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Snore or Roar
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Snore or Roar |
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Seymour Tabin Member Empyrean
since 1999-07-07
Posts 31720Tamarac Fla 
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Snore or Roar Is it snore or resinous roar? That gnaws the inners of my core That rakes the embers of its dwell That opens up the door of hell. Ghosts of crass upheavals cast Phantoms heaving up the past Thunder bellowing through the hall Full of anger full of gall Up from doldrums rookery Bowling down periphery Hydra of my ID’s abide Swarming o’er the haunts of hide. The reflux of an acid sin A burning grim that stays within The clothing gone that had its charm And all that’s left is naked harm. There are no angels born this world We all grow up a little soiled. |
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Dark Stranger Member Patricius
since 2001-03-19
Posts 13631West Coast |
does that mean you were for the nets? enjoyed it sy..well done |
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Seymour Tabin Member Empyrean
since 1999-07-07
Posts 31720Tamarac Fla |
Dark Stranger I guess you could say that. LOL |
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Janet Marie Member Laureate
since 2000-01-22
Posts 18554 |
Up from doldrums rookery Bowling down periphery Hydra of my ID's abide Swarming o'er the haunts of hide. The reflux of an acid sin A burning grim that stays within The clothing gone that had its charm And all that's left is naked harm. There are no angels born this world We all grow up a little soiled. ================================== oh man!!! YOU DO KNOW how damn COOL this is, right? *shaking me head at you* Randy is in rare form in this Sy-babers and this rocks.... I am so digging the vocabulary and phrasing in this... "doldrums rookery" "Bowling periphery" "Hydra of my ID's abide" "The reflux of an acid sin" "The clothing gone that had its charm And all that's left is naked harm." Only you and Randy could turn the page, rage the stage,break out of the cage and reset the gauge with such clever rhymes!!! I love the yin and yang of it all... and those closing couplets...just take away my words. Very very cool Rant Stinkylove... tell Randy hes oh so dandy   *winkiewinkie*   |
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Seymour Tabin Member Empyrean
since 1999-07-07
Posts 31720Tamarac Fla |
JM, Randy dandy sends his love and said not to worry about the dove. WE were at each other the other day and this is the result. He keeps me on my toes and tickles my nose and often fakes he's indespose. But he does fly me when I ask so I can't be too mad. Your comment was a work of art. Winkiewikie Randy Stinky.  |
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Marsha
since 2000-07-10
Posts 7423Maidstone Kent England |
Seymour darling boy, it seems your soul needs a little soothing today, as always of course the style and internal rhythm are excellent. The content is powerful and well written, you never write anything that isn’t always perfect. Now about the soothing of your soul, I’m ever willing to stroke your soul darling boy, and I’m sure I’d enjoy it enormously. Wouldn’t I fit in well in a harem, don’t you wish you had one? As always you are a superb writer and I’m always awed by the clarity of the images you manage to draw within my mind. Fabulous writing I love it utterly utterly Don’t rage against the fated way Flow into life and live each day Take from your soul each single taste Give yourself to living life’s race Don’t face your days filled with pain Remember love answers truths name With hope by your side you’ll prevail And life won’t be a long travail Don’t let your fears hold you back In time you’ll find the will you lack You have to give yourself a chance To enjoy life’s sprightly dance This really is utterly utterly excellent writing Love and warm stuff As always Mushy    Breathe through the heat of our desire Thy coolness and they balm Let sense be dumb let flesh retire Speak through the eathquake wind and fire Oh [This message has been edited by Marsha (06-13-2002 11:46 AM).] |
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Seymour Tabin Member Empyrean
since 1999-07-07
Posts 31720Tamarac Fla |
Marsha, Have I been neglecting you? You are a part of my harem. Each comment a story of a thousand nights. |
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Enchantress Member Empyrean
since 2001-08-14
Posts 35113Canada eh. |
You have a harem?? Can I be a member too? Wonderful morning read Sy! Loved it! ~Hugs as always~ ~Somewhere in my heart I'm always |
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Seymour Tabin Member Empyrean
since 1999-07-07
Posts 31720Tamarac Fla |
Enchantress Just a figure of speach. LOL |
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HopeS Member Elite
since 2000-12-22
Posts 4596Perth Western Australia |
Hey Sy , snoring or roaring I know one thing your poems are never boring Hope |
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VAS Member Rara Avis
