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isle of the lost (Alcatraz) |
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Dark Stranger Member Patricius
since 2001-03-19
Posts 13631West Coast 
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she rises from frisco's bleakened bay like an anguished boil seeped from choly skin eruption's putrid conjure from the dark side ofman to decay the minds and punish God's unforgiven their sins hotel for the damned, paid in full the rent gathered from what evil was raped from time receipted with lonely and sung as hymns of dirge 'til devil winds would not erase the signs when night rides by on her hollow horse her gnashing grins no promise of tomorrow to the starving ears then, she is the banshee laugh that slivers the bones and slides them under skin she rattles her chains to haunt sleep starved minds and leaves embers under eyes to goad astray to face the salt of lonely sprinkled in their gaze with sulfur stings of empty sight at lightless of day morning rides a pale horse, then she is the granite andthe dark grooved seams she is the voiceless sound, the cloak of cold wet through the skin and wrapped in dreamless dreams she pulls the memory marrow spreading it like dung as lucifer sends his tears and heartless chest panting he is the jealous jestor of pain he didn't create, the solitary torment that was without his inventing for the dead men he couldn't credit as his whim, his tears are ice slick sliding like nose wet down cancer rust on bars to pool as stenching dust riding whirlwinds round the cells as rat voiced pets and the bird man still whistles for the broken wings at dawn ©dark [This message has been edited by Dark Stranger (07-16-2002 04:51 PM).] |
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the_loner_23 Member Ascendant
since 2002-06-08
Posts 5479Jacksonville, Florida, USA |
I like it Cold hands means a warm heart |
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Sunshine
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Member Empyrean
since 1999-06-25
Posts 63354Listening to every heart |
I have been there in the harbor cold mist of morning rising the bleak entered my bones and to this day, has not left... good. very, very good.... |
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Enchantress Member Empyrean
since 2001-08-14
Posts 35113Canada eh. |
Dark~Your vivid imagery took me there.. although never have I seen it in person. I am sure you penned it perfectly. 'Well done' is an understatement! Enjoyed the visit, but, I wouldn't like to live there. ~Hugs~ ~Somewhere in my heart I'm always |
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Dark Stranger Member Patricius
since 2001-03-19
Posts 13631West Coast |
loner 1..thanks for your read and review, much appreciated sunshine, thanks lil lady, that place sucks, but it needed painting so..)(grin) Ms Enchantress....don't go if you can keep from it.it never gets over being damp and feeling like someone's soul is left behind, thanks for the read and reply |
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Mistletoe Angel 
since 2000-12-17
Posts 32816Portland, Oregon |
  BRAVO!!! Oh my gosh, you describe this place soooo wonderfully, sweet friend, this is excellent, this is indeed haunting compared to your usual style but excellent! (big hugggsssssss) Kudos to you, sweet friend, we all love you so much!  May love and light always shine upon you! Love, Noah Eaton "Underneath your clothes there's an endless story..." |
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Martie
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Member Empyrean
since 1999-09-21
Posts 28049California |
DS I think there are souls left behind there in those damp creases that hold unspeakable. Such a vivid paint with dark color and goosebumps. I used to live with that view across the dark water. |
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Goodknight Member Elite
since 2002-06-15
Posts 2386Ohio, USA |
DS - powerfully written my friend - used to live near there and took lots of people to visit - I am sure most felt they took some of that "darkness" with them when they left. Paul |
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wranx Member Elite
since 2002-06-07
Posts 3689Moved from a shack to a barn |
I much admire your work It always leaves me spellbound ~wranx I have great faith in Humanity...It's just most of the Humans, I'm not too keen on. E.F.Rose |
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Bridget Shenachie Senior Member
since 2002-01-23
Posts 1056Kansas USA |
Amazing imagery. Picture clear. Made me feel as though I had been there. I haven't. Shenachie |
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brian sites Senior Member
since 2002-06-25
Posts 1475usa |
shew! I'm headed there in three weeks for vacation. read your warning, but I've got to see what I've heard so much about. your excellent poem will be fresh in memory thanks for the tour BS. I never aimed at reality; I aimed at truth. --Orson Welles |
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Dark Stranger Member Patricius
since 2001-03-19
Posts 13631West Coast |
noah....thanks sir...sure appreciate you ms martie, thanks lil lady friend for your reads and contimplation paul, thanks my friend, you are too kind wranx, total thank you city my friend bridget, thanks for the read and comments, much appreciated brian..YES please do visit the "rock", go early morning tour if you can.....or last one out in the afternoon. something the about the view of the city from there gives you even more of a hopeless feeling. thanks for the read sir |
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JamesMichael Member Empyrean
since 1999-11-16
Posts 33336Kapolei, Hawaii, USA |
Excellent writing...James |
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