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Sven
since 1999-11-23
Posts 14937East Lansing, MI USA 
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poem know write quill ink blood vein heart passion sand time circle ending eternity holds begin love find seek death there are too many words right now lost heart this that other a other may be know you too many words for my pen to write picture paper card snow an speaker screen glass slide I don't know where exactly to begin control delete insert frame tab lighthouse pin point prick my heart says to begin then music poetry dance life light in metal iron gold silver ruby my soul says to begin now mute help sleep camera film flash phone black tones pulses and my pen just sits, waiting start end card world peace peas O window view slide gleam sparkle waiting for me to decide where booking strand piece to coiled book paper spine to begin, who to listen to, where to go follow map desire treasure ship coast sail water waves if it were only so simple, to take mouse cord frame to being and thus seeing page first the first step to find the words backspace lock enter end knows shift walking strides go stop and not look back at where the pen scroll parchment papyrus service pony storage define might fall or what it might leave behind track over under wit pound leave mill reveal but, the pen leaves tracks, or at least algebra rules numbers equal letters make my hat fit band traces of what's in our hearts, or our souls nine tee for four I tree three thee leek leak and then, that's when we look back glasses beard black teeth eye red brown white blue and find that there aren't so many words book open read speak this page cover calendar bottle Divine finding card note staff key signature revealed this now ----------------------------------------------------------------- To the world, you may only be one person. But to one person, you may be the world. [This message has been edited by Sven (07-19-2002 04:30 PM).] |
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the_loner_23 Member Ascendant
since 2002-06-08
Posts 5479Jacksonville, Florida, USA |
 Cold hands means a warm heart [This message has been edited by the_loner_23 (07-19-2002 04:32 PM).] |
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vandana
since 1999-10-22
Posts 10463USA |
enjoyed  |
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ethome Member Patricius
since 2000-05-14
Posts 11858New Brunswick Canada |
Sven This is exceptional writing....Well done my friend and clevery presented....Love the message within the message! |
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Goodknight Member Elite
since 2002-06-15
Posts 2386Ohio, USA |
sven - so well written - such familiar feelings evoked by your clever poem and presentation - I loved this - Paul |
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passing shadows Member Empyrean
since 1999-08-26
Posts 45577displaced |
wow...... |
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Mistletoe Angel
since 2000-12-17
Posts 32816Portland, Oregon |
 (smiles) Oh Sven, this is wonderful, sweet friend, this is by far my favorite of yours yet, I always love how you paint these poetic "frescoes" and reveal deeper levels of thinking! (big hugggssssss) This is marvelous, sweet friend, we all love you so much! You have such a beautiful heart, sweet Sven, thank you for sharing!  May love and light always shine upon you! Love, Noah Eaton "Underneath your clothes there's an endless story..." |
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Enchantress Member Empyrean
since 2001-08-14
Posts 35113Canada eh. |
Sven, you are one amazing writer! I appreciate and enjoy your work! Nothing short of brilliant! ~Hugs~ ~Somewhere in my heart I'm always |
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paladin
since 2001-08-05
Posts 930Pensacola,Fl. |
Wonderful format.I really don't know how you could improve on it. paladin |
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BluesSerenade Member Patricius
since 2001-10-23
Posts 10549By the Seaside |
Sven, you've done a wonderful job with this!! I so enjoyed the way you tied so many words together and made them fit within your message~ Neat poem~ |
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rascalx Senior Member
since 1999-08-25
Posts 590Florence, SC, USA |
John, Superbly written and well crafted. It was the visual effect which pulled me in and the words that kept me there! Good job, my friend! |
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kaile
since 2000-02-06
Posts 5146singapore |
John, i urge you to get yourself published...i will tear down doors to get a copy of your book... have i ever thanked you for being the writer that you are? hmm...thanks! p/s: the formatting, while great, is secondary..what is most important is how you presented those pesky sentiments, inherent in every poet's consciousness..good job! |
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Paul Wilson
since 2002-07-07
Posts 4711United States |
A true work of art. REally Nice. |
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catalinamoon
since 2000-06-03
Posts 9543The Shores of Alone |
Very interesting write, John Sandra |
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Neeraja Senior Member
since 2002-06-22
Posts 812The Netherlands |
What a clever presentation!!! Wow!!! Neeraja |
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Temptress
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Member Rara Avis
since 1999-06-15
Posts 7136Mobile, AL |
Well, I see you finally found some words, Sweet Man.  You know I love this, don't you? I'm with faterider. I'd be the first one there to get a copy of your book. You surprise me every time you write something new. I will not bend to the cowardice of a silent judgement. |
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Sven
since 1999-11-23
Posts 14937East Lansing, MI USA |
thanks so much everyone. . . this one just sprang up on me. . . I really didn't know what to write. . . the thought, "too many words" just came to me, and I went with it. . . I imagined someone, surrounded by words. . . trying to find the ones that he needed to say what he was trying to say. . . the constant war between heart and head. . . and just wondering how we really do eventually find the words that we need. . . and how they stand out from the rest. . . thanks again, and faterider and Temptress. . . I'll be sure to give both of you the first two copies. . . ------------------------------------------------------- To the world, you may only be one person. But to one person, you may be the world. |
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