since 2000-11-16
Posts 7450Oregon |
Well, I came in immediately cuz I thought you were in a zany vein, like I, this morning. However, this is a very good, serious piece, Seymour. Enjoyed reading a lot! Whether on the shoal or on the shore, |
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Marsha
since 2000-07-10
Posts 7423Maidstone Kent England |
Seymour darling boy no you’ve not neglected me, if anyone has been neglected it’s me neglecting you, I’ll make up for it later wicked grin. Nancy he has a harem of course he has. And if you’ve very good I’ll plead for your admittance, but the entrance requirements are very stringent, I only got in because I cheated. I used charm and wine always useful in these circumstances. It is honestly a fabulous piece of writing I love it xx As always Mushy  Breathe through the heat of our desire |
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Seymour Tabin Member Empyrean
since 1999-07-07
Posts 31720Tamarac Fla |
HopeS, A charming retort. VAS, Thank you love. Marsha, You know you are one of my favorites. |
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suthern
since 1999-07-29
Posts 20723Louisiana |
This is excellent, Seymour... I especially love the closing couplet. *S* |
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ethome Member Patricius
since 2000-05-14
Posts 11858New Brunswick Canada |
Well partner ah ain't lookin to be a part of yer harem. But hell you old cowboy you...damn you, you can ryeit! Ah talk like this ahl the time on the range... "Up from doldrums rookery Bowling down periphery Hydra of my ID’s abide Swarming o’er the haunts of hide." This heah last line there tells me ya know it's brandin time. Ah'm brandin you the "Range Poet" This heah's gonna sound some naice out under the stars t'night! Git along little doggie.. You is Willie's brother ain't ya? Yep ah roars when ah snore too....Who'd a thunk to ryeit that! Damn yore good! s'long fer now pard! |
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Interloper
since 2000-11-06
Posts 8369Deep in the heart |
This is wonderful, Sy! |
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Seymour Tabin Member Empyrean
since 1999-07-07
Posts 31720Tamarac Fla |
Suthern, Thank you sweet. Ethome, You are a riot, thank you friend. Interloper, Thanks for the bump and reply. |
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Sven
since 1999-11-23
Posts 14937East Lansing, MI USA |
"the reflux of an acid sin" that's my favorite line. . . it says a lot. . . great job Sy. . . ---------------------------------------------------- To the world, you may only be one person. But to one person, you may be the world. |
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Seymour Tabin Member Empyrean
since 1999-07-07
Posts 31720Tamarac Fla |
Thank you Sven my friend. |
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Skyfire
since 2000-12-27
Posts 3381Riding |
Wait a minute... I was born an angel... Then I grew up. In all seriousness, this is lovely. Thanks for the read! |
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Seymour Tabin Member Empyrean
since 1999-07-07
Posts 31720Tamarac Fla |
Skyfire, It is for me to thank you for the read. |
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Madame Chipmunk Member Rara Avis
since 2001-12-05
Posts 8296Michigan |
There are no angels born this world We all grow up a little soiled. isn't that the absolute truth, Sy... Great poem  ~ snoring, roaring hugsLyra |
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Kethry Member Rara Avis
since 2000-07-29
Posts 9082Victoria Australia |
Seymour. J'tadore your roar in snore Keth Here in the midst of my lonely abyss, a single joy I find...your presence in my mind. Unknown |
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ecrivan Member Elite
since 2001-12-10
Posts 3923my own state |
amusing use of words..enjoy the poetic harem  |
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Mistletoe Angel
since 2000-12-17
Posts 32816Portland, Oregon |
(big hugggssssssss) Oh Seymour, this is so very true, sweet friend, we can be angels but we all have a little bit of dirt in us all that we long to clean before we can ever shine as bright as can be! (sigh) This is excellent, sweet friend, I love it, we all love you so much! You have such a beautiful heart, sweet Seymour, thank you for sharing! May love and light always shine upon you! Love, Noah Eaton "Underneath your clothes there's an endless story..." |
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Seymour Tabin Member Empyrean
since 1999-07-07
Posts 31720Tamarac Fla |
Lyra, Thanks for the snoring roaring hugs. Keth, I think your pretty cute yourself. Ecivan, Enjoyed the comment. Noah, Where have you been? Thank you. |
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Cerenity Member Elite
since 2000-02-16
Posts 2637Escondido-California |
Hi Sy, I read a master piece like this one and know why this place keeps calling me back, so very nice to be reading you. Love, Cerenity |
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