Open Poetry #21 |
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Penelope's Suitors |
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ecrivan Member Elite
since 2001-12-10
Posts 3923my own state ![]() |
Oh selected suitor you may offer the world exhibit 'love'... the stuff eternally put to test.... you know contention some of you are born with silver spoons... you know possessions and don coats aglow with golden threads you know the passion yet the fortunate choose correctly you know discretion if only perennial choices were as easy as jingling copper coins you know the explanation.. [This message has been edited by ecrivan (06-13-2002 04:58 PM).] |
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Pilgrimage Member Elite
since 2001-12-04
Posts 3945Texas, USA |
I love your rhyme scheme in this one, Martin. Well done. Nan |
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ecrivan Member Elite
since 2001-12-10
Posts 3923my own state |
Thanks for sharing, Nan ![]()
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baerlon Member
since 2000-01-14
Posts 197Youngstown and East Liverpool, Ohio, USA |
I like how you wrote this one, it flows nicely. thx for the read There's a peace inside us all |
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ecrivan Member Elite
since 2001-12-10
Posts 3923my own state |
I like the message that is woven into the text..and used this Greek legend as a backdrop, thanks for sharing ![]()
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Madame Chipmunk Member Rara Avis
since 2001-12-05
Posts 8296Michigan |
This is so beautifully done, Martin...it carries a very important message and I love the rhyme scheme. ![]() Lyra |
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ThisDiamond Member Rara Avis
since 2002-02-22
Posts 9353Michigan, USA |
I always enjoy the topics you choose, challenging and poignant. I have noted a sharp edge, somewhat unemotional account(I think pragmatic) kind of dialogue to your style. Very interesting and refreshing. What is so clearly evident, is that the poet is never unemotional. Well done. ThisDiamond |
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ecrivan Member Elite
since 2001-12-10
Posts 3923my own state |
Hi Diamond, I'm at stage when I want some socio-philosophical arguements to color my poems..they take on this unemotional charge making them more analytical then my earlier writes. Rhyming is now secondary to message..thanks for sharing your observations.
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ecrivan Member Elite
since 2001-12-10
Posts 3923my own state |
Hi Lyra, there's a message there, yes...thanks to the lady that was courted when her hubby went off to battle.
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