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Eight Ways of the Saints (Villanelle)
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Eight Ways of the Saints (Villanelle) |
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RSWells Member Elite
since 2001-06-17
Posts 2533
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Now gentle Love you guide us in your reign which rules a night whose stars at last align and tiers of passion mirror from it's pane Parched, featureless lone landscape of the plain when winds of oaths, rapt thunder, light entwine, now gentle, Love you guide us in your rain A past too often wasted, spent in vain now forwards to a night where two combine and tears of passion mirror from it's pain Emotions run, wild horses through our veins spent, flared nostrals I whinny near equine now gentle Love, you guide us in your rein Moon who moves the oceans, as this night wanes, hope's passed to Sun with it's reflective shine and tears of passion mirror from it's pane As gods not of this earth two souls ordain our share'd throne in throes of the devine, now gentle Love you guide us in your reign and tears of passion mirror from it's pain "Happy people have no history" - French Proverb |
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Decaflame Senior Member
since 2001-05-11
Posts 1635 |
You have made the concept of Love more than a gentleness, you have give it Life... |
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Martie
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Member Empyrean
since 1999-09-21
Posts 28049California |
Beautifully done, Richard! |
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Kethry Member Rara Avis
since 2000-07-29
Posts 9082Victoria Australia |
I love what you've done with the rain,reign, rein without changing the line. Fabulous Kethry Here in the midst of my lonely abyss, a single joy I find...your presence in my mind. Unknown |
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Music Maker Member
since 2002-07-07
Posts 152THE ORIGINAL !!!! |
Wow !!!! and more Wow !!!! Words fail me, but not you !!! Beautiful. Thank you, John Grass won't grow under feet that don't move. |
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Goodknight Member Elite
since 2002-06-15
Posts 2386Ohio, USA |
this is just great poetry - so many images and feelings to experience - I loved it - Paul |
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BloomingRose Member Elite
since 2000-08-09
Posts 3092Florida |
Intricate and beautiful. Loved it. Deb |
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Mysteria 
since 2001-03-07
Posts 18328British Columbia, Canada |
Richard, Richard, this was indeed one of your very best, the use of the three words in different spellings just shows how very clever you truly are and how you "think" when you write, and reading your poetry always is an exercise to see where your mind might have been while you were writingit, and are fun in themselves. However, to read something this splendid from you doesn't amaze me, it just makes me want to ask you for more. Since the villanelle actually originated in Italy where the men went to get away at a villa and connect with nature once more, how's about doing your speciality - NATURE! This was exquisite, and very clever as well. She is indeed one lucky girl!  Nothing means more to me than faith, family and my friends.  Proud Canadian [This message has been edited by Mysteria (07-16-2002 01:21 PM).] |
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Sven
since 1999-11-23
Posts 14937East Lansing, MI USA |
the saints of moon and sun hold fast to the heart. . . and this would be their song. . . superbly done Sir. . . --------------------------------------------------------- To the world, you may only be one person. But to one person, you may be the world. |
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Janet Marie Member Laureate
since 2000-01-22
Posts 18554 |
Now gentle Love you guide us in your reign which rules a night whose stars at last align and tiers of passion mirror from it's pane Parched, featureless lone landscape of the plain when winds of oaths, rapt thunder, light entwine, now gentle, Love you guide us in your rain ================================== Moon who moves the oceans, as this night wanes, hope's passed to Sun with it's reflective shine and tears of passion mirror from it's pane ================================= Richard this is outstanding...one of the best of this form Ive seen. The phrasing and language softens the strict structure of the rhyme and created a pure poetry meter, superb read aloud....often these poems read so sharp and rhyme contrived but you wrote above the format and made it look easy when its not. Also impressive is the imagery, as often that too gets lost to the rhyme scheme in these kinds of poems. You write with an elegant intelligence that showcases your obvious natural talent. Excellent poet sir  jm |
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Marshalzu
since 2001-02-15
Posts 2681Lurking |
I just love Villanelle's and this was no exception, thank you for sharing such a wonderful poem, I really enjoyed the read. |
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Mistletoe Angel
since 2000-12-17
Posts 32816Portland, Oregon |
 (big hugggssssssss) God Bless You, sweet friend, this is excellent, yes, yes, love can mirror all other things in the world for its essence is a little of everything compromised together and to live like a saint is to feel for one! (sigh) This is an excellent villanelle, sweet friend, we all love you so much! You have such a beautiful heart, sweet Richard, thank you for sharing!  May love and light always shine upon you! Love, Noah Eaton "Underneath your clothes there's an endless story..." |
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Mysteria
since 2001-03-07
Posts 18328British Columbia, Canada |
 Such a good example of great poetry I had to give it a bump!Nothing means more to me than faith, |
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