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Kethry
Member Rara Avis

since 2000-07-29

Posts 9082
Victoria Australia

0 posted 2002-07-18 08:15 AM

everything that you can do
has all been done before
everything you say has all been said
so I watch in silent fear as
you walk out that door
while I listen to the echoes in my head

every dream I've ever dreamed
lies shattered on the floor
the silence leaves me wishing I were dead
all the empty plotting schemes
of my power trip and more
return me to the echoes in my head

all the empty pages - you
and the way you played the score
while I lived a life of beauty and of dread
in music you're a genius
in real life you're just a bore
or so I tell the echoes in my head

you were the great composer
I was your little whoa
kept my body nice or stayed in bed
I dangled as your plaything
played your games before
for you stilled the empty echoes in my head

now I'm screaming to the silence
as you walk out the door
I inhale the empty echoes of my dread
I don't want to be alone
with no strength to fight this war
and surrender to the echoes in my head

Ok now Michael? Thanks for the heads up

Here in the midst of my lonely abyss, a single joy I find...your presence in my mind. Unknown

[This message has been edited by Kethry (07-19-2002 06:55 AM).]

wranx
Member Elite

since 2002-06-07

Posts 3689
Moved from a shack to a barn

1 posted 2002-07-18 08:33 AM

Kethry,
Enjoyed your post!
Be not, a slave to convention.
I can see from this, you are your own woman.

I have found, that often, those with an immense talent in one area, are also immensly inept in most others.

~wranx

I have great faith in Humanity...It's just most of the Humans, I'm not too keen on. E.F.Rose

Goodknight
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since 2002-06-15

Posts 2386
Ohio, USA

2 posted 2002-07-18 11:25 AM

kethry - such powerful words and feelings and images and such a deep look into the aching conflicts that go on inside one's head, spirit, and heart. This is fine poetry - Paul

Marsha

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since 2000-07-10

Posts 7423
Maidstone Kent England

3 posted 2002-07-18 11:47 AM

Keth darling heart sister of my soul and writer of life’s truths and wisdom, your thoughts and words in this simply leave me agog. Truly exquisite writing darling girl, deeply felt words and the emotion from within simply is awesome. I love it utterly utterly utterly.

Admittedly I love all your writing but, sometimes something especially you pops out the inkwell and this is a gem, something very special.

I wub you

Love and warm stuff
As always
Slushy

Breathe through the heat of our desire
Thy coolness and they balm
Let sense be dumb let flesh retire
Speak through the earthquake wind and fire

Sven

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since 1999-11-23

Posts 14937
East Lansing, MI USA

4 posted 2002-07-18 04:27 PM

great job Keth. . . you're finding your voice more and more. . .

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To the world, you may only be one person. But to one person, you may be the world.

BloomingRose
Member Elite

since 2000-08-09

Posts 3092
Florida

5 posted 2002-07-18 04:35 PM

This runs deep with emotion.
Very well written.

Deb

Madame Chipmunk
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since 2001-12-05

Posts 8296
Michigan

6 posted 2002-07-18 05:15 PM

This is so powerfully written, Keth...
but I know that this is pure poetry and you are certainly not the woman you describe in the poem.

~ sisterly hugs of warmth

Lyra

copyright2002 Lyra Nesius

"poetry is life distilled" Gwendolyn Brooks

mycafe
Senior Member

since 2002-05-23

Posts 584

7 posted 2002-07-18 09:12 PM

Kethry, very powerful emotions contained here. I hope you'll hear good echoes soon too! *hugs*

mycafe

Keep counting your blessings

Balladeer

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Member Empyrean

since 1999-06-05

Posts 25505
Ft. Lauderdale, Fl USA

8 posted 2002-07-18 09:55 PM

soft touch of a sledgehammer here, Keth....and very well done

nakdthoughts
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since 2000-10-29

Posts 19200
Between the Lines

9 posted 2002-07-19 12:40 PM

I don't want to be alone
with no strength to fight this war
and surrender to the echoes in my head...

I am fighting that same battle...and am trying to come out the survivor...
nicely done Keth
M

vandana

Member Patricius

since 1999-10-22

Posts 10463
USA

10 posted 2002-07-19 10:52 AM

enjoyed

Paul Wilson

Member Elite

since 2002-07-07

Posts 4711
United States

11 posted 2002-07-19 11:23 AM

Such deep and raw emotions.
Very enjoyable.

Neeraja
Senior Member

since 2002-06-22

Posts 812
The Netherlands

12 posted 2002-07-19 02:28 PM

Very sad... a lot of pain in this poem... very well written!!

Neeraja

suthern

Member Seraphic

since 1999-07-29

Posts 20723
Louisiana

13 posted 2002-07-24 12:12 PM

Those echoes sure can be persuasive, can't they? *S* I like this very much, Kethry. *S*

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