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BluesSerenade
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By the Seaside

0 posted 2002-07-18 02:04 AM


With a quiet calm
I've walked the peninsula

from all points of view
my perspective changes

the horizon receding back in time
dragging my feet through the changing tides

along the curve of the shoreline
bending endlessly for miles

wandering through my life along the way
across the water glistens

shimmering aquamarine sequins
adrift in thoughts of yesterday

white sails billow deep into the blue
merging with my memories

diving head first, curling beneath the waves
cruising carefree through my youth

swimming freestyle
to climb aboard my leisure

before the breeze picked up
and passed me by

making a splash ..and out of breath
reaching for a hand to pull me up  

laid out across the deck
cutting through the lapping rush of wind

closing my eyes beneath the sun
sailing through a slow mans land

circling around the peninsula
spans across today and brings me back again...

(a true story~ I grew up near the water and if a boat was sailing close enough I dove in and swam as fast as I could.   Love the challenge Serenity, and thanks for triggering my memories)


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serenity blaze
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1 posted 2002-07-18 02:11 AM


smiles...I love the answer, "lady blues" and the triggering of memories? You made the pleasure "all mine." Thank you.
BluesSerenade
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By the Seaside
2 posted 2002-07-18 02:57 AM


I'm so glad I done you proud!  
Thanks for leaving your sweet comments for me Serenity~

bsquirrel
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3 posted 2002-07-18 11:51 AM


Beautiful surface you crafted for us to swim on, Lori.

She said burn ... together.
-TON

nakdthoughts
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Between the Lines
4 posted 2002-07-18 11:56 AM


this was perfectly done...and nice images too

hugss
M

Mistletoe Angel
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5 posted 2002-07-18 01:31 PM




(smiles) Awwwwwwww, this is sooooo beautiful sweet friend, I love the drifting feel of this, it made me feel like swimming out and crash against the waves! (kiss on cheek) This is beautiful, sweet friend, I love it, we all love you so much! You have such a beautiful heart, sweet Lori, thank you for sharing!



May love and light always shine upon you!

Love,
Noah Eaton

"Underneath your clothes there's an endless story..."

Shakira

Madame Chipmunk
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Michigan
6 posted 2002-07-18 01:51 PM


shimmering aquamarine sequins
adrift in thoughts of yesterday

You did a wonderful job in telling your true story, Lori...
It must have been fun to grow up near the water.
~ slow sailing hugs

Lyra

copyright2002 Lyra Nesius

"poetry is life distilled"  Gwendolyn Brooks

Enchantress
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Canada eh.
7 posted 2002-07-18 03:09 PM


Ah Lori, You always bring a smile to my face
with what you write..
This is so pretty..so full of wonderful memories.
Excellent write..
~Hugs~

Mark Bohannan
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In the winds of Cherokee song
8 posted 2002-07-19 11:15 AM


Now if this isn't reason to answer the call of the deep then nothing is.  You did the challenge and yourself proud in this one.  Much enjoyed the verse and the insight as well.
the_loner_23
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Jacksonville, Florida, USA
9 posted 2002-07-19 11:41 AM


I love this a lot

Cold hands means a warm heart

Greeneyes
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In Your Poetic Mind
10 posted 2002-07-19 12:18 PM


hugsss you....this is just lovely....
Lauren~

The ocean looks like a thousand diamonds strewn across a blue blanket
I lean against the wind pretend I am weightless and in this moment I am happy

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