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devina
Member Elite

since 1999-10-28

Posts 3539
Cali

0 posted 2002-07-17 02:23 PM

Feed me sanity
through the crack
in the door-
Turn my tears
to raindrops
~let me pour~

Suffice my fears
with the wisdom
of your words-
Rainbow my pain-
~color my hurt~

Build me a shell
of security-
Bless my insides
with stability
Sensation my love-
(please)
~cradle my intensity~

Strike my flame
with purity swell-
Crawl into my heart,
dwell
dwell
dwell

Dwell within me…

Open arms can be the most fragile in the world...

Opeth
Senior Member

since 2001-12-13

Posts 1543
The Ravines

1 posted 2002-07-17 02:26 PM

This I truly enjoyed...the structure, the cadence and rhyme was very good...not only that, the subject matter was interestsing and handled in a sensical manner.

Mistletoe Angel

Member Empyrean

since 2000-12-17

Posts 32816
Portland, Oregon

2 posted 2002-07-17 02:32 PM

(big hugggssssss) Oh Tanya, this is soooooo beautifully heartfelt, sweet friend, I'm sorry you're feeling glum but I know soon you will find all the love you ndesire to bring rainbows to your heart! (kiss on cheek) This is gorgeous, sweet friend, we all love you so much! You have such a beautiful heart, sweet Tanya, thank you for sharing!

May love and light always shine upon you!

Love,
Noah Eaton

"Underneath your clothes there's an endless story..."

Shakira

Gentle Spirit
Member Patricius

since 2000-10-09

Posts 13989

3 posted 2002-07-17 02:34 PM

damn Tanya, simply outstanding work!!
more~
please? hugs

Enjoy life, this is NOT a dress rehearsal.

{on the wings of words are spirits fly...and our souls are free~me}

the_loner_23
Member Ascendant

since 2002-06-08

Posts 5479
Jacksonville, Florida, USA

4 posted 2002-07-17 02:39 PM

Awesome work as usual

Cold hands means a warm heart

BloomingRose
Member Elite

since 2000-08-09

Posts 3092
Florida

5 posted 2002-07-17 02:43 PM

Very good poem.

Deb

Charisma

Member Ascendant

since 2000-09-30

Posts 5906
lost in blue pages

6 posted 2002-07-17 04:30 PM

superb piece....enjoyed it very much!!!

Charisma

Sven

Member Laureate

since 1999-11-23

Posts 14937
East Lansing, MI USA

7 posted 2002-07-17 05:14 PM

ah. . . a plea. . .

well heard. . .

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To the world, you may only be one person. But to one person, you may be the world.

ambermize
Member

since 2001-04-21

Posts 157
California

8 posted 2002-07-18 03:24 AM

OH tanny this was a good one....after I FINALLY made it in here...

(it took a lil of that though)

my lil...randy sis and all..
love you....
*kisses* (for caiya of course) !!!!!

A heart can only truly break, once it learns to love completley.

mycafe
Senior Member

since 2002-05-23

Posts 584

9 posted 2002-07-18 03:42 AM

Oh devina, I was really tempted to copy your entire poem and paste it here, to tell you I loved all of it! Very nice!!

mycafe

Keep counting your blessings

tracie66
Member Elite

since 2000-01-18

Posts 4713
Australia

10 posted 2002-07-18 06:20 AM

Hi dear Davina

tis is a superb write, I enjoyed it's flow and the increbible lines, well penned my friend, well done.
~hugs~
Tracie

Love is the life of the soul...
It is the harmony of the universe

Sudhir Iyer
Member Ascendant

since 2000-04-26

Posts 6943
Mumbai, India : now in Belgium

11 posted 2002-07-18 06:43 AM

Ah! This is wonderful...

Regards,
Sudhir

Kit McCallum

Administrator

Member Laureate

since 2000-04-30

Posts 14774
Ontario, Canada

12 posted 2002-07-18 07:05 AM

I loved the flow and pace of this poem Devina .. beautifully done, much enjoyed!

Best wishes,
/Kit

Magnus

Member Laureate

since 2001-10-10

Posts 14135
South Carolina, USA

13 posted 2002-07-18 10:12 PM

Very well done and great intensity....Nice one Tanya......

bsquirrel

Member Rara Avis

since 2000-01-03

Posts 7855

14 posted 2002-07-18 11:30 PM

Wow, Devina, this poem reads almost as if you read my challenge for dark but decided to post it in the wrong place.

Oh well, I'm sure it's getting better play here anyway.

And, then again, you could've written this long before my challenge came to be.

Cool poem.

Too Many Smileys

She said burn ... together.
-TON

Duncan
Member Ascendant

since 2001-08-07

Posts 5455

15 posted 2002-07-18 11:41 PM

I thought it was Mike's challenge, too. And though, I'm not a big fan of the rainbow theme, you did it very well. Enjoyed this alot!

One blaze of glory - glory
find
glory
in a song that rings true
truth like a blazing fire
an eternal flame

Jonathan Larson

nakdthoughts
Member Laureate

since 2000-10-29

Posts 19200
Between the Lines

16 posted 2002-07-19 12:31 PM

beautiful..I can't add anything to whats already been said...

*s
M

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