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Please, Teach Me
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Please, Teach Me |
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Gentle Spirit Member Patricius
since 2000-10-09
Posts 13989
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My heart once again wants to touch that place where we both resided in such a harmony that I had never known before, but that place has been locked away so deep inside~ no longer can the sun shine through the darkness of feelings betrayed and now my heart... my heart pleads with me to allow that door to be opened again to that place where love~ love was so innocent~ and my soul weeps with longing to find that key to unlock that fear and it whispers to our love in gentle call~~ please, teach me.... Enjoy life, this is NOT a dress rehearsal. {on the wings of words are spirits fly...and our souls are free~me} [This message has been edited by Gentle Spirit (07-19-2002 03:55 PM).] |
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the_loner_23 Member Ascendant
since 2002-06-08
Posts 5479Jacksonville, Florida, USA |
Speechless Cold hands means a warm heart |
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Sunshine
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Member Empyrean
since 1999-06-25
Posts 63354Listening to every heart |
Ah girl...you pen poignancy so well...it is as deep and clear as a long hidden stream deep in the forest, and as green as the moss....lovely, lovely....there is always someone willing to teach, if someone is willing to learn.... |
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Goodknight Member Elite
since 2002-06-15
Posts 2386Ohio, USA |
this is a good poem - touching as it invites me in to feel the emotion it evokes - thanks Paul |
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Mark Bohannan Member Rara Avis
since 2000-06-21
Posts 7269In the winds of Cherokee song |
This one is so full of a longing heart yearning to once again be set free from past pains. Beautifully spoken and your line breaks add that slight pause that makes this whole verse just light up with sincerity. It's as if one could almost hear you speaking it yourself while they close their eyes to read. Well done and I can't imagine this one being ignored. No indeed. |
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Sven
since 1999-11-23
Posts 14937East Lansing, MI USA |
yes. . . the plea to be shown again. . . done with such warmth and depth. . . you've grown much my friend. . . well done. . . --------------------------------------------------------- To the world, you may only be one person. But to one person, you may be the world. |
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Mistletoe Angel 
since 2000-12-17
Posts 32816Portland, Oregon |
 (big hugggsssssss) Oh Donna, I know how you feel, sweet friend, my heart goes out to you but I know deep down the spirit of that child will always be in you and as long as you believe in it, that sweet little girl will always shine in your golden heart and deep down the innocence will always shine! (kiss on cheek) This is heartfelt, sweet friend, we all love you so much! You have such a beautiful heart, sweet Donna, thank you for sharing!  May love and light always shine upon you! Love, Noah Eaton "Underneath your clothes there's an endless story..." |
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Gentle Spirit Member Patricius
since 2000-10-09
Posts 13989 |
Loner  Karilea, there is always room to learn dear friend. I write how I feel. I remember writing this way once a long time ago and someone told me "this isn't poetry, it's a touching letter" well.....ya know... I'm still writing letters.....lol....thanks hon. Thank you Paul. Well Mark, I have to think that even when we speak the words, the heart has to hear them. I read a quote once, forgive me for not remembering the author, but it went something like this... "forgiving is not forgetting, it is letting go of the pain..." forgiving is easy, but the pain...takes time ...time is the healing element for us all... Sorry all, I am rambling with my wandering thoughts again... and then this.......is the end product...again... Sven, Passions has taught me much, and the friendships here.. the support here..... is priceless... thanks Enjoy life, this is NOT a dress rehearsal. |
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Gentle Spirit Member Patricius
since 2000-10-09
Posts 13989 |
Noah, you snuck in there on me. Thanks sweetie. Enjoy life, this is NOT a dress rehearsal. |
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Enchantress Member Empyrean
since 2001-08-14
Posts 35113Canada eh. |
Donna...this is so beautiful sweetie! ~Hugs~ ~Somewhere in my heart I'm always |
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Gentle Spirit Member Patricius
since 2000-10-09
Posts 13989 |
Nancy thank you. I've just been letting my feelings get to paper lately.....no matter what form they come out in. Hugs hon. Enjoy life, this is NOT a dress rehearsal. |
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sigheyes Member
since 2001-04-25
Posts 323the winds of destiny |
Love is a teacher sometimes all that is needed is to listen.. wonderful write Donna. |
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Paul Wilson
since 2002-07-07
Posts 4711United States |
You hold the key to your heart This wonderful place where your feelings start Don't keep them locked away Share them with someone special every day A very touching poem from a Gentle Spirit Paul |
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JamesMichael Member Empyrean
since 1999-11-16
Posts 33336Kapolei, Hawaii, USA |
Lovely...James |
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Neeraja Senior Member
since 2002-06-22
Posts 812The Netherlands |
Lovely poem... full of emotions... Neeraja |
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Professor Gloom Member Elite
since 2000-07-23
Posts 3082of Depression |
Very nice you teach by example. Gloom |
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thejingler Junior Member
since 2002-07-21
Posts 15NC |
"Soul weeping", "Darkness", "Locked Away" These words ring false, even in verse, when used by someone as lovely as yourself. The humble jingler suggest that you seek out the joy in life..and verse. |
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Greeneyes
since 2000-09-09
Posts 9903In Your Poetic Mind |
and my soul weeps with longing to find that key to unlock that fear and it whispers to our love in gentle call~~ please, teach me.... The ocean looks like a thousand diamonds strewn across a blue blanket |
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mycafe Senior Member
since 2002-05-23
Posts 584 |
So full of yearnings...very nice. mycafe Keep counting your blessings |
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catalinamoon
since 2000-06-03
Posts 9543The Shores of Alone |
I know what you mean, Donna. Well said. Sandra |
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Gentle Spirit Member Patricius
since 2000-10-09
Posts 13989 |
SE, thanks friend. Appreciate it. Paul, thank you for the poetic reply. A poet is always twice blessed with a reply like that. Thanks. James, thanks for the lovely appreciate it much. Neeraja, emotions make the words sometimes thanks bunches. Gloom, I am but like others, I am still learning... Jingler, we all seek joy in our lives some of us just find it quicker. Thank you for the lovely comment. Lauren,   MC, thank you much. I appreciate your words. Sandra, I know your heart has that capacity for love and like so many of us...trust is not easy. Hugs to you sweetie. Enjoy life, this is NOT a dress rehearsal. |
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BloomingRose Member Elite
since 2000-08-09
Posts 3092Florida |
Learning to trust love again is not always easy, but sometimes in the end, it's worth it. Enjoyed the tenderness of this lovely poem. Deb |
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Gentle Spirit Member Patricius
since 2000-10-09
Posts 13989 |
Deb, thank you. Am so glad that you enjoyed. hugs. Enjoy life, this is NOT a dress rehearsal. |
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sigheyes Member
since 2001-04-25
Posts 323the winds of destiny |
Keep listening with no fear keep whispering he will hear~ delicate bump* for the pure beauty of your soul in this wonderful piece. *s* |
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Chanson Senior Member
since 2000-08-19
Posts 1559Up Creek w/Out Paddle |
Hi Gentle Spirit, this is very touching. *s When you think you have heard it all, |
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texasrose Member
since 2001-10-24
Posts 146 |
Donna your free verse is wonderful. This almost slipped by me. I am glad it didn't. It's a keeper! |
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