Open Poetry #21 |
first time wakeboarding |
kaile
since 2000-02-06
Posts 5146singapore |
my arms strengthless, as if steel rods are implanted piercing numbness, when i try to clench my fists, an acute reminder of the events of yesterday out at sea, under the mercy of choppy blackish waves and sunburning skin, i tried darnest to stand upright i grined smugly for five seconds, then Poof! the magic's gone and off i fell, headfirst into the waters Too late to conceal my grin, i drank (too much) salt water It poached my sense of well-being, left me shrivelled, dying of thirst alone in the middle of nowhere, (let's ignore technicalities here) caught up in the marvels of the benevolent sun, waving trees and the occassional plane, i felt liberated and stress-free, contributed to the waters(read: peed) and anxiously waited for the boat to come around to allow me the chance to F A L L again ... [This message has been edited by faterider (07-14-2002 12:08 PM).] |
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Mistletoe Angel
since 2000-12-17
Posts 32816Portland, Oregon |
WOW!!! Oh my gosh, I love the diversity of tones in this, sweet friend, it's as if first of all you are glum then you go for a swim and now you have relieved yourself of the stress and am starting to have a good time! (smiles) I love both the seriousness and the humor of this, sweet friednd, it is excellent, we all love you so much! You have such a beautiful heart, sweet Heng, thank you for sharing! May love and light always shine upon you! Love, Noah Eaton "Underneath your clothes there's an endless story..." |
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the_loner_23 Member Ascendant
since 2002-06-08
Posts 5479Jacksonville, Florida, USA |
Awesome Cold hands means a warm heart |
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catalinamoon
since 2000-06-03
Posts 9543The Shores of Alone |
Haha, that was a really fun little ride on the waves with you. Sandra |
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JamesMichael Member Empyrean
since 1999-11-16
Posts 33336Kapolei, Hawaii, USA |
Keep riding and have fun...James |
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kaile
since 2000-02-06
Posts 5146singapore |
Noah, thanks for your comment..i have tried to write in a different style for this poem...glad that you enjoyed it and that my feeble attempts have worked for you... loner_23, thanks! Sandra, oh yes, wakeboarding is great fun, albeit very heavy on the pocket...i spent about US$25 for a 4hr joy ride ..trying desperately to save money again so that i can yet again experience "fun little ride on the waves"... thanks James for reading...you can rest assured that i will follow your advice! |
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