." |
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